Let's write a story! (Current title The Object)

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I held Cari in my arms, as we sneaked out the emergency exit for fear of attracting attention.

[T.O.L.I.]

I knew from one of the maps of the area i had been looking at that the horpital was about a mile east "oh please be ok please!" I sniffled as I ran with Cari

[Nathan]

(((toli! we should do roleplay on it together! Ill make a topic for it....))))

[T.O.L.I.]

((that would be fun!!!!))

[Nathan]

ya. I made the topic. its in general

[T.O.L.I.]

((i posted))

[Riley]

Jay checked her in, telling the secretary that we were from out of town. As for how Cari hit her head, he explained that by saying that she slipped and hit her head.
The doctor could clearly see that our story didn't check out, but he seemed to let it past. I waited with bated breath as they gave her stitches.
"Sir." One of the doctors tapped me on the shoulder. I had been praying for Cari the entire time.
"Sir, your friend here, she's had huge amounts of blood loss. We're going to need to do a blood transplant."
Elsie paled at the words. If we did a blood transplant, we'd be in the records that the cops could access.

[T.O.L.I.]

"ok" I gulped "From who?"

[Riley]

"Well," the doctor continued. "We'd have to see all of your blood types, and hope that one of yours matches hers."

[T.O.L.I.]

NO! I thought that means they would have every single one of us on file! but to save Cari......."alright" jay whispered before I couls decide.

I looked at him 'thankyou' I mouthed.

[Nathan]

((wait?? who did jay check in as? DId he say his name? Or make one up? htis is why i think we should improve our writing))))))

[T.O.L.I.]

((jay checked Crai into the hospital and now they have to get theyre blood taken...all of them!))

[Nathan]

((i know but if he used a pen name then they wouldnt be able to track them. SO it makes a differance!)))

[Riley]

((Sorry, I can edit it. I think that maybe we should go through all of it, end it, edit it, then post it in a different topic. Then, if there's any changes people want to make, they can point those out.))

[Nathan]

((OH i know!!!!!!!!!))))

Suddenly the door smashed open and a man I recognized as thomas stormed in. "Ill do it!" he said.

((lol i thought it needed a twist :) )))

[T.O.L.I.]

((wait whos thomas?!))

[Riley]

((Wait, I thought Thomas was still arrested??? Maybe a little on in the story they could break him out...or were you kidding? Sorry, I have a hard time knowing whether people are kidding or not.))

[Nathan]

((lol the guy in the little shack who made pancakes!)))

[Riley]

((Remember the old dude? We decided to name him Thomas.))

[T.O.L.I.]

((oh, I thought he was arrested?))

[Nathan]

((YAY! this is my 100th topic!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!)))))

[Riley]

((Yeah, he was. What the heck are you doing Nathan?))

[Nathan]

((EXACTLY!!!!!!!! LOL! HE BROKE OUT OF JAIL!!!!!!!!!!!i mean its a little to quick and i guess im a hipocrit [dont know how to spell!:] for saying we should improve writing. BUT I STILL LIKE THE TWIST!!!))))))

[T.O.L.I.]

((yea he got arrested!!))

[T.O.L.I.]

((OH!!!!))

[T.O.L.I.]

"are you their guardian?" the doctor questioned

"yes!" he called out a little too quickly and he walked into the blood taking room with the doctor, as he walked by he winked and mouthed 'ill explain later'

[Riley]

((Do you think that before that you could switch to Thomas' point of view and show him breaking out? Please, just to make more sense.))

[Nathan]

((p.s. u werent very exited about my 100th topic! lol
jk but i made a coment in Found)))

[Nathan]

((maybe))

[T.O.L.I.]

((well i think my post will fix it up, he'll explain it later to them!))

[Nathan]

(( lets do that together on the next chapter)))

[Riley]

((Okay. Thnks guys.))

[T.O.L.I.]

((wait no! read my post, its only a few above it elxplans it!))

[Nathan]

((ya. lets end this chapter RIGHT before he explains it to them. It would end "well.......". NEXT CHAPTER: yadda yadda yadda. K?)))

[Riley]

((K. Sounds good. But, maybe we should divide it into chapters when we edit it.))

[T.O.L.I.]

Thomas sat down lightly on one of the stools in the room.

[Nathan]

((actully do u mind if i change ur thing toli????

Thomas grunted as the man took his blood. A rattle came from the waiting room as the doctor looked up at elsie who had just spilled a glass of water. "ughh ill be right back" he said. THomas looked at the computer screen and saw that his blood didnt match. He quickly pulled up to the computer and got to work.....

when the doctor came back he looked at the man in the chair. "oh right!" he said. He looked at the computer screen. "Perfect match!" he said.

((i thought that Thomas could have stolen some info from the doctors computer and printed it to a secret location.)))

[T.O.L.I.]

((K! ill edit mine!))

[Riley]

((Wait, if he didn't have the right blood type then Cari could be in serious danger!))

[Nathan]

((k thnx. Im glad u liked my idea!)))

[Riley]

((Well, I like your idea but it's medically incorrect. Sorry, but I have this thing where I'm a real stickler if things in a book aren't true or inaccurate.))

[Nathan]

((why isnt it correct?????)))))

[T.O.L.I.]

((gtg! dont do too much without me jk! bi!))

[Riley]

((If he gave her the wrong type of blood, it could mess up her system and potentially kill her. If both his and her blood types were the same, he could just change both of their blood types into different ones.))

[Nathan]

((lol. sry! ill fix it up! Trust me)))))

[Riley]

((Okay. I was just worried that we'd have to kill off Cari. Tom would be devastated.))

[Nathan]

the doctor picked up the bag of blood and took it to the room where cari was. THomas pushed everything over, trying to cause another distraction. "What now!!!" the doctor screamed. Thomas's chair fell over and he slid a note across the floor over to Tom. Tom picked it up and read: 'tom, go to the blood storage room and find Cari some matching blood. Then we have got to get out of here! P.S. her blood is _______' Her type of blood was smeared. he would just have to guess. He raced to the Blood Storage room and looked around for some blood. He pulled some B negative and left. He ran back into the room with Cari and quickly switched the blood.

((how is that?? And i have a special twist on how he picks the right one!!!!Ill tell u later. P.S. it involves ESP! Well, sort of.... :D )))))

[Riley]

((Hmmm...interesting...Maybe we should put Cari in a coma, and she communicates with Tom via ESP!!!))

[Nathan]

((lo! that would rock!!!!!!!! But here: ill give u a spoiler lol.

We have to come up with wat the object is right? So I was thinking that if u have the object u can do things telepathicly, but its stronger if u love somone! ((lol that last part was tacky but thats wat i was thinking)))

[Riley]

((Hmmmm...maybe it's an experimental device? And has really strange side effects... and the government was planning on using it on enemies, but Elsie wants to use it to find her sister's boyfriend...hmmmm))