A Poem by Julia!

[Julia]

Okay here is a little ditty I wrote in about a half an hour, tell me what you think of it. anything at all.
All Criticism IS Welcome. Whatever you have to say, say it.

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The Irony of It All:


http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

[1luvbooks]

Okay. First of all: great topic and well written! I liked that line at the end about rotting from the inside out. I feel like that sometimes- I could really relate to your poem. So, good topic, and well written, BUT there were a few lines that didn't quite...sound good. I don't know what it was about them, but some just were not that well done.
Ex: "Violently sobbing, wishing I was blind" It's good in and of itself, but with the flow of the poem, it's a little too long. Shorten it and it would sound better ad fit with the rest of the poem.
Also, one spelling error: " I so pose" I am pretty sure you meant 'suppose'...Other then that, good ideas, well written, fun to read, good spelling, good grammar....
My verdict?
GOOD JOB!! I really enjoyed this poem.
Hope this was useful...

[1luvbooks]

By the way, Ingrid, how do you post your writing here? I couldn't figure it out. (I mean post as in, post for critiquing like Julia did, not post in general.)

[1luvbooks]

Thanks!