Writers Unite discussion

13 views
Writers A-G > Aqsa's writing(Poetry)...please read and comment

Comments Showing 1-16 of 16 (16 new)    post a comment »
dateDown arrow    newest »

message 2: by Amina (new)

Amina  (journalistam) Oh gosh, these are very, very good indeed! They flow so perfectly; you're a natural poet. I suck at poetry :( So I appreciate it more... when poets unleash their talents.

My favourite one is Reminiscence. It is true and very thought-provoking. You've deleivered a very positive message :)

Well Doe, Friend!


message 3: by Aqsa (new)

Aqsa | 9 comments OMG thank you so much!!!you have no idea how much that means to me....thanks again...


message 4: by Amina (new)

Amina  (journalistam) Your welcome :)


message 5: by Aqsa (new)

Aqsa | 9 comments UNTITLED

Do you ever feel lost?
lost,in a giant maze....
in a never ending darkness...
in a breathe taking limbo....

Do you ever feel trapped?
trapped
in a tunnel..
with no head or tail..
with no ray of light
to guide you or
take you out.

Have you ever felt,
like a drowning man..
with oceans of water around you..
and no hope..
to get out..
of this blanket of water above you.

Do you sometimes feel..
moving behind the time..
like ..you are eons away..
and with no hint about future..
unaware of things..
and people around you.

Have you ever really felt...
despair..
lime,seeing a person die,
die,right in front of your eyes..
but
there's absolutely nothing..
nothing you can do.

If you have felt like a
lost,trapped,drowning and desperate person,
you know,probably..
you know that
nothing can be done in times
times, like these..
on your own.
but surrendering yourself
to mightier power..
power like ALMIGHTY
helps,otherwise
you are lost and trapped..
forever..with no hope of salvation


message 6: by Rosalyn (new)

Rosalyn Leigh (t-rose) nice job aqsa! im not sure that i've read your work before, but i certainly did just now. this is destined to be unforgettable. keep doing what you do =)


message 7: by Aqsa (new)

Aqsa | 9 comments aww..thanks a lot ..it really means a lot to me!!


message 8: by Aqsa (new)

Aqsa | 9 comments MY LAND OF PURE

These days this thought constantly troubles me.
What is happenening in my country?
My land is not the land of pure anymore
Its not the dream of Quaid nor Yar Jhang’s roar.

The senseless murders, the brutal killings,
Innocent people are killed for just penny or shillings,
Those bomb blasts,that mass slaughter
This is not ISLAM but a disease like cancer.

Humanity has lost it’s voice here now,
Intolerance has reached its peak somehow,
This insensitivity towards the pain of others,
Has turning the deaf ear ever been the answer?

We need to unite thats the only solution.
Forget the differences and bring an evolution,
The revivel of Islamic teachings should be the cause,
Its the only way to bring back our glorious past.




PS:I wrote this poem when conditions of my country(Pakistan) were really bad.Target killings were a common (not that they aren't now)...but i really was depressed at the time i wrote it..


message 9: by Rosalyn (last edited Sep 24, 2011 03:21PM) (new)

Rosalyn Leigh (t-rose) wow...this is daunting and sobering...its a shame that you had to deal with this. at the same time, you bring imagery to the table in such a refreshing and concise way, in spite of the emotion you must have been feeling at the time you wrote it. you did a really great job.


message 10: by Aqsa (new)

Aqsa | 9 comments thank you!


message 11: by Aqsa (new)

Aqsa | 9 comments Sometimes I lose hope about a bright future because situation here(karachi) is unpredictable..Its because of political parties that we are facing all this...they have their own reasons to kill and loot which is just so sad!!


message 12: by ¢σσкιєѕ (new)

¢σσкιєѕ | 197 comments Mod
Hey, kiddo reach for the stars you got a great Talent and keep it up! HAHA pakistan Zindabad!


message 13: by Aqsa (new)

Aqsa | 9 comments thank you!!and yes pakistan zindabad!!


message 14: by Aqsa (new)

Aqsa | 9 comments WHEN I PRAY

When I pray,I feel closer to God ,
And feel the connection which I thought was lost.
My heart,it feels lot lighter after I pray,
The inner satisfaction I get is enough to make my day.

Guilt,loss and burden build up in my chest,
On those days when I prefer ro rest
my days, my nights vanish in oblivion and nothingness,
If and only if I forget to pray


message 15: by ¢σσкιєѕ (new)

¢σσкιєѕ | 197 comments Mod
^ nice :)


message 16: by [deleted user] (new)

I love the comparision you make to God and your heart. It's like both are the same thing.
Beautiful.


back to top