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message 1: by T.O.L.I. (new)

T.O.L.I. (taleoflostink) | 1770 comments I need help deciding whether I should finish this story? heres the description:

"Do not look up.....
You must make them think.....
There is no other place.....
You would rather be......."

Sam was going through the test, like everyone else who was 14. The test to see if you would be of the elite, or the lowly who clean up after the elite and take care of thier homes. All was going well until he meets a group of others who are of a secret society who are trying to take down the test. Now sam is stuck in an intricate web of deciet and lies that he can not escape from.......

click on this to read the first chapter and tell me if i should continue.....

the link:
http://www.goodreads.com/story...


message 2: by Heather (new)

Heather  | 4 comments Hey, anybody and everybody, please read my "Baby Steps" story and tell me how you like it!!! follow this link to read it:

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

Please read it and tell me what you think!!!


message 3: by Veronica, What the neck!? (new)

Veronica (v_a_b) | 2889 comments Mod
Taleosflink, that sounds like a really good description. I will be sure to read your first chapter!


message 4: by Laina (new)

Laina (laineyru) Taleosfink, I just read the first chapter. Hmmm.... (that is a good hmmm indeed!) It left me wanting more, which is a good sign, no? I want to know why you're questioning not going on with this story? It could be absolutely awesome! And it probably will be. I love your writing style. It's almost mysterious, and the way the narrarater sees things is very interesting. I was just confused, though, is the narrarater (I can't spell tonight, sorry!) is a boy or a girl? But seriously, this is a book I would probably finish if I read just that first chapter.


message 5: by T.O.L.I. (new)

T.O.L.I. (taleoflostink) | 1770 comments ok so the first chapter is supposed to be completely insane and confusing.... thats wat i wanted to do and the narrarator (main character)is a boy


message 6: by T.O.L.I. (new)

T.O.L.I. (taleoflostink) | 1770 comments thank you eveybody for reading!!!!! it is always my dream to be a popular story on goodreads like brigids or sellas


message 7: by Silver (new)

Silver really? my dream is to outsell Christopher Paolini and to publish while I am fourteen, which means I have untill February 22nd, 2010 when I turn fifteen.


message 8: by T.O.L.I. (new)

T.O.L.I. (taleoflostink) | 1770 comments no thats just my really small dream! my real dream is to publish young and for many people to know my name


message 9: by Morgan (new)

Morgan (cheshire) | 181 comments You realize that most publishers won't even look at you unless you have some sort of collage degree? I was talking to a writer about this; aparently Paolini only got popular because someone with the New Yorker read it as a favor and said his kids liked it.


message 10: by Brigid ✩ (new)

Brigid ✩ | 5857 comments Mod
it helps to get a literary agent...


message 11: by Sella, ov vey! i haven't checked this group in months. >< (new)

Sella Malin | 4530 comments Mod
That sucks, Morgan...:(


message 12: by Laina (new)

Laina (laineyru) Well, getting published is all about connections. I talked to this sixteen year old who got published (it's not popular, but still...) and it was a friend of his uncle's who was a writer so showed it to his publisher. Go to writer's conferences and meet people! Do research on what kind of publisher you want, and don't give up! At least, that was the advice I got. Not that I'm published, but I'm only 14 and I still have a life ahead of me. Plus I don't have anything that I want published right now. :)


message 13: by T.O.L.I. (new)

T.O.L.I. (taleoflostink) | 1770 comments there are plenty of younger people published like i know this one series about birds was written and was on the new york times bestselar list.

and thanks for the advice everyone!


message 14: by Brigid ✩ (new)

Brigid ✩ | 5857 comments Mod
oh yeah that swordbird book... :P
yeah well i know my writing isn't perfect, but i'm still trying to get stuff published. we all have to start somewhere...


message 15: by T.O.L.I. (new)

T.O.L.I. (taleoflostink) | 1770 comments yea swordbird! never read them though...... im still gonna try to get published wen i have finished too


message 16: by Laina (new)

Laina (laineyru) i know that my writing won't be anywhere near perfect when I do try to get published... I just lack that confidence that anyone else would like my writing. :) The things I don't have finished yet are more promising. At least I'm getting better, no?


message 17: by Sella, ov vey! i haven't checked this group in months. >< (new)

Sella Malin | 4530 comments Mod
I'm wondering...Brigid, have you heard from the publisher that you sent Soul Stealer yet?


message 18: by Brigid ✩ (new)

Brigid ✩ | 5857 comments Mod
nope... it might take a few months... siiiigh.


message 19: by T.O.L.I. (new)

T.O.L.I. (taleoflostink) | 1770 comments chapter two of white walls!!!

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...


message 20: by Sella, ov vey! i haven't checked this group in months. >< (new)

Sella Malin | 4530 comments Mod
aww, okay. tell us when you do! :D


message 21: by Riley (new)

Riley (booksarecool) a few mistakes, but pretty cool.


message 22: by T.O.L.I. (new)

T.O.L.I. (taleoflostink) | 1770 comments YAY! can u comment on it?


message 23: by Brigid ✩ (new)

Brigid ✩ | 5857 comments Mod
i read it taleoflostink! it was awesome. ;D i think i left comments...


message 24: by Brigid ✩ (new)

Brigid ✩ | 5857 comments Mod
oh, and i will, sella. ;D


message 25: by T.O.L.I. (new)

T.O.L.I. (taleoflostink) | 1770 comments Thanks brigid another chapter should be coming soon.........


message 26: by Brigid ✩ (new)

Brigid ✩ | 5857 comments Mod
cool. ;D


message 27: by T.O.L.I. (new)

T.O.L.I. (taleoflostink) | 1770 comments So this is a new story that i am writing with my friend.

the story is based in modern day new york. There are a group of resurrectors (people who raise dead people's spirits and then place the spirit in another person's body so they will be able to control the person) these resurrectors have taken control of high government officials and police all over the world. No one notices. Other than three young teens.

Will they be able to save the world? or die?

Please review it please!

The link:
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...



message 28: by Riley (new)

Riley (booksarecool) So, Taleoflostink, you said you needed help, but with what? Besides some grammar and spelling mistakes, it's awesome. Oh, I'm going to put a comment on it as soon as I finish typing this I should probably stop right now.........


message 29: by T.O.L.I. (new)

T.O.L.I. (taleoflostink) | 1770 comments thanks soooo much! i just wanted feedback on how i could make it more interesting and such


message 30: by Toni (new)

Toni | 2 comments hey, i'm pretty new to this whole thing, but i have one chapter of a book up already. So, if you guys wouldn't mind reading it, i'd appreciate it, cause i don't know what people think of my writing.here's the link. ( i think)

http://www.goodreads.com/search/searc...


message 31: by Brigid ✩ (new)

Brigid ✩ | 5857 comments Mod
cool. ;D i will get to reading it... eventually... after i read all the other ppl's writing that i promised to read. XD lol.


message 32: by T.O.L.I. (last edited Aug 11, 2008 01:28PM) (new)

T.O.L.I. (taleoflostink) | 1770 comments Chapter two of ressurrection!!!

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...


message 33: by Brigid ✩ (new)

Brigid ✩ | 5857 comments Mod
hooray! ;D


message 34: by T.O.L.I. (new)

T.O.L.I. (taleoflostink) | 1770 comments hhehe


message 35: by T.O.L.I. (new)

T.O.L.I. (taleoflostink) | 1770 comments now my friend has to write his!!!!!!!! but that will take a little while cause we are bothe pretty busy!!!


message 36: by Brigid ✩ (new)

Brigid ✩ | 5857 comments Mod
okay. i'll be waiting... ;D


message 37: by T.O.L.I. (new)

T.O.L.I. (taleoflostink) | 1770 comments thanks it nice to have people wanting my writing!!

;0


message 38: by T.O.L.I. (new)

T.O.L.I. (taleoflostink) | 1770 comments chapter 3 of white walls!

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...


message 39: by Brigid ✩ (new)

Brigid ✩ | 5857 comments Mod
awesome :D


message 40: by T.O.L.I. (new)

T.O.L.I. (taleoflostink) | 1770 comments yay! more people to read white walls thanks! ;0


message 41: by Brigid ✩ (new)

Brigid ✩ | 5857 comments Mod
i just read it and it was really cool! i hope there will be more. :)


message 42: by T.O.L.I. (new)

T.O.L.I. (taleoflostink) | 1770 comments oooo of course there will be more! hopefully very soon


message 43: by Brigid ✩ (new)

Brigid ✩ | 5857 comments Mod
yay!!!


message 44: by T.O.L.I. (new)

T.O.L.I. (taleoflostink) | 1770 comments chapter 4 of white walls!!!!

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...


message 45: by Kenzie (new)

Kenzie | 2838 comments Okay. Since I haven't posted anything new in...I don't even know how long I posted the beginnings to two new (old) stories. Let me know what you think and whether or not I should continue with them.

http://www.goodreads.com/story/list/6... (they're the untitled ones)


message 46: by T.O.L.I. (new)

T.O.L.I. (taleoflostink) | 1770 comments new chapter of ressurrection!

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...


message 47: by T.O.L.I. (new)

T.O.L.I. (taleoflostink) | 1770 comments YAY! I finnally have another chapter of white walls!!!!!!!!!!!!

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...


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