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Jul 20, 2011 08:04PM
I have a sudden urge to bake cookies >.>
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Hello all, is everyone still baking? It's so quiet today.
Morning SharonAs you can see we had an attack of the munchies earlier! How are you today? I think I have a cold!
We are going to look at a renovated cottage this afternoon to give Alain an idea of what his house will look like when its finished!
Yes I could see that, made me hungry when I switched on this morning - lo0lDoes Alain not have any ideas for his house at the moment then?
I am in a writing mood at the moment, already wrote about 700 words in to Angels Diary and if I can get away with it, will aim for at least 3000 today. Naughty I know, also listening to rock music as I need to drown out the whining temps voice. Death be on the cards!
Maybe better to get a cold now rather then when you are on your holiday, that will not be much fun for you.
Sharon wrote: "Yes I could see that, made me hungry when I switched on this morning - lo0lDoes Alain not have any ideas for his house at the moment then?
I am in a writing mood at the moment, already wrote..."
No I know, sorry my computer decided not to tell me I had mail!
We have plans drawn up by an architect, I think he just wants to look at the builders work, and if you saw the house now (I'll send a picture through on e- mail then you will get some idea of the work involved)
Its good about the writing I am editing and tweaking all I have written on the second book then I will know how much I actually have to write instead of guessing!
Death be on the cards sounds like a good title or a quote for a character!
I think they finished baking they wore themselves out!
Rose is feeling left out, all say ah!
Hmmm it appears I too am not getting mail saying there are comments or updates - something is very strange!
@Jessica
I read the first 4 chapters of your story (didn't have enough time to finish the rest) and saw that you wanted some constructive criticism. Here's mine:
Natalie is 12. I don't think she would write in such an adult way. I'm not sure how old you are, but you're writing makes Natalie seem like a much older girl. Her writing is older, that is, but her emotions are not.
I really liked your story!!!
I read the first 4 chapters of your story (didn't have enough time to finish the rest) and saw that you wanted some constructive criticism. Here's mine:
Natalie is 12. I don't think she would write in such an adult way. I'm not sure how old you are, but you're writing makes Natalie seem like a much older girl. Her writing is older, that is, but her emotions are not.
I really liked your story!!!
@Jessica
Here's something else:
Natalie is going through a lot of emotional stress, but the way she writes is as if she's writing about someone else's life. She writes that she is angry, or upset, but she doesn't act like it. It's the difference between showing and telling, if you know what I mean.
Here's something else:
Natalie is going through a lot of emotional stress, but the way she writes is as if she's writing about someone else's life. She writes that she is angry, or upset, but she doesn't act like it. It's the difference between showing and telling, if you know what I mean.
Hi there Is anyone around? Amy winehouse is dead, what a waste 27 years old and drinks/drugs herself to death!
Ingrid wrote: ""knock, knock. I'M BAAACCCKK!"Anyways what's this you say about Winehouse? Oh yeah, to be honest I'm not surprised. She was asking for it. Didn't she go to rehab like the Lohans? If she did, ..."
Yes I agree but I liked her music, maybe stardom and fame is not good for you it goes to peoples' head's.
Yep freshly dead body cooling steadily! Sorry current novel has lots of cadavers!Yes but I don't do drugs, hell I don't like taking painkillers! And fame is a long way into the future I think!
I posted two Chapters of a coming novel. Take Three Blondes! click on my profile and scroll down to my writing.
Morning Sharon what you up too this grey and miserable morning?I have to go shopping, I hate shopping! Especially with Sophie in tow!
I have a nice surprise for the weekend coming though, Joanne and her husband and my grandson are coming for the weekend. They have a new car and want to give it a run.
That will be cool, so you can spoil your grandson and have an almost relaxing time - LOL
Sharon wrote: "That will be cool, so you can spoil your grandson and have an almost relaxing time - LOL"Did you get your latest invite I sent you? Splitter has already joined!
Yes thanks, looks good. I have accepted and will gave a look later. Thanks
Sharon wrote: "Yes thanks, looks good. I have accepted and will gave a look later. Thanks"No problems surprising what you fall over when you least expect it!
Sharon wrote: "Hiya all."Hiya
I was late in bed again! I nearly finished the editing and now I have the ending clear in my head. I had to read through to see what loose ends I left untied and I had to find somewhere to kill mother! The seventh candle! And it just popped into my head what is going to happen to Megan!
Sounds good to me. I didn't do much editing on mine, had a bit of a headache but might do some later today. I am doing boring accounts at the moment.
Sharon wrote: "Sounds good to me. I didn't do much editing on mine, had a bit of a headache but might do some later today. I am doing boring accounts at the moment."I went to see my friend from England this morning and then lunch I desperately need to clean the house but my back still hurts if I try and do to much.
Then I think you should put your feet up and relax. Watch some dross on tv the house can come later. ;o)
Sharon wrote: "Then I think you should put your feet up and relax. Watch some dross on tv the house can come later. ;o)"LOL if I sit ina comfy chair I'll probably nod off! I will have to do a bit of something each day between now and Friday!
Then a little it is, then you can nod off. LOL
Sharon wrote: "Then a little it is, then you can nod off. LOL"I like that idea!
The little ones are always the best :P
Sharon wrote: "The little ones are always the best :P"Yep, right well I decided on reading for half an hour LOL zzz's book will be enough to send me to sleep. New book established author so I'm told three major errors in the first two pages! Yesterday a car in a ravine changed from being an SUV (4x4) into a Porsche! Not bad going that I can hardly wait to see what she cocks up next!
Just who did she get to proof read is what I want to know!
What is the book and what genre? You shuld offer to proof read and earn some extra pocket money for your hols.
Sharon wrote: "What is the book and what genre? You shuld offer to proof read and earn some extra pocket money for your hols."Morning
Nah I'm too busy writing em and having to read my own stuff, anyways when I read a bit further she decided that it was a Porsche Cayenne SUV, having never heard of this car (American)so I will give her the benefit of the doubt but to an English person it looked like she had forgotten the name of the car.
The first two pages still have the three mistakes in and I have to keep going back and re- reading passages I'll persevere with this one but I won't buy any more of her books. It's a murder mystery I think combined with a recipe book! I kid you not!
Anyways I got down to work last night in getting my killer in place for his finale I'll set them on the road (so to speak) and then go back and tie up my loose ends and get mother to her spot in the candlelight and then curtains down!
Yep I think I'm going with a cliffhanger ending! Leaving it open should I ever feel the need to reincarnate my characters.
Now I like that. Cliffhangers always work well me, as you know from the Thin Blue Line. So apart from the loose ends, what have you got planned for today? I have a clinic to type up in a bit then I am not quite sure what I want to do this afternoon, either edit my story or just be damn right naughty - hee hee
Sharon wrote: "Now I like that. Cliffhangers always work well me, as you know from the Thin Blue Line. So apart from the loose ends, what have you got planned for today? I have a clinic to type up in a bit the..."I got to check my bank and then go into Pontivy and on to Guern to the Post office. This afternoon I want to go and wash a couple of my quilts ready for the weekend. It's a nice day today! Suns out for a change!
You are lucky, it is a little overcast here at the moment and I think it is time for some coffee and maybe a pain au chocolat! Just what the doctor ordered.
Sharon wrote: "You are lucky, it is a little overcast here at the moment and I think it is time for some coffee and maybe a pain au chocolat! Just what the doctor ordered."I just had an Almond croissant yummy the only one I can think of better is one with chocolate and almonds!
But oh the calories! TTYL
I know what you mean but I think I need the calories today for brain power. Well that is my excuse anyway ;o)
ooo yummy i <3 croissants!!!!
I had a waffle this morning...
M. wrote: "I had a waffle this morning..."I have to look twice at the last comment I was just about to put I know I waffle too sometimes and then I realised you meant the ones spread with home made chocolate fudge sauce made from butter and fresh cream and dark chocolate covered in sliced bannana then covered liberally with whipped cream drizzled with more yummy chocolate sauce and finally sprinkled with toasted flaked almonds.
Oh bum now I'm hungry!
Sharon wrote: "You just made me hungry now - LOL"I had an ice cream an exotic fruit cover one refreshing, I have a mosquito buzzing around in here and if it hasn't already got me it will be back later to try again. I pre-empted it though I took an anti histamine!
Going home now hun, speak to you later.
Sharon wrote: "Going home now hun, speak to you later."Okay have a nice evening!
Sharon wrote: "Hello all, how is everyone?"Hi hun I thought you were in M & M's world today?
I have been chasing my tail all day! TTYT
No next Thursday. What you been up to?
Sharon wrote: "No next Thursday. What you been up to?"Trying to get a clic clac z bed to fold up with two mattress's in and finding out that it wasn't possible!
I had to put one of them upstairs. Mind you can actually sit on the sofa now without feeling as though you were sat on the floor!
Morning all, I hope all is well with you all.@Sarah R, looks like you had quite a fight on your hands with that one.
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