Your Writing

[*~Silvypoo~* (Chaser of Artemis)]

Here's a poem that I wrote a time ago, and it might need some more editing. I already edited it... But um, here.

Because of your wisdom, I danced in the rain
Now because of you and whispers, I'm feeling the pain

You fed me lies, making me believe you were someone I could trust
It hurts to know that your actions were controlled by lust

I walked with my head high, eyes bright; holding a spark like you said
Unaware that you were tearing my heart until it was dead

Your betrayel had cast a dark, dreary cloud over me
But now the veil has been lifted and in starting to see

That you can't hurt my if I don't let you
I must learn to give you the cold shoulder, too

You once told me that I was extremely talented, barbly tongued, and smart
I now know what you were trying to do, and it turned my character tart

You also mentioned that I had big plans for me
Well I looked them over again and I see
That I would rather my life didn't include thee

So, because of your acting, I felt the pain
But this hurt taught me a message that will never wane

That I cab make the darkest of clouds drain
And I may once again enjoy the rain

[Jo]

Ode to Determination.

Onward, always, onward, on forth
Always keep your head held high
This mmission of illustrous woth
Go forth, release your battle cry.

Not stinging pain or aching torment
Should you from looking ahead
His crown in faith, hope his garment
And nothing stops his settling tread

Not the offer of sweet blessed rest
Not the chance of leisure comfort
Should be obstacle to you, lest
He be a coward fit for his sort.

Our aim should be more than enough.
A prize itself, some sheer relief
Not if the road is too rough
Not if his mind is damp with grief.

[*~Silvypoo~* (Chaser of Artemis)]

Ohmigawds, Jo!! You're so talented!!

[Jo]

You too, Silv.

[Iviana (The Sign Painter), The Goddess of indecisiveness]

I love your guy's poems ^w^

[Iviana (The Sign Painter), The Goddess of indecisiveness]

Iviana (The Sign Painter!) wrote: "Poetry portfolio: http://dft.ba/-poetry_portfolio (WIN URL)
Please help. The order is: Ballad, free-verse, sonnet, ode. If you have any suggestions for them (aside from the free-verse, since a) I d..."

Please help. >..< It's due on the fifth and I'm panicking because of it. And the ode turned out to be an elegy, so just keep that in mind if you read it.

[Jo]

Sorry.

[Iviana (The Sign Painter), The Goddess of indecisiveness]

Don't be sorry. It's not your fault.

[Jo]

The trouble is, Ivi, if I made the ballad I'd need the music too.

Bah! I'll give in one of my most precious poems then.

[Iviana (The Sign Painter), The Goddess of indecisiveness]

... Ballads don't require music...

[Jo]

Sometimes.

I have one...but it's about puffins.

[Iviana (The Sign Painter), The Goddess of indecisiveness]

It has to relate to my theme, Jo, and it also has to follow the "proper" format--

first stanza: ABAB
Second stanza: CDCD
Third stanza: EFEF
Fourth stanza: GG.

[Jo]

I don't even know your theme.

[Cloudy Storms]

WTHeck is a stanza?


May you put it in, Engles, por favor, senorita?





"You let me down...
You picked up...
You said I would be your number 1, standing on the top of the world. You promised, ever-ything would be okay. You said that, I would be just fine.

And now you've left me, empty... is my heart.
You've left me hollow... with, no sorrow!
Believe! I say, these words today!
I turn my back, as the night flows away,
I failed to, find my own path, and now...
I'm starting over...
I'm starting over
你說我....





Any suggestions for how it should continue?

[Maggie, Gaea shall smite you all.]

Here's a short story I wrote for a contest in another group. Please, tell me if it made you sad, 'cause that was the idea. Be frank, I can take it. :)

The Man in the Green Beret.

[Shayla]

Here's a short story I add on to every so often.

Birds Don't Need Wings

[*~Silvypoo~* (Chaser of Artemis)]

NEW POEM THAT SUCKS @SS BUT READ IT ANYWAY BECAUSE YOU LOVE ME. :)

Your sweet gaze used to fill me with warmth
Your wide smile used to brighten my day
Eyes, once bright, are dull without aid of the hearth
Empty smiles can barely keep tears at bay

Yet no sadness appears in me
The day we would part has long been present in my mind
Our paths entwined was never meant to be
Even though our paths soon fork, I hope we remain kind

For I admit our love was at first strong
And yes, at first, I was filled with bliss
But subconcious insists that something has gone wrong
Can't honestly say you will be a miss

But I cannot say you are something I can forget
Happiness floods our past
There are just some things about men I will never get!
Silly to think we would last

Love is patient, love is kind
YOur love will forever burn in my heart
For then, you were just a lucky find
Memories will stay long after we part

[Maggie, Gaea shall smite you all.]

I love the essence of the poem, though if you want a tip, I'd try to get some continuity with the line length (you have: short long short long/long short long short/short long short long/short short long short/short short short short). All in all, classy, Silvy! :)

[Maggie, Gaea shall smite you all.]

And yes, I do love you. now back to studying for *cringe* my AP test tomorrow. Wish me luck--I'm DEFINITELY gonna need it!

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*wishes luck*

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[Shayla]

Magdalena (Maggie) wrote: "And yes, I do love you. now back to studying for *cringe* my AP test tomorrow. Wish me luck--I'm DEFINITELY gonna need it!"

Good luck, Maggie! <3 you!

[Shayla]

Silver, I do love you, and that could be a really awshumsauce song!!

[*~Silvypoo~* (Chaser of Artemis)]

LOL, LOL, ILY SHAY.

LOVE YOU GUYS TOO.

I warned you that it sucked... and the all of the stanzas' lines have to match the previous line, even if it's in a different stanza?

[Maggie, Gaea shall smite you all.]

No, just saying for phonetic and aesthetic appeal, if you're going for that. Shay's right; it would make an awesomme song.

[Shayla]

Silverfur- (I love Edward!!!!!!) wrote: "LOL, LOL, ILY SHAY.

LOVE YOU GUYS TOO.

I warned you that it sucked... and the all of the stanzas' lines have to match the previous line, even if it's in a different stanza?"

It's a free-verse poem.

[Iviana (The Sign Painter), The Goddess of indecisiveness]

Free-verse*

[Shayla]

Fixed.

[Iviana (The Sign Painter), The Goddess of indecisiveness]

I wrote something. It's very strange. I just wrote three reports and decided to go on facebook and saw that I had 300+ new stuff. So I wrote this and posted it to my status.
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

Hello.
I'm Cassidy.
You know that.
Maybe you should go away,
write a travel companion,
or something
(twenty points
if you got that).
How are you?
This is so one sided,
it's not like I'll
comment after you
or something.
This is like,
well
y'know
A POEM
Did you read this far?
I applaud you.
You wasted
however-many-
minutes/seconds-
to-read-this
of
your
life.

[Moon]

LOL. ^LIKE.

This is why I don't have a social networking account.

[Cloudy Storms]

Why does that post not have a 'Like' button?

Facebook sucks monkey dongs. Or worse. O.O


I click on my email thingy that leads to posts, and once I enter Facebook, it says something, and this is what is says next. Ooops! This page appears to be broken!


No matter how many times I press the link again, it FAILS...


GR is more stable. It just needs a 'Like' button...

XP

[Shayla]

No, it doesn't.

[., Goddess of Bacon]

Why does facebook suck ... ?

[*~Silvypoo~* (Chaser of Artemis)]

Iviana (The Sign Painter!) wrote: "I wrote something. It's very strange. I just wrote three reports and decided to go on facebook and saw that I had 300+ new stuff. So I wrote this and posted it to my status.
http://www.goodreads.co..."

^love :3

[Cloudy Storms]

Mainly 'cause it messes up the email thing, EVERYTIME.


GR has a better thing for email.


And, FB is a pain. It doesn't let you choose what you want to get a notify for. So... My email is probaly more the Hermes's right now...

[Iviana (The Sign Painter), The Goddess of indecisiveness]

Ivi wrote a lot of poetry that she would liked to be reviewed. But, if you want to post something along the lines of, "Cool!" or "That's good.", she asks you not to do so. Those comments annoy her and are of no use to her. If you do not like the poems, please say why you don't. Thank you.
#1, #2, #3, #4, #5, and #6

[Cloudy Storms]

Isn't it 'Like, and not liked?

[Iviana (The Sign Painter), The Goddess of indecisiveness]

Have you heard of a thing called a "typo"?

[., Goddess of Bacon]

-.- Really, Fire, really?

[Iviana (The Sign Painter), The Goddess of indecisiveness]

Space. You want to click it. Please click it. Please read and review.

[Iviana (The Sign Painter), The Goddess of indecisiveness]

Nathan wrote: "I am making another group for pokemon fans, called, duh, Pokemon. Pls join."

Post that in the correct topic.

[Nathan]

Which one is the correct topic?

[Iviana (The Sign Painter), The Goddess of indecisiveness]

the one that says "groups" under the advertisements folder.

[Nathan]

Ah. Thanks.

[Iviana (The Sign Painter), The Goddess of indecisiveness]

Who want's to help me continue this? 'Cause I'm a bit stuck. I was gonna have it be an awkward kiss scene, but it doesn't fit anymore.

[Iviana (The Sign Painter), The Goddess of indecisiveness]

I wrote this for a contest. The Incident of Ellen Rue: http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

[Kat, Goddess of Dramatic Exits and Strawberry Yogurt]

I love that piece Ivi, took me like half an hour to process and I'm not sure if I understand it now. But it's wicked and deep, you'll win.

[Iviana (The Sign Painter), The Goddess of indecisiveness]

(view spoiler)[It's her being dead, people finding her and screaming, then her in a coffin, then her getting cremated, and then her going up to heaven. (hide spoiler)]

[Kat, Goddess of Dramatic Exits and Strawberry Yogurt]

Ohhh. I was sorta right

[Iviana (The Sign Painter), The Goddess of indecisiveness]

;) it's fine.

[Maggie, Gaea shall smite you all.]

That's what I sorta thought, too. That the las part was her going to heaven.