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To Disobey a Command---Finished
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Jan 08, 2011 07:14PM
Zen mounted his horse, his face turning pained.
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Cassy watched him. "Zen." she said. "What are you doing?"
"Getting away from this horror." He replied.
Cassy looked at bit scared. "Help me with Fel, Zen." she said, quietly.
"You can't help him. Only the person who makes actions can reverse them." Zen said, turning to look at his hand.
Cassy bit her lip, and touched Fel's forhead with her magic fingers. "Im sorry." she whispered.
"Its my fault, Zen." she murmerd. "I should have listened to Siki." She tucked a strand of Fels hair out of his face. "Then you wouldnt be hurt either."
"Nothing's your fault. This mess started when I became a sorcerer. This story started to unravel long before you were even born." Zen said bitterly. "Don't blame yourself."
Cassy shook her head. "No." she said with tears in her eyes. "I remeber my parents. I remeber you. And Siki, and Fel, and-and everything. And now there all gone."
Zen hesitated, jumping down from the horse. "Cassy, don't blame yourself." He persisted. "If anyone's to blame it's Uncle, and me."
"Not you Zen. Never you." she said, a tear streaming down her cheek and touching Felways hand.
"Yes me." Zen replied through clenched teeth. "I'm not that cheerful, hero I might seem like." He said.
Cassy looked at him. "Zen,we cant let Fel die." sh said.
Cassy looked down slowly. "We have too."
"How?" Zen asked, quietly. "How?" He asked again.
Kia looked down at the black mist, then over to Fel's body, cocking her head curiously
Cassy shook with scardness. "There must be someway." she whispered.
Another tear steamed down her face. "Your Zen, you can do anything!"
Zen turned away. "No, I can't." He said through clenched teeth, wishing he could do anything. He hated crushing one's dreams. He was pained.
Cassy looked at Fel, that was her sisters best friend. That was HER friend. She looked at her uncle again, and glared at him, looking a lot like Siki. She stood up, her hands in fists. "Help us, Zen. Help us make him help Felway."
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Black lines ran across the floor as uncles eyes grew black, as well. The lines picked up the three of them, Kia... Zen... And Felway. The three were lifted into the air and the whole room was now entirely black.
Mist formed around the three bodies and life slowly drained out of Kia and Zen and was then placed into Felway. The number 7 appeared on the back of the neck of Kia, and the number 8 on the back of Zen's.
"You two have sworn to a life of obedience!" Uncle Yelled. "The price to pay is your memory. Kia and Zen and Felway, forever shall your mind be suppressed, the only way you could regain your memory is from the power of the 9(?) scrolls. But you are under my command now, forever, your memory shall be mine."
The three were dropped to the ground, full life was in all of them.
Felway dropped to his knees and looked to his side, the number 8 on the back of Zen's and Kia's neck. "What have you done?" He stated.
((Zen and Kia lost half their memory. most of their child-hood and all rebellion.))
((Lets just say nine. Lol))Zen looked at Felway. Then he looked at Cassy. He knew her name, and Felway's and Siki's. But he couldn't remember why. "I haven't done anything. I was trying to do the best for Cassy. Why?" He wondered to himself, mounting his horse.
((Lol I almost wrote 'mouthing his horse.'))
Siki dropped her knife, and lunged at Cassy when her Uncle made his move. She knew that risk was too great, that she pay that price. She snarled at her uncle. "You tryrant." she hissed.
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Uncle shot Siki a evil glare. "I do not understand your anger Siki, i did what you wanted all along, and that was to heal number 6, wasn't it?"
Kia crouched on the floor, looking up at Uncle. She tilted her head, wondering why she couldn't remember some things. A falcon perched on her shoulder, and she couldn't remember his name.
((cool post, john.))
((cool post, john.))
((yeah, its great!))Siki glared right back, and Cassy held her hanh, holding her back. "Let him go Siki, we'll get him when the time comes." she told her. That didn't help her anger. "Please Siki." she begged.
Siki turned away. "Lets go." she said, pulling her hood up so you couldnt see her eyes, her long black sleeves rolling down her sleeves. She pulled up her black bandana. Her weapons were conclealed.
Zen watched them, brushing some floppy hair out of his eyes. The black stallion rounded on his hind legs, and began to trot away.
Cassy looked at Zen. "Zen? Fel?" she said in a quiet voice.
Zen didn't look back, he just kept fading into the horizon, getting smaller and smaller.
Cassy panicked. "Zen!" Siki didnt move.
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"Young Siki," Uncle started. "They won't disobey a command from their master. There are only three scrolls left, when all nine are in my possession, the world will be, as well." He turned his head away from Siki and and Casandra. "Guards!" He yelled. "Take them away."
Felway looked at the ground and started walking away to the door. 'Get the scrolls' were the only thing on his mind, everything else just seamed to vanish. He looked up, there was a young girl hanging on to a person with a hood over her face covering her face. He thought that the little girl looked familiar but didn't think he would know here, because he didn't know her name.
There was some girl in black with a bird on her shoulder, and there was a black figure fading over the horizon, but Felway didn't care about them. There were three scrolls left and the only bit of his mind that was left told him that the next scroll he should go after would be with someone he knew, and was supposed to love.
((okay! ill be sad when its done thought. *sigh*))Siki looked at him, her hood falling off. All the blue in her eyes was black. "Don't touch us." she growled, sounding nothing like herself.
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Felway looked back a the two people being taken by the guards from Uncle. The hood fell off the one and revealed a... girl? Felway looked closer and !!! he knew her; at least he thought he did. She was... He couldn't remember her name he could he tried, but he just stood there looking at her.
((omg! im so sorry! i totally missed this post!!!))Cassy started almost hyperventalating. Siki's eyes were almost black. She looked straight up in the air. Then she felt Siki's arm around her shoulder. She called down, looking up at her. She was looking at Felway, her eyes almost black. For a second Cassy almost envied her sisters magical anger, before remebering how dangerous Siki's magic really was.
Siki looked at her uncle. "We will get your scrolls." she said, daggers in her voice. Siki felt power through her body. Power unlike any other she felt before. She felt that magical something she knew was in her, but refused to touch. She was scared. So was so so scared. She lost everything again. Again. Felway, Zen, and almost Cassy. Her parents wern't even there anymore. She felt her long hair blow behind her, her hood must have fallen off. "That is the only way you will get them."
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Siki’s eyes grew in size. Fear stricken, hopeless, they stood there. Siki loosened her grip around Cassy’s shoulder. “So be it.”
“Clear out of the room, all of ya, all except Siki and Cassy.” Uncle yelled at his servants.
Cassy was huddled in her sisters arms crying into her clothes while Siki stood tall and returned the hug. Uncle started to walk toward the two, he broke off his necklace. It was a chain that had a gold ring on it. “Do you know what this is Siki?” Uncle asked holding the ring close to her eye. Siki had a shock of remembrance as he recognized the ring. “That’s right, the very ring of your father.”
Felway kept watching, he couldn’t take his eyes off of the girl that was in the room, somehow he knew her, but he wouldn’t let down his master by not getting those scrolls, he opened a window and started to climb out.
The word, the name reached his ear and he froze on the window pain and jerked his head in the direction. “’Siki’”. Her name… was Siki? He’d heard it before, he… He knew her, but he couldn’t figure out from where.
Felway put his hands in his pockets… An object that he had never felt before. He took it out of his pocket… A ring. A gold ring, and gold ring with the words “Don’t forget who we are- Siki” engraved on the edge of the ring.
Felway’s eyes lit on fire as he realized he was being played like a puppet, and Uncle was the puppet-master.
“Any last words?” Uncle offered to Siki, but Siki just held her gaze that tried to break the hard soul of their Uncle.
Uncle stuck out his ring-finger and motioned his hands together, the ring was getting placed on his finger.
“Hold it right there!” Felway yelled.
They all looked at him, standing on top of the lift by the door. His aura was emerging from him, like a black fog lit on fire rising up into nothing. His eyes were black. There was a shine from a ring that was placed on his finger. He jumped down and hit the ground with his fist causing a black cloud to form with an explosion that implied rock had been broken.
“Felway, you dare disobey a command? You know I can take way your life easily.”
Felway walked forward. “Then take it from me.” As he finished his sentence, a black orb made out of the fog that came from him, formed around him. The sphere grew bigger with every step he took, getting closer to Uncle.
Uncle just stood his ground… And started to chuckle… “I will gladly take it.” Uncle said and slipped on Siki’s father’s ring.
The black phenomenon was twice the size of that of Felway’s. Uncle took a step forward and released his power on Felway.
Felway’s black power broke and he flew backward. He flew past the wall and through the brick, the stone crumbled, a dust cloud formed. “FELWAY!”
The sky had grown dark since they all had arrived. One could even call the night a night as silent as the color black, because that’s what it was. There wasn’t even a moon to allow light. Just a black glow from the sky, and the flicker of candles coming from the windows of the domain.
“Felway… No…” Siki’s eyes turned to glass and water started to pour. Cassy had already been weeping, but the sorrow that she expressed at that time was greater than any other she had shown ever in her life. The dust had cleared, and his leg laid out of the rubble, not moving.
“It’s a shame, that he had to be so stupid.” Uncle said bringing the silence to an end, but even he wouldn’t not interrupt the moment of such intensity. He remained quiet.
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The wind whined as it entered the castle from the wall that was broken.
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Siki’s first tear, hit the floor.
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The pile of bricks blew away from each other. Another dust cloud arose and when it settled, the figure of Felway stood, panting, bleeding, weak.
“I knew, you wouldn’t give up that easily.” Uncle said and brought his black aura around him, with the same force of power.
Felway forced his power to the max and started to walk forward. He began to run… Run at uncle… Going to take another hit, which meant certain death… One more step…
“Cassy now!” Siki yelled.
The collision was great, more dust from broken stone filled the air, but quickly cleared as strange force of air entered the room. It was the wind from outside, the collision of the two powers caused the stone ceiling to break in, and for two big creators to form in the ground.
Siki turned her head back to the two who were fighting. Uncle pushed his power, and so did Felway, but this time, Cassy stood tall and had the black force coming from her hands, and feeding into the sphere that surrounded Felway.
They both continued to push their power trying to overcome each other. And with every collision, the castle kept crumbling.
The three forces paused and let there be silence, as they took a breath. Felway was getting weak, and he could not take much more.
The caw of a crow and the neigh of a horse echoed through the nights sky. They all looked up, a crow flew above them in the sky. Within a blink, a black shadow start to fall from the sky.
At the same time, a horse galloped into the room. More dust rolled and a pair of boots landed on the ground. “Need a hand?”
The shadow fell from the sky landed next to them… Kia stood proud and strong.
The orbs of power faded, and Uncle took steps backward. “Don’t you disobey me! You are under my command!”
Zen stepped into view. “Your power is broken, because, there is nothing, that can stand against the power that us three have together.” Zen looked at Felway and Siki. “Of a never ending friendship and trust in another.” He winked.
Kia took a step forward. “Or… a life that could be considered worthless, but a change that was so great, that not the darkest night could be seen in it. But the lightest day.”
Felway walked forward as Uncle stepped back. The power that fed into Felway came from Zen, from Cassy, from Kia, and from his own strength. And the hope that supplied them came from a girl name Siki.
The black ball grew to a great size, and with a flash of a dark light… It was finished.
The dust cleared, the castle was nothing but a pile of bricks. The people that once lived under the rule of Uncle had fled away. The five of them stood in the light of the night. Siki looked at the ground where Uncle had been. The ring of her father laid at her foot. She picked it up and looked through the center. Even though they were weak, the still had hope, in all of them. And they would never let that hope go.
The End.
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Siki placed the ring in the hole that was located under her father’s tomb stone. She pushed the soil back on top of the ring and hoped that no one would ever steal it and use it for their selfish behaviors again. Siki sat and looked at the graves, of her mother and father. She had already let them go, her eyes were dry while she tried to imagine what they would be saying to her now. Time passed.
“Do you still miss them?”
Siki shook because she was started. She looked behind but she still remained kneeling. It was just Felway who was all dress up. She turned back to look at the stones with the writing on them.
“A little,” she sighed. “But, I can finally let go. I know that they are gone and I know that even though they are not here, I can still make good with the time that I have left.”
The two stayed there for some time.
“You didn’t get me wearing pink, and expect to show up late did you?”
Felway and Siki turned to see Kia dressed in pink and her hair up in a bun and also carrying flowers.
They looked the other way. Zen was dressed up as well and wore the same goofy smile he always had.
“And you didn’t expect to be late to your own wedding, did ya?”
Angel:
While walking the streets of the town, Angel bumped into a man name Moore (I hope that was what his name was). The two of them hit it off and are now currently living in a house in town with three kids of a young age. Angel doesn’t have anything to fear. Moore was able to break the power that Uncle had on him and for that, he got his transporting power taken away. But the two, are living a normal life, which is what Angel wanted.
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Felway hand Siki’s hands in his and the words of ‘you may kiss the bride’ floated through the air. He leaned in, she did as well, and they kissed for the first time. And with that, the wedding was complete.
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~John S.
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