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message 701: by John, (~^u^~)V (new)

John x (radishfriends) | 851 comments Mod
"Zen, no!" Felway pleaded. He knew that healing magic drained the users energy dramatically. Zen would be useless for at least a week.


message 702: by [deleted user] (new)

Surie glared at them with the knife still to her neck.


message 703: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen rolled his eyes and teleportd behind him and lifted him up by the collar. "DAFYTR!" He shouted and smirked. "You are now disabled for 24 hours from teleporting." He said.


message 704: by [deleted user] (new)

Surie shook his head and stabbed Zen.


message 705: by [deleted user] (new)

Angel screamed loud. There was a feeling inside her that she's never felt. The pain of Felway forgetting, the years she spent as a prisoner..she lived with it all. She closed her eyes shut, letting her emotions take over. Suddenly, she felt glass hit against her shoulder from the nearby window. She opened her eyes fast and stared at the broken window. "Zen, that isn't funny!" She stared at Zen and noticed he didn't do anything. WHAT?!


message 706: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen didn't even flinch. He removed the knife. The blood seeped through his shirt as he tossed it to Angel. "Your first weapon." He said and ignored the blood spilling out of him. He nailed his with his palm in between the shoulders and watched the unconcious body slide to the floor.


message 707: by [deleted user] (new)

Angel was so in shock that she didn't catch the dagger being thrown at her. Had she just broken the window without even touching it?


message 708: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments The dagger slid next to her. Zen cursed as he looked at the wound. "I didn't think it was that bad." He said and pressed a hand to it.


message 709: by [deleted user] (new)

((did you read post 705?))


message 710: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments ((yep, but Zen is distracted.))


message 711: by John, (~^u^~)V (new)

John x (radishfriends) | 851 comments Mod
Felway was fully healed but now Zen was hurt. And Angle... Felway looked around. Siki was nowhere to be found.


message 712: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen looked up. "Where's Siki?" He asked. He cursed loudly.


message 713: by [deleted user] (new)

Surie got up half asleep and sprinted.


message 714: by [deleted user] (new)

Angel finally came back to he'd senses and got the dagger off the floor. She held it to her chest and strted breathing again. She dismissed the broken window. "Zen, are you alright?" She grabbed a cloth and wet it. She put it in his wound.


message 715: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen shrugged. "I'm trained not to feel pain, I'm guessing I'm not but it's not like it hurts. It feels like it might if your foot fell asleep." HE replied.


message 716: by John, (~^u^~)V (new)

John x (radishfriends) | 851 comments Mod
Felway watched Surie run. "You took her!" He screamed and sprinted after him.


message 717: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen raced after them. Ropes bound Surie. He leps were wrapped and so were his wrists.


message 718: by [deleted user] (new)

Surie ran into a bunch of people and hid.


message 719: by John, (~^u^~)V (new)

John x (radishfriends) | 851 comments Mod
"Zen." Felway started. "Give me that ring that Siki gave you. I need to save Siki." Felway held out his left hand to Zen.


message 720: by [deleted user] (new)

Angel watched them go. She slumped onto the ground and grabbe her head tight. She closed her eyes. What was with the broken window...? Could I be... Angel shook her head, smiling. Too unrealistic. Angel couldn't stop thinking of the broken window. I just want the window to be normal again so I won't have to see it! a suddenly sound jolted her from her chain of thought.
The window was back into place, just like it was before.


message 721: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen tossed him the ring.


message 722: by John, (~^u^~)V (last edited Aug 19, 2010 10:08PM) (new)

John x (radishfriends) | 851 comments Mod
Felway caught the gold ring and put it on this ring finger right next to the gold one with the lion. Felway’s hair black. His eyes became black as well but had a gold rim around the iris. This had only happened to him once, when his own parents died, he had used the ring. He stood there and let his mind fill with anger from loss. The sky became dark and the wind picked up drastically. The streets began to clear of people. They only stared in horror and ran. Felway placed his hand in front of him as if he were touching a wall. He spun around and a black chain-link gate appeared all around him. He closed his hand and the holes in the chain filled completely black. He couldn’t see the outside. He stared through the blackness. “Show me Siki.” The picture came up. Siki was with Casandra.


message 723: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen gasped. "No! He's going to kill himself! He's using dark magic!" He scream, kicking and punching the blackness. He ignored his blooding knuckles. A beam of light shone through onto him as he directed it onto the blackness barely making any progress.


message 724: by [deleted user] (last edited Aug 19, 2010 10:18PM) (new)

Kia watched them go from the street to the inn. She watched disinterestedly as they faught. She only perked up when Felway began to use dark magic.

She put a hand on Zen's shoulder, her other outstretched toward Felway. "It's under control," she said in a flat voice, a shadowy light going from her fingers to mix with Felway's magic


message 725: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen turned his head slowly to her. He smiled. "Hello follower." He said.


message 726: by [deleted user] (new)

Some of the shadowy light trailed down his arm and healed his knuckles and his stamina. "Hello" she echoed, concentrating on Felway's magic


message 727: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen nodded. "Thanks." He said. "It didn't really hurt though." He said.


message 728: by [deleted user] (new)

Kia closed her eyes as her magic mixed with Felways. She concentrated on Siki, then transported Felway to her. When he was gone, she looked back at Zen. "I didn't heal it for the pain. You need your strength to help your friends."


message 729: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen shrugged. "I guess." He said.


message 730: by [deleted user] (new)

She stared at him, then turned back the way she had come


message 731: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen followed her. "Okay so now you're just going to vontinue following us?" He asked.


message 732: by John, (~^u^~)V (new)

John x (radishfriends) | 851 comments Mod
((I guess i'll split it up))


Felway fell to the ground. He started to cough and yanked off his magic ring. He didn't ever want to do that again. His hair and eyes returned to normal, he opened his eyes and saw Siki and Cassey looking at him.


message 733: by [deleted user] (new)

Kia picked up her pack she stashed earlier and put it on. She looked in the distance, to where Siki and Felway were. "I follow the scrolls."


message 734: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen nodded. "Well then." He said and snapped. His leather bag appeared on his shoulder.


message 735: by [deleted user] (new)

Kia slipped something over her wrist and began running. She started at a sprint, then sped faster and faster until she was running almost as fast as a horse's gallop


message 736: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments zen sighed an muttered something. Attis apeared under him and he raced after them.


message 737: by [deleted user] (new)

((lol))

Kia heard him behind her. She smiled and ran faster


message 738: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments ((He doesn't care. He's Zen, run now, worry later))
Attis sped up too, maybe enhanced.


message 739: by [deleted user] (new)

Kia admired the horse. He was much more magnificant up close. She pushed herself to run a little faster


message 740: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen stood up on the saddle, and jumped. He caught her by the cloak. Attis snorted behind him.


message 741: by [deleted user] (last edited Aug 19, 2010 10:56PM) (new)

She turned, and rolled, pulling him to the ground. When they stopped rolling, she knelt on top of him, holding a knife to his throat and to his ribs


message 742: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen held up his hands, smiling obnoxiously. "I caught you, but you got me." He said.


message 743: by [deleted user] (new)

Kia raised an eyebrow, debating. She could kill him now, but he wasn't a threat to her. Just weird. She snorted, then took off running again


message 744: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen shrugged and jumped on Attis, following but not too close.


message 745: by [deleted user] (new)

She slid her knives back into their hiding places and concentrated on the scrolls again. She changed her course slightly and continued to run.


message 746: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen followed absent mindly.


message 747: by [deleted user] (new)

She reached the small town where Felway, Siki, and Zen grew up. She slowed down and slipped quietly between the buldings


message 748: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen did too. "Why?" He asked to no one. He went to visit his father.


message 749: by [deleted user] (new)

Kia spied on Siki, her sister, and Felway from a distance.


message 750: by Kat (new)

Kat (sugaraddict) | 688 comments Zen crept up behind her. "Spying isn't very lady like." He said. He had changed his clothes. He was wearing a black cloak and navy blue pants.


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