Lenore's Desperate Need to Write

[Lenore]

Hi all. I am a VERY inexperienced writer when it comes to writing fiction. I do have experience in writing (book reviews) and I have found I really enjoy it.

I am in need of someone to critique the small stuff. Read a few things (an overall idea, first few pages, etc.) to tell me what I need to work on or if I am really headed somewhere.

I am not looking for encouragement (although that is great!) but honesty. Please be kind. Remember I am VERY new at this, but I also need to know what I have...and don't have. A pros and cons post would be great.

Anyone up to helping me through this challenge?

My goals are small but thus:

Expand my world and characters above all else.
Write something each day. Big or small write.
Write toward finishing my novel.

[Lenore]

My idea:

Paranormal readers know that lately all readers see is vampires this, werewolves that. Well I am looking to change that. I want to write about Hellhounds.

WHERE: OWL CITY, the deepest part of Detroit, MI. It is a place only for the paranormal. Regulated by the hellhounds.

WHEN: Modern day

WHO: Vampires, werewolves, fae, etc. they all live in owl city. Hellhounds are demons who are charged with keeping the paranormal world under control and under wraps. They work for Lucifer to keep the paranormal creatures out of the human world so that he may follow the prophecy of Armageddon. They can change form to blend with the humans at will; however, their true nature is in the shape of a dog. Not wolf, dog. The hellhounds are the police the judge, and the jury. They decide who lives and dies and how the evil (or more evil) are punished.

WHAT: Creatures have always ventured out to create chaos in the human world. I plan to use real life human crimes and combine them with paranormal elements. My story will not be just UF. I hope to combine the imagination of fantasy with the adrenaline of thriller with the curiosity of a mystery. It will have an overall goal, but each book will be centered around one crime, one mystery.

WHY: The overall series plot: Monsters are banning together against Lucifer's army. They want to overthrow the Dark King, and they plan to do it by corrupting the human world. One mortal at a time.....

[Paige]

Hello, and welcome to our group! (I know this is a little late.)

Your idea seems interesting!

[Veronica]

That sounds really cool! As far as settings, Detroit is an excellent city for what you're describing, particularly set in present day. With all of the abandoned and foreclosed homes and deadened businesses, it has a sort of empty, sad, used-to-be-life-here feeling. Not to mention the architecture, which is a really bizarre combination of old and new. Plus you could quite easily make the whole thing quite political in a subtle way, with Lucifer's army symbolizing either the government or banks. :)

[Wendy]

Hey guys! Will you check out my thread and vote for the picture you'd like to see on the back cover of Unlocked? (book going to be released on August 13th)

We need your vote. Thanks!

http://www.goodreads.com/topic/show/2...