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Thank you for posting this. You do a nice job in the last sentence using "furthermore" and the word "empathy" - good job! There are a few sentences I am confused about:
"therefore Frederick master race other skin color for instance african american."
This sentence is confusing because it is a fragment - it is missing a verb. Do you think you could rewrite it with a verb in there?
Also:
"For instance Frederick was fighting for his freedom."
Remember that "for instance" is another way of saying, "for example," so what are you giving examples of? I think you need a sentence before this, to explain what this is an example of.
Thanks!
- Ms. Justine
Above all frederick was part of slavery.
However some people dehumanized other.
Therefore frederick master race other skin color for instance african american.
Forinstance frederick was fighting for his freedom.
Furthermore federick was feeling empathy about his friend.