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Jan 07, 2010 08:33AM

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YOu did a FABULOUS job with these transitional words - I'm really impressed, and they make your writing sound so academic and sophisticated! Hurrah!
Some things you want to watch for in your next writing task - missing & misspelled words. There are a few places where I see words or letters/endings missing, and I think if you reread what you wrote, you might notice them, too. For instance:
" Generally Douglass' story exposed TO the world how his humanity was disempowerED as a slave..."
"Therefore, he was VOICELESS, HE did not have any right TO speech or even THE right to choose."
" Ultimately Douglass as a young boy started TO hang out secretly to learn..."
just reading your writing once more before posting/handing it in will make sure it is even more polished and ready to be read!
Some things you want to watch for in your next writing task - missing & misspelled words. There are a few places where I see words or letters/endings missing, and I think if you reread what you wrote, you might notice them, too. For instance:
" Generally Douglass' story exposed TO the world how his humanity was disempowerED as a slave..."
"Therefore, he was VOICELESS, HE did not have any right TO speech or even THE right to choose."
" Ultimately Douglass as a young boy started TO hang out secretly to learn..."
just reading your writing once more before posting/handing it in will make sure it is even more polished and ready to be read!

Some things you want to watch for in your next ..."
Thansk Ms. Justine. I was in rush a little bit at that moment. Furthermore, i will make sure to double check my writing before i post. Thanks again!