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May 05, 2012 06:08PM

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Al, this was great fun to read! (And being Canadian, this is not at all risqué.)
Have you thought of turning your writing into podcast radio plays? I think that they would work perfectly for something like that. They're easy to make, and would fit the serial nature of your writing. Which, btw, is excellent! Very, very entertaining. (My popcorn is still in nascent kernel stage, but reading yours here has made me fill creatively inspired - so much writing, so few hours. And just a touch guilty. Your output in terms of volume AND quality is astounding!)
And instead of writing I am about to work on my own podcast - I'm writing music to accompany my reading the 'Cotton for Comfort' poem. So much to do, so few hours! LoL. Yes, this WSS is good for the inspiration, tough on the day's hours.
Al I hope you beat the migraine out of you in short order.

I thought I was the only one who picked up on the humor in Guy’s “Al (et al).”

Sara: That's what I thought, too.
Kyra: Hey, Sara. You know, I had the weirdest dream. You and all the other book characters I've written came to life. And tried to burn down the school.
Sara: ...I can see that.
Kyra: And you and Nicky were in cahoots.
Sara: Less likely, but still. Better than, say, Khiet.
Kyra: Yeah... dunno why I even made that guy. (shudder) Well, Al, in summary, I thought everything but the censored scene was stupendous. And a podcast is like a short verbal script posted on the Internet or another media source, sometimes with pictures, used for educational purposes.
Sara: You sound like a dictionary.
Nikara: No, the dictionary definition of a podcast is "a multimedia digital file made available on the Internet for downloading to a portable media player, computer, etc."
Sara: Dang, that's creepy. Well, nice work, Al, and POST ANOTHER EPISODE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

As to 'writing music', let's just say I exaggerated and leave it at that. With the Apple app Garage Band, I can put together some music-like stuff with a mouse and keyboard. Not writing, but if I want to put a positive spin, then creating music-like noise would be a fair description.
Wow, what a busy day! Out to buy some garden supplies, then gardening; make lunch, bake buttermilk shortbread cakes with blueberries, mint sauce for the lamb roast, prep the lamb and beets for roasting, serious clean-up and now for shower! But hey, I'll be back, eventually.


Anyway, I've posted two of my poems that I put to music (not MY music but REAL music). I also made podcasts of them, but I haven't put them onto a podcast server.
If you'd like to hear my voice, reading, go to What Cannot Be Expressed and/or Quiet Histrionics at the Wall.
Re.: 875: Guy LOVES Feist. Okay, not LOVE, loves, but has her CDs and listens to her music. Wow, what a great cover! Thank you for sharing this.



Me: *mouth drops open*
Putnam: Haha. There's a thought! If this mental institution thing does not work out I can become a priest! Think of all the people I can scam!
Me: *headdesk* Oh.God.Help us all.
Putnam: *grins evily and puts hands together* And Buxton can be my evil monk sidekick!

Now that was funny.
Kyra, so glad you enjoyed them! They were fun to create. I'm finding the one I'm working on now to be a challenge.
Al, I thought that was a funny line too. And I don't know why.
Funny that you like my voice, because in truth I find it bland. I won't say I dislike it, because barring some kind of weird surgery or something, I am stuck with it.
With Garage Band creating a reading with different people in different cities is not that hard.


Okay, that was random.




She doesn't even know about what goes on here in the WSS other than a vague 'I'm writing' cover letter.
Hey! Its almost 1am your time. You've been suffering with migraines, so maybe it's time to kip?

I think I'll perversely or not take my being a bad influence as a good thing. Kind of like the slightly undesirable uncle that the family whispers about behind his back, but who was the one that had you experience life more fully, thoroughly, widely. (Ok, ok, I am now guilty of self-aggrandizement. Blame it on my being up past my bed time.)
Anyway, the time has come for me to kip. That 5am alarm for work comes awfully early. A lot earlier than 5am it, it feels like most of the time. Night!

M: Because somebody’s father is reading these threads.
Mossers: And a certain pirate whose name we won’t mention--
Erica: But who is somewhere between L and N . . .
Squirrel: Is a bad influence.
(There is a sound of squirrel laughter as he rolls around, flicking his tail. They all nod knowingly.)
Buxton: A bad influence, all right.
Captain Pike: (Looking out of a 16mm frame, his eyes red, his face black with smoke.) I’ll get even!

Putnam: God, woman! Chew with your mouth closed and don't talk with it full! Didn't your mother teach you manners?
Putnam: I was going to ask if you wanted to see a flying pig.
Me: Sure you were.
Me: Your shoe is untied.
Buxton: *looks down at feet* No they're not.
Me: I know. But they will be and then you will trip in the hallway and Nurse Kingsburry will laugh at you and call you a picklepuss.
Putnam: I hate everyone....
Me: You're such a fruit cake.
Putnam: So are you.
Me: Shut up. I have to go to church. I'll be back later.
Me: You know what? I'm going to stop bugging people about their language and just go with it. As long as you all don't say anything worse than "hell", "damn" and "pickles". *cackles*
Putnam: Pickles?
Me: Yes.
Putnam: Dearest, that isn't a bad word.
Me: You have no idea.
Putnam: *looks at Al* You have those day dreamy look in your eyes again.
Me: Yeah.....I like flowers. Roses, sunflowers, lillies-
Putnam: Pansies.
Buxton: I hate pansies. This is why I hate you.
Me: If it involves needles, seditives, chains and the shock shop, I'm not going.
Buxton: She could be a blonde in real life.
Amelia: Something's wrong. Al's loosing it.
Erica: Ah well, when she does, she'll be like the rest of us.

Penelope: Well, hi, there, girl! (She puts her hand out to pet the bear, then pulls it away and turns her head in disgust.) Oh, where have you been?
(In the shadows of the dunes, a paunchy, middle-aged man approaches. He is wearing a brown suit and a hat and is carrying a dark-brown bag.)
Man: Hi, there! I’m looking for Nel Parsons.
Spades: (Warily.) Who are you?
Man: (Takes off his hat.) Ambrose Ferguson, at your service.
Penelope: (Gaping. Then she screams. Her arms out, she runs to him and hugs him.) Ambrose! (She laughs. Stepping back, she looks him over in wonderment.) The last time I saw you, you were an alligator.
Ambrose: The last time I saw you, you were a phosphorescence hovering over rotting logs. (His eyes wide.) You certainly are pretty!
Spades: Are you another refugee from “Lost in the Swamp”?
Ambrose: (A sour look on his face.) I’ve about had it with that alligator business. I can deal with a diet of uncooked fish and turtles and an occasional duck, but those brats who live in the upscale neighborhood on the east end of the swamp are about to drive me crazy.
Penelope: (Astonished.) How did you get here?
Ambrose: (Scratches his head.) I don’t know. A couple of nights ago, I had a dream about you, and the next thing I knew, I was in that marsh over there. (He points.) I had turned back into (he looks down at himself), well, me. (He tilts his head to indicate Ursula, who is munching the wild berries growing on the dune.) A friendly bear found me--like to scared me to death at first. She showed me the way to the little fishing village, where some nice people helped me get cleaned up. I’ve got a room at Mrs. Greer’s.
Penelope: Ambrose, this is Spades.
Spades: (Shaking hands with him.) Glad to meet you.
Ambrose: (Brightly.) Any friend of Nel’s is a friend of mine. (He looks around.) What is this place? I still haven’t figured out where I am.
Spades: (Tiredly.) I’m not sure I know, either.
Penelope: Have you had breakfast, Ambrose?
Ambrose: (With a big smile.) You certainly know what to ask, Nel! Mrs. Greer fed me this morning, but that was a couple of hours ago.

Ambrose: (Looks a little disappointed.) Really?
Penelope: I didn’t expect you to be clean shaven, though. (She looks him over.) You look very neat, right down to your wingtip shoes.
Ambrose: (Shrugs.) In sales, if you don’t make a good impression, you don’t eat.
Spades: What did you sell?
Ambrose: Pens, pencils, stationary, desks. I started out as a salesman for the American Pencil Sharpener Company, then I went to work for a big office supply house and stationer in Chicago.
Spades: How did you wind up in up the swamp?
Ambrose: (Scratches his head.) It started when I fell out of an eighth-story window. You know, the fall isn’t so bad. It’s the sudden stop.
(In the cottage, bacon is frying, and there’s a tall stack of pancakes on the table. Tavy is very pale. Her eyes are red and swollen from crying, and she dabs at them with the apron when she hears voices outside. She resists an almost overpowering temptation to turn into a cat and hide. The door opens. Penelope comes in, followed by the others. Ambrose takes off his hat.)
Penelope: Tavy, this is Ambrose Ferguson. He was an alligator in the swamp where I used to live.
Ambrose: (Stepping up.) Nice to meet you, Tavy. (He puts out his hand.)
Tavy: (Shyly.) Nice to meet you. (Putting down the spatula, she shakes hands with him.)
Penelope: Have a seat, Ambrose.
Ambrose: (Looking around.) Nice little place you’ve got here! (He pulls out a chair at the big cutting board.)
Penelope: This is Tavy’s father’s place. (She seems momentarily at a loss for words.) There’s so much to tell you, Ambrose, I hardly know where to begin. (She shakes her head.) A lot has happened since I left the swamp.
(Tavy brings a plate of bacon to the table, glancing nervously at Spades, who pulls out a chair.)
Spades: Ursula’s back.
Tavy: (Brightening.) She is?
Penelope: She stinks.
Tavy: (She sets the plate down, then takes off her apron and hangs it on a peg in the kitchen.) I was getting worried about her.
Penelope: You’re not going to eat?
Tavy: Oh, no. I’m not hungry.
(Spades looks up at her, clearly unsettled by that but at a loss for anything to say.)
Tavy: (Heading toward the door, she turns to Ambrose.) It’s been very nice to meet you.
(Ambrose starts to get up.)
Tavy: Don’t get up. I’m just on my way out. (She smiles wanly.) I need to go shampoo a bear.
Penelope: (Looks at her with concern.) Thank you for making breakfast.
(Tavy goes out the door. Moments later they hear her voice calling, “Ursula . . .”)
Penelope: Dig in, Ambrose.
(Ambrose skewers several pancakes with his fork and moves them from the pile to his plate. Spades, eating a piece of bacon, glances around the room. Squirrel is making a breakfast of some of the walnuts that are kept in wooden bowl on the hearth.)
Ambrose: (Cutting slices from the stick of butter, then pouring syrup on his pancakes.) A couple of days ago, some woman in a business suit came out to the swamp and give me a talking to, said she was an editor and didn’t appreciate my attitude. (He hands her the syrup.)
Penelope: (Smiling.) Ambrose, what had you done?
Ambrose: I gave that kid, Hunter, and his sister a good scare. (He snorts.) Kids can’t seem to get enough of that “Lost in the Swamp” series.
Penelope: (Incredulous.) Their insipid writer has cranked out another story?
Ambrose: (Nods.) As usual, the brat wouldn’t behave. He poked me with a paddle, so I smacked their little boat with my tail. (He chuckles, cutting a bite of pancake.) I guess I don’t know my own strength.
Penelope: (Her eyes wide.) Did anyone get hurt?
Ambrose: I don’t think so, but I’m pretty sure they had to empty out their britches when they got home.
(Spades eats in preoccupied silence for a while. On the heart, Squirrel is breaking a walnut shell with his teeth.)
Spades: I haven’t been to the fishing village yet. What’s your impression of it?
Ambrose: There’s not much to it, a few houses, a tavern, a mercantile. There are traders who come in occasionally from other parts to sell liquor and dry goods, but the little town is pretty much cut off from the outside world-- (he raises his eyebrows) whatever the outside world may be. (He stuffs a wad of pancake in his mouth.)
Penelope: What kinds of things have you heard?
Ambrose: Mrs. Greer says the port used to be down the shore a ways, a long time ago, but that it was abandoned after an epidemic.
Spades: (Interested.) I wonder where.
Ambrose: I think she said it was in a cove.
Penelope: (Looking at Spades with a half smile.) You know, you smell almost as bad as that bear.
(Finishing his pancakes, putting down his fork, Spades gets up. He takes his plate to the sink and rinses it under the pump.)
Penelope: See? I’ve got him trained.
(Ambrose raises his eyebrows.)
Spades: I’m not going to dignify that with a response. If you wouldn’t consider it too unmannerly of me, I think I’ll step out for a few minutes. There’s a warm-water lagoon around here somewhere, and it’s about time I found it. (He picks up the bottle of shampoo and the bar of soap Tavy had set down.)
Penelope: There’s a spare washcloth and towel-- (she glances toward the fireplace) Uhm, just take the ones Tavy set down there. She won’t mind.
(Spades reluctantly picks up the wet washcloth and Tavy’s plush, almond-colored towel.
Penelope: (Laughing.) It’s for a good cause.
Spades: Nice to meet you Ambrose. (He shakes hands with Ambrose, who has courteously stood up.) Don’t believe anything she tells you about me.
(Her eyes narrowed, Penelope puts her hands on her hips.)
(As Spades goes out, he hears catches a snatch of their conversation.)
Ambrose: So you have no idea where we are?
Penelope: The most we’ve been able to figure out is that it’s a sort of back lot in this peculiar world.
Ambrose: What world?
Penelope: For want of a better name, it’s the Al-iverse.


(Not the warm lagoon, Spades thinks, but something cold and bracing, seems in order. When he emerges from the dunes, he sees figures out in the surf. Tavy is shampooing Ursula. Orchil, the mermaid, is watching. The sun is on the horizon. A full moon hangs in the sky. Throwing her head back, Orchil laughs, her long, red hair blowing in the wind. Then she notices Spades. Tavy looks toward the beach. Spades stops walking.
(In blue jeans and a shirt with long tails, Tavy is standing in waves up to her hips. She has left her moccasins on the beach. Her hand, which is holding a soapy washrag, stops moving. Ursula looks up at her.
(As though drawn by a force not of himself, Spades walks toward the surf, seeing only Tavy. He doesn’t understand what is happening to him, but he knows he isn’t under a spell. Pausing to leave the towel and shampoo and his Topsiders on the beach, he walks into the cold surf. He can think of nothing to say as he approaches Tavy. Orchil, a few yards away, watches with concerned interest, tendrils of her beautiful hair moving in the waves.
(Tavy looks at him hesitantly with her blue eyes, one hand holding a shampoo bottle, the other the washrag. At a loss for words, Spades stands there a moment, then puts his arms around her waist and kisses her, lost in the feeling of holding her, and the subtle smell of her. He doesn’t kiss her until night falls, for it never gets dark at Orchard Bay; but after he has tasted her for a long time, he takes the washrag from her and carefully scrubs behind Ursula’s ears. The bear raises her head and makes a contented sound and Tavy supplies more shampoo.)

Me: Of course you do.......
Albert: (crosses arms) You don't have to sound so exasperated. After all, I DID help you write that poem, didn't I?
Me: Yes and you also wouldn't stop talking while I was trying to shower (glares)
Albert: But I HAD to. You just don't understand how fun it is to torment you.
Me: (sighs)

Me: NO! Get your blueberries away from me.
Albert: Why? They're delicious! (He fills his mouth with a large handful of blueberries.)
Me: No they're not. They taste like rancid... rancid... Well I don't know, but they taste like rancid SOMETHING.
Albert: What is it with you and the word rancid? Rancid yogurt, rancid milk, water at summer camp that tasted like rancid--
Me: OKAY! We get it. And rancid is . . . a very accurate word for many of the things I consume.
Albert: (Laughs.) Well don't mind me, I'm just going to finish that slice of pizza in the fridge. And smother it in ranch. And eat it cold.
Me: EWW!!!! That's--
Albert: What? Rancid?

Me: (Lunges at him.) What are you doing with that?!
Albert: (Rolls off the bed and shoves the diary up his shirt.) What am I doing with what?
Me: Give me that!!
Albert: Why? It's not like I don't know everything that's written in here already. (Waves diary tauntingly)
Me: (face burning) Give. Me. That. Now. (starts chasing him)
Albert: (runs away while reading) Oooooooh what's this? A secret? Scribbled out? Don't you think you over did it? (holds up diary to show the page which is almost completely blotted out with ink)
Me: I swear I'm going to duck tape you to the underside of my bed and invite the household to bounce on it!
Albert: Ah, well I'm in your mind. You can't hurt me.
Me: You want to bet? (steps forward)
Albert: (pales and steps backward) Erm no, I have an appointment for..ermm...making my next appointment! BYE! (drops the diary and runs)
Me: You can't hide from me...




Nikara: What's all this about people not liking their muses?
Aaron: Where the heck is Nightshade?
Kyra: What's with all the questions?
Sara: No idea. Say, where IS Nightshade?
Aaron: She said something about a library.
Nikara: That sounds like Nightshade. Just leave her be for now.
Aaron: She also mentioned Bennu.
Sara: Not good. Which way did she go?
Kyra: The only library I've made so far is that way. (points to library)
Aaron: Hopefully she's only tried to convince him to read something for once.
Everyone: (looking very skeptical as they run off to library)

A bad influence on me? Nahh. Albert is odd. He said hello to me in the shower and almost made me cut myself with my razor. And as for the blueberries... I HATE them. I think they're horrifically disgusting unless baked into a muffin or waffles.
Al, glasses are a pain. I need them for reading. If I don't wear them to read I get killer headaches. But they're not very convenient. A few months ago I had them in my backpack at school and leaned against a wall. They snapped in half like a twig.

For instance, I know that he's not all about tormenting me though he'd like to make you guys think that. If he only wanted to torment me, he wouldn't have suggested being called Albert. The name belongs to someone who was very important to me. Strangely, I think my muse was trying to comfort me when he selected the name.

M: (Brows furrowed, he shakes his head.) Let’s not get into that.
Muse: (Looks down at the counter, her dark, reddish-brown hair falling into her face.) Yesterday afternoon, you asked me to come up with a poem, and didn’t I?
M: (With a resigned sigh.) You did. While I folded clothes, you came right up with it.
Muse: And now you’ll want me to come up with a story.
M: (Exasperated, rubbing sunscreen on his face and forearms.) What else in creation do you have to do?
Muse: (Tracing a pattern on the Formica with her finger.) Haunt your dreams, be all women--irksome or irresistable--in your fantasies, look at you unexpectedly from the eyes of women who sense only a sudden undercurrent they can’t name, stir your emotional weather. (She looks up with her pale eyes.) I have a full-time job.
M: (Picking up his hat.) I’ve got to mow.
Muse: (Smiles.) In that case, maybe I’d better slip into something more comfortable.


M: No one’s ever heard of that model. She’s probably in a old-folks home by now.
Muse: A posh one, I’m sure. $10,000 a hour to look beautiful in front of camera wasn’t starvation wages in the 1990’s.
M: You have no sense of passing time, do you?
Muse: (Shakes her head.) I’m not a part of time. (Her thoughts unreadable, she looks at M with her ice-blue eyes.)
M: What do you make of Alex’s muse?
Muse: He seems sophisticated. He’s becoming less a flat character and more like a real person, which means Alex’s masculine side, the aspect of her personality that reasons rather than feels, is differentiating, becoming more conscious.
M: Does that happen in most women?
Muse: Not necessarily. Some women never become conscious of their masculine side. Some women turn into animus hounds. (She raises her eyebrows.)
M: Let’s not talk about any of my relatives. You mean women who are know-it-alls. (He shudders.) They make me want to grind my teeth.
Muse: (Smiles.) Or who just have primitive, stereotypical tastes in men--the way most men do about women. Marilyn Monroe was a sex goddess because, more than any other woman on screen, she invited anima projection. Men who are more in touch with themselves aren’t as prey to that sort of thing.
M: Could we talk about something else? (He sighs.) I’ve been down that road.
Muse: (She tilts her head and gives him a Marilyn-Monroe look. Then she laughs.) Somebody’s thinking about fried eggs and hash browns.