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I'm coming up with ideas for some reason... So here's one for the second book the tilogy, Shadow Scarred:
"He's alive you know."
Jasmine stopped in her walking, and turned around once more. The speaker of the words was perfectly in shadow, his face obscured. "Who is?" Jaz inquired lightly.
"Ash."
"He's alive you know."
Jasmine stopped in her walking, and turned around once more. The speaker of the words was perfectly in shadow, his face obscured. "Who is?" Jaz inquired lightly.
"Ash."
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Brigid ✩, No tears in the writer, no tears in the reader.
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sweet. :)
i hate when a book has a cliffhanger and the next one doesn't come out for a long time. lol XD
i hate when a book has a cliffhanger and the next one doesn't come out for a long time. lol XD
30 Days: (still iffy)
The snake shed its coil, and slithered into its hole.
or
I jumped into the mini van, ready to save the world. Again.
Which one do you guys like better?
The snake shed its coil, and slithered into its hole.
or
I jumped into the mini van, ready to save the world. Again.
Which one do you guys like better?
This is what I'm considering for Vigil.
I should have known better than to expect a happy ending.
I should have known better than to expect a happy ending.
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Justyn wrote: "30 Days: (still iffy)
The snake shed its coil, and slithered into its hole.
or
I jumped into the mini van, ready to save the world. Again.
Which one do you guys like better?"
First one … sounds more symobolic. or something. :D
The snake shed its coil, and slithered into its hole.
or
I jumped into the mini van, ready to save the world. Again.
Which one do you guys like better?"
First one … sounds more symobolic. or something. :D

The Songs of Time: A whisper or was that just the wind rippling through the leaves on the trees, Luke had no idea because he was no longer one of Earth but one of something much more.

"He's alive you know."
Jasmine stopped in her walking, and turned around once more. T..."
Awesome cliffie! :P

"
Same as forest gump"
wow i never thought of that.

Eye to eye with the person who started it all, I smiled.
or...
I slammed the sword down, but it hit the concrete floor.
or...
I slammed the sword down, but it hit the concrete floor.

Dragon Girl: Dunak is here, he's now, he's alive, he's smiling. And even when the dark clouds start crying rain over us, we don't get wet.
AlixLew wrote: "I want to know if the story I'm writing should have a sequel to it because it ends like this:
Dragon Girl: Dunak is here, he's now, he's alive, he's smiling. And even when the dark clouds start cr..."
I think its your descision. If you are very happy with it, then you should do a sequel to it.
Dragon Girl: Dunak is here, he's now, he's alive, he's smiling. And even when the dark clouds start cr..."
I think its your descision. If you are very happy with it, then you should do a sequel to it.

AlixLew wrote: "ok. I mean, I've had a lot of pressure because Dunak dies and my friends are always telling me that either I should bring him back to life, or make a sequel to it and THEN allow him to live. I'm ki..."
I just want to say one thing. A book is what a book is. I think you should write a sequel and not let him live! lol!
I just want to say one thing. A book is what a book is. I think you should write a sequel and not let him live! lol!
This is actually going to be the last line of Vigil (or something along these lines):
I had made a fantastic mess, and now I had to clean it up.
I had made a fantastic mess, and now I had to clean it up.

She stood still, and it gave me ample opurtunity to kill her. I thought about it.

GAH!! IM ALMOST THERE!!
Sella wrote: "The last line of Outcast's last chapter is going to be 'Outcast from life.' The last line of the epilogue is going to be 'She was gone.'
GAH!! IM ALMOST THERE!!"
cool.
GAH!! IM ALMOST THERE!!"
cool.
Sella wrote: "The last line of Outcast's last chapter is going to be 'Outcast from life.' The last line of the epilogue is going to be 'She was gone.'
GAH!! IM ALMOST THERE!!"
I should read now. =]
GAH!! IM ALMOST THERE!!"
I should read now. =]

GAH!! IM ALMOST THERE!!"
I should read n..."
Yes, please do. :D
Hmm... I came up with one that I probably wont ever use:
Painless: And I walked into the night, pretending to feel the coldness of the bitter wind against my face.
Painless: And I walked into the night, pretending to feel the coldness of the bitter wind against my face.
This'll probably be the last line the North Carolina:
"Let me start at the beginning."
"Let me start at the beginning."
The morning air smelled of roses and lilacs. That reminds me...
My last line stinks in Two Sparrows. XD
Here it is:
“Good.” He smiled brilliantly at me, and I smiled back at him.
Here it is:
“Good.” He smiled brilliantly at me, and I smiled back at him.

So now the last line of outcast is:
"You don't dare mess with Mother Nature's daughter."
Hehe. I like it. :D
I like the new last line better too. Awesome :P
Hmm... Here's one for Painless I'll probably never use:
"What if I told you there is a cure?"
Hmm... Here's one for Painless I'll probably never use:
"What if I told you there is a cure?"
Oh... Here's one for Wayward Dreams:
And I wasn't going to let go of my dreams this time. I was going to hold onto them and never let go.
And I wasn't going to let go of my dreams this time. I was going to hold onto them and never let go.

I open my eyes, taking in the hospital room walls; where this all started. I look to my right and jump with a start. Bright green eyes stare back at me. I move around the lump that has formed itself in my throat, "Tyler?"
It's not that good so far, and I'm going to fix it when I get there. It's way more intense when you know what's going on... but yeah.
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Sella wrote: "Oh, wow. So I had planned for the last line of Outcast to be 'She was gone', and when I wrote the ending it decided to change on me.
So now the last line of outcast is:
"You don't dare mess with..."
AAHHH!! Sella I loved that ending!!! It was brilliant! :D teehee
So now the last line of outcast is:
"You don't dare mess with..."
AAHHH!! Sella I loved that ending!!! It was brilliant! :D teehee
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Ronna wrote: "You know what's an awesome and annoying last line for me(right now)?
from Catching Fire by Suzanne Collins:
Gale: "Katniss, there is no district 12.""
Uh yeahh I was like … "What?!"
Of course, I didn't understand like ANY of that book at all … >_<
from Catching Fire by Suzanne Collins:
Gale: "Katniss, there is no district 12.""
Uh yeahh I was like … "What?!"
Of course, I didn't understand like ANY of that book at all … >_<
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Heh heh, I'm not sure about the last lines of the stories I'm writing right now. I only know one. It's for Unraveling. And it's just … "I'm sorry." … XD

from Catching Fire by Suzanne Collins:
Gale: "Katniss, there is no district 12.""
AHH! i skipped to the end too, to read it. exciting!
For Butterfly Fly it's...
She finally looked up at me, her eyes pleading for my help. "Allegra," She spoke slowly, as if that would make the words easier to speak. "I'm pregnant."
She finally looked up at me, her eyes pleading for my help. "Allegra," She spoke slowly, as if that would make the words easier to speak. "I'm pregnant."
Here's what the one from The Seventh Dimension is probably going to be:
It had all started from a simple string of love, jealousy, and hatred. A war became born from the ashes of a lost love that was resurrected as a type of hatred. A hatred that was off-kilter and unjustly directed, or rather a hatred in disguise. They had all blamed it on the lusting for power . . . but it wasn’t that. It wasn’t that at all. It was a loss of sight. It was all because they had forgotten how to forgive, but now they were all going to get a second chance—it might seem as though they had already gotten hundreds of them prior, and had failed . . . but this time it was real. This time they could really start over—it had all started in the way that all things do, and it ended in just the same way only to be resurrected. It had begun and ended in a flash of fire, just as all things do in the Seventh Dimension.
It had all started from a simple string of love, jealousy, and hatred. A war became born from the ashes of a lost love that was resurrected as a type of hatred. A hatred that was off-kilter and unjustly directed, or rather a hatred in disguise. They had all blamed it on the lusting for power . . . but it wasn’t that. It wasn’t that at all. It was a loss of sight. It was all because they had forgotten how to forgive, but now they were all going to get a second chance—it might seem as though they had already gotten hundreds of them prior, and had failed . . . but this time it was real. This time they could really start over—it had all started in the way that all things do, and it ended in just the same way only to be resurrected. It had begun and ended in a flash of fire, just as all things do in the Seventh Dimension.
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