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message 101: by Brigid ✩, No tears in the writer, no tears in the reader. (new)

Brigid ✩ | 11973 comments Mod
ur welcome XD


message 102: by Krys (new)

Krys (krisslee) | 5015 comments Mod
I'm coming up with ideas for some reason... So here's one for the second book the tilogy, Shadow Scarred:

"He's alive you know."

Jasmine stopped in her walking, and turned around once more. The speaker of the words was perfectly in shadow, his face obscured. "Who is?" Jaz inquired lightly.

"Ash."


message 103: by Brigid ✩, No tears in the writer, no tears in the reader. (new)

Brigid ✩ | 11973 comments Mod
ooh. sounds like a cliffhanger ;D


message 104: by Krys (new)

Krys (krisslee) | 5015 comments Mod
That one kind of is, actually haha


message 105: by Brigid ✩, No tears in the writer, no tears in the reader. (new)

Brigid ✩ | 11973 comments Mod
sweet. :)
i hate when a book has a cliffhanger and the next one doesn't come out for a long time. lol XD


message 106: by [deleted user] (new)

30 Days: (still iffy)

The snake shed its coil, and slithered into its hole.

or

I jumped into the mini van, ready to save the world. Again.

Which one do you guys like better?


message 107: by [deleted user] (new)

This is what I'm considering for Vigil.

I should have known better than to expect a happy ending.


message 108: by Brigid ✩, No tears in the writer, no tears in the reader. (new)

Brigid ✩ | 11973 comments Mod
Justyn wrote: "30 Days: (still iffy)

The snake shed its coil, and slithered into its hole.

or

I jumped into the mini van, ready to save the world. Again.

Which one do you guys like better?"


First one … sounds more symobolic. or something. :D


message 109: by Austin (new)

Austin (spartan349) | 14 comments Spirit of the Search: idk

The Songs of Time: A whisper or was that just the wind rippling through the leaves on the trees, Luke had no idea because he was no longer one of Earth but one of something much more.


message 110: by Everett (CupoJoe) (last edited Jan 03, 2010 08:00PM) (new)


message 111: by Sella (new)

Sella Malin | 3094 comments Kriss wrote: "I'm coming up with ideas for some reason... So here's one for the second book the tilogy, Shadow Scarred:

"He's alive you know."

Jasmine stopped in her walking, and turned around once more. T..."


Awesome cliffie! :P


message 112: by Krys (new)

Krys (krisslee) | 5015 comments Mod
Thanks :D


message 113: by Austin (new)

Austin (spartan349) | 14 comments Yeah very cool


message 114: by Austin (new)

Austin (spartan349) | 14 comments Justyn wrote: "Austin wrote: "Dream Seeker: The feather continued to drift upon the warm calm breeze.
"

Same as forest gump"


wow i never thought of that.


message 115: by Austin (new)

Austin (spartan349) | 14 comments Spirit of the search; the veil fell from Luke's eyes, finally Luke thought the interrogation has begun.


message 116: by [deleted user] (new)

Eye to eye with the person who started it all, I smiled.

or...

I slammed the sword down, but it hit the concrete floor.


message 117: by Alix (new)

Alix Lewandowsky (alixnicolee) I want to know if the story I'm writing should have a sequel to it because it ends like this:
Dragon Girl: Dunak is here, he's now, he's alive, he's smiling. And even when the dark clouds start crying rain over us, we don't get wet.


message 118: by [deleted user] (new)

AlixLew wrote: "I want to know if the story I'm writing should have a sequel to it because it ends like this:
Dragon Girl: Dunak is here, he's now, he's alive, he's smiling. And even when the dark clouds start cr..."


I think its your descision. If you are very happy with it, then you should do a sequel to it.


message 119: by Alix (new)

Alix Lewandowsky (alixnicolee) ok. I mean, I've had a lot of pressure because Dunak dies and my friends are always telling me that either I should bring him back to life, or make a sequel to it and THEN allow him to live. I'm kind of torn between ending it as it is, or adding another book. Thank you, though


message 120: by [deleted user] (new)

AlixLew wrote: "ok. I mean, I've had a lot of pressure because Dunak dies and my friends are always telling me that either I should bring him back to life, or make a sequel to it and THEN allow him to live. I'm ki..."

I just want to say one thing. A book is what a book is. I think you should write a sequel and not let him live! lol!


message 121: by Alix (new)

Alix Lewandowsky (alixnicolee) lol I might just do that! :)


message 122: by [deleted user] (new)

This is actually going to be the last line of Vigil (or something along these lines):

I had made a fantastic mess, and now I had to clean it up.


message 123: by Mandy (new)

Mandy  Harmon (mandyharmon) | 10724 comments I was completely and undeniably lost.


message 124: by Austin (new)

Austin (spartan349) | 14 comments Apocalyptic; The battle was over and we had won, but there was no joy only considerable sorrow and loss.


message 125: by [deleted user] (new)

She stood still, and it gave me ample opurtunity to kill her. I thought about it.


message 126: by Sella (new)

Sella Malin | 3094 comments The last line of Outcast's last chapter is going to be 'Outcast from life.' The last line of the epilogue is going to be 'She was gone.'

GAH!! IM ALMOST THERE!!


message 127: by [deleted user] (new)

Sella wrote: "The last line of Outcast's last chapter is going to be 'Outcast from life.' The last line of the epilogue is going to be 'She was gone.'

GAH!! IM ALMOST THERE!!"


cool.


message 128: by [deleted user] (new)

Sella wrote: "The last line of Outcast's last chapter is going to be 'Outcast from life.' The last line of the epilogue is going to be 'She was gone.'

GAH!! IM ALMOST THERE!!"


I should read now. =]


message 129: by Sella (new)

Sella Malin | 3094 comments Anna (Maxy) wrote: "Sella wrote: "The last line of Outcast's last chapter is going to be 'Outcast from life.' The last line of the epilogue is going to be 'She was gone.'

GAH!! IM ALMOST THERE!!"

I should read n..."


Yes, please do. :D


message 130: by Krys (new)

Krys (krisslee) | 5015 comments Mod
Hmm... I came up with one that I probably wont ever use:

Painless: And I walked into the night, pretending to feel the coldness of the bitter wind against my face.




message 131: by [deleted user] (new)

This'll probably be the last line the North Carolina:

"Let me start at the beginning."


message 132: by [deleted user] (new)

The morning air smelled of roses and lilacs. That reminds me...


message 133: by Hannah (new)

Hannah | 954 comments This is a really suckish last line, and I'll probably change it, but here:

"I hate you, too."


message 134: by [deleted user] (new)

My last line stinks in Two Sparrows. XD

Here it is:

“Good.” He smiled brilliantly at me, and I smiled back at him.


message 135: by Sella (new)

Sella Malin | 3094 comments Oh, wow. So I had planned for the last line of Outcast to be 'She was gone', and when I wrote the ending it decided to change on me.

So now the last line of outcast is:

"You don't dare mess with Mother Nature's daughter."

Hehe. I like it. :D


message 136: by Sella (new)

Sella Malin | 3094 comments Thanks. me too :)


message 137: by Krys (new)

Krys (krisslee) | 5015 comments Mod
I like the new last line better too. Awesome :P

Hmm... Here's one for Painless I'll probably never use:

"What if I told you there is a cure?"


message 138: by Krys (new)

Krys (krisslee) | 5015 comments Mod
Oh... Here's one for Wayward Dreams:

And I wasn't going to let go of my dreams this time. I was going to hold onto them and never let go.


message 139: by Phoebe (new)

Phoebe (phoebeandj) I haven't finished my book yet, but I've already decided what my last lines are going to be. (It's called Twins right now. It might change)

I open my eyes, taking in the hospital room walls; where this all started. I look to my right and jump with a start. Bright green eyes stare back at me. I move around the lump that has formed itself in my throat, "Tyler?"

It's not that good so far, and I'm going to fix it when I get there. It's way more intense when you know what's going on... but yeah.


message 140: by Kim (new)

Kim Crowley (kimcrow) | 1893 comments im reading that at the moment!! i skipped to the end and i was like WTF!?


message 141: by Kim (new)

Kim Crowley (kimcrow) | 1893 comments no you didnt ruin it :)
i read the last line a few hours back
im still confused about it :L


message 142: by Ky (new)

Ky (poeticshark) | 10786 comments Agh. Stupid ending. But at least it makes us want to read "Mockingjay".


message 143: by Kim (new)

Kim Crowley (kimcrow) | 1893 comments yeah


message 144: by Brigid ✩, No tears in the writer, no tears in the reader. (new)

Brigid ✩ | 11973 comments Mod
Sella wrote: "Oh, wow. So I had planned for the last line of Outcast to be 'She was gone', and when I wrote the ending it decided to change on me.

So now the last line of outcast is:

"You don't dare mess with..."


AAHHH!! Sella I loved that ending!!! It was brilliant! :D teehee


message 145: by Brigid ✩, No tears in the writer, no tears in the reader. (new)

Brigid ✩ | 11973 comments Mod
Ronna wrote: "You know what's an awesome and annoying last line for me(right now)?

from Catching Fire by Suzanne Collins:

Gale: "Katniss, there is no district 12.""


Uh yeahh I was like … "What?!"
Of course, I didn't understand like ANY of that book at all … >_<


message 146: by Brigid ✩, No tears in the writer, no tears in the reader. (new)

Brigid ✩ | 11973 comments Mod
Heh heh, I'm not sure about the last lines of the stories I'm writing right now. I only know one. It's for Unraveling. And it's just … "I'm sorry." … XD


message 147: by Mandy (new)

Mandy  Harmon (mandyharmon) | 10724 comments Ronna wrote: "You know what's an awesome and annoying last line for me(right now)?

from Catching Fire by Suzanne Collins:

Gale: "Katniss, there is no district 12.""


AHH! i skipped to the end too, to read it. exciting!


message 148: by [deleted user] (last edited Feb 23, 2010 05:28PM) (new)

For Butterfly Fly it's...

She finally looked up at me, her eyes pleading for my help. "Allegra," She spoke slowly, as if that would make the words easier to speak. "I'm pregnant."


message 149: by Krys (new)

Krys (krisslee) | 5015 comments Mod
O.o oh my....


message 150: by Krys (new)

Krys (krisslee) | 5015 comments Mod
Here's what the one from The Seventh Dimension is probably going to be:

It had all started from a simple string of love, jealousy, and hatred. A war became born from the ashes of a lost love that was resurrected as a type of hatred. A hatred that was off-kilter and unjustly directed, or rather a hatred in disguise. They had all blamed it on the lusting for power . . . but it wasn’t that. It wasn’t that at all. It was a loss of sight. It was all because they had forgotten how to forgive, but now they were all going to get a second chance—it might seem as though they had already gotten hundreds of them prior, and had failed . . . but this time it was real. This time they could really start over—it had all started in the way that all things do, and it ended in just the same way only to be resurrected. It had begun and ended in a flash of fire, just as all things do in the Seventh Dimension.


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