[Complete 77k] Queer Paranormal Romance

[Honey]

Hi! I'm free to do swaps/critiques

You don't have to do in-line editing/comments
I just want to know how the stories pacing, character development are, and if there are any plot-holes/confusion along the way.
I hope you will feel comfortable to stop reading/dnf the book at any point, I just ask that you tell me which chapter and if there is any particular reason. It can even be that you're too busy or you're just not in the mood for it. It is all helpful feedback, in my opinion.

I can provide the first four chapters for those who want to test it first. We can share a few chapters at a time if you'd like!

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When Isko Silang turns into a vampire, he does the only thing he can do: flee out of the country to a small town in Italy, but when his stepsister suddenly plans to study abroad in Italy, he rushes to fake a heartbeat and cover the smell of death—except his family sends a bodyguard who’s all too suspicious about his behavior—or rather—his heart.

Isko tries to bury his worries in the dimples of focaccia bread and ignore the hunger pangs when wine becomes too viscous. His stepsister’s bodyguard, Toji Matsumoto is aloof, quiet, and loyal to his family to a fault and believes Isko wants his stepsister out of the picture.

Toji Matsumoto is tasked to protect the Silang family’s daughter, and he’s pretty sure Isko exhibits strong werewolf traits despite the claims and files that says he’s human. Family bonds always wavered under the grand scheme of succession, and he would be damned if he let his guard down just because Isko has a way-too bright of a smile and they share a bed.

But sharing a bed becomes the least of their concerns when the vampires who turned Isko resurface, and his stepsister’s put in danger. Isko doesn’t know how long he can keep up with the charades until he succumbs to bloodlust and loses everyone and himself.

Explicit sexual content included

CW: elements of grief, gore/violence

Tropes: one-sided enemies-to-lovers, one bed, forced proximity, brief fake dating and misunderstanding, grumpy x sunshine, vampire x werewolf

Includes Tagalog and Italian glossary 😅

[Thesba]

HI Honey, I have a real world Queer story a little longer, if you're interested in swapping.


I need a reader to peruse my first manuscript for areas that flow well, and areas that fall flat.

Is the Romance believable, relatable and the pay off at the end well worth the journey?


Genre: second-chance romance (Adult, Clean)
Length: 88,000 words
Target Audience: Adult contemporary romance readers
Fiction, real world


Rewrite the Stars – Synopsis

Set in Sydney Australia, 2017 during exciting times, #MeToo movement, Same Sex Vote.

Fresh off a painful divorce, bookkeeper and dance teacher Curie Anne Hayes must navigate life as a single middle-aged woman. Moving into Sydney’s CBD offers her a thrilling new start—nights out with her students, rediscovering her independence, and the possibility of becoming the woman she once was. But her heart betrays her with a dangerous new crush: Cam, a charming player who seems unexpectedly eager to be her friend.

As their friendship deepens, she must decide whether to guard her heart or risk it on something real.

The manuscript has been professionally edited, 1 beta reader for LGBTQ+ sensitivity (two thumbs up), and I have 2 more beta reader working on it as I type.

I am doing that final polish to get it ready for pitching to publishing houses vaguely next year.

If you are interested in swapping books, please let me know.

I do like to do inline comments and totally cool with explicit content. Mine doesn't because I focused on the emotional and psychological transformation of the 2 FMCs instead.