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Writing Advice & Discussion > Which voice: is it First ("I"), Second ("You"), Third ("He/She"), or somewhere in between?

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message 1: by Kay (new)

Kay | 10 comments Hello Peoples!!

I am currently reading this book and I am trying to decide what voice is this. Here is the first couple of sentences.

"On the corner of Lenox and 135th Street, stood a deadbeat town with deadbeat folks looking for a deadbeat time. The only sign of life for undead folks was at Jimbo’s hamburger palace, where you could be an American hero."

Any suggestion?


message 2: by Alan (new)

Alan Shand | 4 comments It's third person with the colloquial but technically incorrect use of 'you' where it should say 'one'.


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