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Hey, I think this sounds pretty good! Only thing that I think could be a little clearer is the line about "the mysteries of an alternate life." Does this mean, another life that she leads, or another reality? Something else? The lack of clarity here is the only thing that stands out, otherwise I'd say you do a good job of laying out the stakes. the obstacles and the goals of the characters!Hope this helps!
Gail wrote: "Left trauma stricken and haunted by visions following a coma, Helane is coming undone. Will her visions lead to healing or the madhouse?1979, Idaho. Helane Hagan continues to encounter otherworld..."
Hi Gail. Overall, the blurb has it all. Hooks, time setting, and conflict, but the tone could use a bit more urgency.
For example, the section: 'Recovering from the murderous acts of her ex-husband, this resilient young woman fights to regain her life. But when she begins therapy for post-traumatic stress, signs that she is descending into madness besiege her,' feels a little passive. It doesn’t give much insight into what readers should expect from the story.
The tone doesn't give much idea for the reader to get a hook on which genre to expect.
I hope this helps!
1979, Idaho. Helane Hagan continues to encounter otherworldly visions. Recovering from the murderous acts of her ex-husband, this resilient young woman fights to regain her life. But when she begins therapy for post-traumatic stress, signs that she is descending into madness besiege her.
In remarkable mystical journeys, she uncovers the mysteries of an alternate life. At the same time, she is determined to recover from traumatic injury. Things go wrong when her psychic encounters and her psychiatric treatment collide. As her friends and the love of her life work to pull her through, they discover something even darker is threatening her.
Will they uncover the truth before she succumbs to madness and ruin?