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Improved? lol Query: Virtual Graffiti
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Amazing improvement.Just need to strip away the excess stuff.
Paras 1+2 combined
Paras 3+4 combined
Quick & dirty Ex.
Aboard a massive space station encircling Earth, sixteen-year-old Staz abandons her privileged life to connect with Ada, a failed experiment in birth in space who relies on art to give her life meaning.
When Staz hacks into Ada’s brain to connect her to Dreamtime—a network of thousands of subconscious minds to solve problems--the connection restores Ada's purpose and identity but exposes a chilling hidden conspiracy of manipulation that can turn anyone into a puppet. Worse, her new abilities have made Ada a target for factions desperate to control her.
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In 2139 AD, aboard the Ring, a massive space station encircling Earth, sixteen-year-old Anastazja ‘Staz’ Kenostaphos turns her back on her privileged life to follow her heart. She’s fallen for Ada Stahl, the only human to survive birth in space in over eighty years. Once hailed as a miracle and a symbol of humanity’s future among the stars, Ada is now shunned—a relic of a failed experiment, her body unable to integrate with the nanotech that everyone else relies on to survive in space.
Driven by love and desperation, Staz impulsively hacks into Ada’s brain, planting a seed of the Dreamtime—a clandestine network that uses tens of thousands of subconscious minds to solve problems no normal computer can handle. For Ada, it’s a lifeline, a way to reclaim her purpose and identity amid a society that sees her as obsolete.
But when Ada’s virtual art is suddenly destroyed, Staz uncovers a chilling truth: the AI nanotech system, Aegis, which controls thousands of full immersion virtuals and the medical nanos across humanity, was always meant to be a tool of political manipulation. Behind the façade of safety, anyone could become a puppet, their perceptions and actions controlled without their knowledge.
As Ada’s abilities begin to improve thanks to the Dreamtime, whispers spread: if Ada can do this now, maybe she really is the miracle they once believed in—the key to humanity’s survival. Ada goes from pariah to prize, hunted by factions desperate to control her.
Entangled by love, danger, and their shared connection through the Dreamtime, Staz and Ada must confront the hidden powers pulling the strings—and the fate of humanity itself.
Complete at 115,000 words, “Virtual Graffiti” is a near-singularity science fiction novel exploring love, rebellion, and survival in a world on the brink of war, perfect for fans of Adrian Tchaikovsky’s Lords of Uncreation and Christopher Paolini’s To Sleep in a Sea of Stars.