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-Paragraph 1-My name is Ren Tavern. It has been more than enough years of my life until I was sick of it. Although in human years I'm only 18, my immortality has had me living forever. Everytime I died I would come back a year younger than before. It is a tragic tale indeed. But before I met my original self before my sad reincarnation, I lived for more than a million years.
-paragraph 2-
“Here ye Here ye the marriage will be held on the sunset of the 4th day in our new week The king and queen insist all peasants show to the wedding as to help decorate and make the food. The best worker will have the high responsibility of keeping both the king and queen safe for the year. With the possibility of freedom.”
-Paragraph 3-
This was my first romance… The year is 1499 and all the peasants of the town were forced to work On the Prince and Princesses wedding. I was highly known for being disobedient to the king and queen but I was also their best assassin. Known for being well hidden In shadows and greatly skilled in the fighting position. Even in my past life people never noticed me. I was sent back to the castle of slackuff. I gave it that name after seeing how much the peasants worked and how easy the maidens and townsfolk slept all day. Slack offs they were. However I had no clue about the daughter being of age of marriage . Her name was nazuna. It was such a capitating name that I focused more on the meaning of it than the actual girl. As I was riding atop my horse “bucky '' we were greeted by some thieves. Greeted is a loosely used term as they stabbed my horse and tackled me. Nobody had ever hurt my animal in front of me and this got me angry. I kicked the chubby one down with a swift movement turning to the other two. I was aware of them, they were known for trying to capture the princess for ransom money. However, as I had no use to kill them, I just snapped the fat one's nose to send a message showing the mask to them letting them know they met the king's assassin.
-Paragraph 4-
The mask was a curse I had to wear as a sign of my former life. I hid it for a while. Using a dark cloak to deter people from me. However it was an amazing scare factor. The mask has a smile with pitch black eye holes. Yet I felt one with it. Some have named me as the unknown masker however it was not deemed right to call me such names. So I ended up becoming the king's assassin after killing his enemies with much effort. Doing such gave me an alibi when I had murdered one for their rude remarks. I was not aware how awful I was being and now I regret every second remembering their faces.
-Paragraph 5-
After a while I had finally arrived at the castle. It had decorations already up and people were dying to get in, while the peasants were dying. I envied them for their fragile lives. Walking to the castle was a long and shameful walk, as people hated other townsfolk being in their town. I could hear the people speaking down upon me and I was going to snap, realizing this is the most amount of guards out ever seen. The occasion was quite special to have this unnecessary amount out, all they needed was me. The guards led me to the ridiculously large door and opened it. The Queen and King were staring from their thrones. I got on one knee as I had to make them believe I respected them. The third and smaller throne was empty, it had to be the princesses.
-Queen-
“Thank you for showing your filth back here again, we need you to assist us with the wedding.”
-Mc-
“No way. Because why else would thou call for me?”
-Queen-
"As you are aware our daughter is getting married to the prince of another castle. Yet most people don't accept the marriage. We need you to keep an eye on our daughter for the rest of the week until the wedding is over. We will pay handsomely. Of course you mustn't be caught as our daughter would hate that we had hired any type of protection. You are the only one who has never failed us, please keep her safe.”
-Mc-
“But is that not like stalking?”
-King-
“We won't pay you to be garrulous now. You may stay in the guest bedroom as our treat"
-Paragraph 6-
I got up from the ground and was led to the room. It was truly the greatest room I had ever seen. The beds were like kitty cats cuddling with me. The room had a balcony to see the pond out the side of the house. It was a truly beautiful sight. As I sat down and the sun started setting I started to think about the job, as I have never been hired as a bodyguard. But the cash could buy me a new horse or even a home of my own. Just then a noise was heard from outside. It was the noise of somebody climbing. I had guessed a rope but when I went outside I saw it was a bedsheet on the window above. The person climbed up the sheet. I had no idea who this was or if they were a threat so I yelled at them.
-Mc-
“What the hell are you doing?”
-Paragraph 7-
The person got startled and fell. That's when I noticed it was a female and that room above was in fact the princesses room. I panicked and jumped down to catch the figure falling from the tall mansion. However there were no screams from the figure as they fell. It was a short silence. I caught up to the figure and held on to them, putting myself under to break the fall at least. Then… there was nothing.
-Paragraph 8-
I woke up in the guest room. I knew exactly what had happened. I died. Looking at my arm pulling my sleeve it was confirmed. The tattoos that U got to show what age I was, showed that the 18 y.o one had vanished. I am back to 17. This infuriated me greatly. I had been saving my deaths for me to go to a bar without suspicion. As I was re-making the bed a servant walked in and offered the bath and stated that the work will begin after my breakfast. I took a luxurious bath and went to eat breakfast at a small diner. Bread and butter was the best meal even without protein. I got a note later that the princess was going on a carriage ride with her friend. I decided to go old school and trail behind with a horse just enough distance to not be noticed.
-Paragraph 9-
After a while the carriage stopped outside of a humble home. The princess stepped out of the carriage with a black robe covering her. I was lucky enough to hide because there was no way somebody would go down this road for themself. I hooked my horse to a tree and snuck inside. I had snuck into the bathroom window. Walking out of the two story home I saw two girls in the living room. It was obvious who the princess was. Her silver hair had more beauty than the queen herself. I hid in the supply closet and passed the time with my own imagination. I imagined a marriage, with a happy family, no more killing, and no more fighting. The wedding was small but amazing and it was all I could ever dream of. The family of both coming together to share the moment. But that's when it struck me. I had no family, or friends. Due to my long life, everybody I had loved was long dead. This shook me to my core. I could never live a normal life again. I couldn't get emotionally attached to people or else it would worsen my curse of immortality. Back to the real world I peeked out of the closet to see the princess staring at me. I freaked and knew I had gotten caught and she would report me to the King, putting a bounty on my head.
-Nazuna-
“Hide.”
-Mc-
“Wh-...”
-Nazuna-
“I know why you are here, hide a little longer. A few men will be attacking later.”
-Paragraph 10-
I hid back in the closet. Then I heard the girls go back to talking.
-Mc-
*I can get out of here if I just get back into the bathroom and out the window.*
-Paragraph 11-
I looked both ways before hearing the girls upstairs talking cheerfully. I made my escape and waited in the small forest outside the home. I waited until the carriage came to pick up the princess. However this was not the same carriage. A bunch of men got out of it and the tattoo on the big man's back was a symbol of sin. This was bad. They barged into the home and yelled. I started to run toward the house hearing the girls scream. I pulled out my daggers to help The princess and rushed into the living area. Both the girls were tied, before any reaction I was stabbed in the heart and then the neck.
-Paragraph 12-
But a year off was just what I needed. I stood up as the wounds healed. I charged the man and took a hit to the face. The mask broke his hand as it was my only unbreakable item.
-Thug-
“Who the hell are you?”
-Paragraph 13-
Whispers arose from the other members. They knew. But their idiot leader had no idea who he just killed.
-Thug follower 1-
“Wait, is that the assassin?”
-Thug follower 2-
“Oh my god its the assassin”
-Thug follower 3-
“The immortal assassin? Impossible!”
-Paragraph 14-
Their leader turned to me as I raised my head showing the mask. I loved the look of fear on him. They were about to leave but before the leader could make his escape I socked him in his face.
-Mc-
“Jackass.”
-Paragraph 15-
They left. I turned to see the princess and her friend had already broke the ropes and escaped. Shocked- I ran out to my horse watching the nimrods speed away. The real carriage was in the front of the house with both girls inside. I hopped aboard my horse and threaded along. Heading back to the castle, something fell out of the door. An invitation to a party. Obviously I knew this was not mine, but the princesses. I decided to give it to her back home.
-Paragraph 16-
Back at the castle of a home I had walked outside for a walk while there was still sunlight. Putting the robe on to hide the mask. At the town people looked at me weird because of how I hid my face. Just then I sensed the presence of somebody following me. For once he wasn't able to find whomever it was.
-Paragraph 17-
I had walked past a boastful man on how he was champ of chess. When nobody paid attention to him he grabbed at a random woman. Seeing the situation I ran to help.
-Mc-
“So you are the champ of chess right?”
-Paragraph 18-
This worked as he let go of the lady
-Chess guy-
“That's right! I'm the only good chess player. Unlike you, worthless crap.”
-Mc-
“Mind If we go for a round?”
-Chess guy-“
Easy win! If you lose, you give me a girl to have fun with tonight!”
-Paragraph 19-
This sickened me to my core. With rage I had to agree or else he would just keep harassing innocent people.
-Chess guy-
“4f”
-Mc-
“So you take the special moves huh? Pretty good for a chess champ.”
-Chess guy-
"I will smoke you"
-Mc-
“E6”
-Chess guy-
“Take that pawn real quick.”
-Mc-
“That's okay…”
“H6”
-Chess guy-
“G4”
-Mc-
“H4…Checkmate.”
-Paragraph 19-
The man gwaked as he lost in a mere amount of moves. He was a liar and a sinner.
-Mc-
“You used the worst opening in chess.”
-Paragraph 20-
The man tried to punch me but I quickly dodged and walked away letting him know if he ever tried anything like that again he would most likely never wake up. He walked away ashamed that I had beaten him. I got back to the room and got dressed to present myself. The mask was the only issue showing itself. I grabbed the invitation and knocked on the princess's door. She just stood there looking at me until saying hi very quietly. I pulled out the invitation and asked if it was hers.
-Nazuna-
“No..”
( WILL CONTINUE LATER THIS WEEK GIVE ME ANY INFO ON HOW TO HELP THE BOOK)
This the first few pages of my book. The paragraph noting and character noting is there cause fonts don't change on the website
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Potentially to make it better you could add more descriptive language to show how annoying the main character is with his immortality. Also you might want to change up the way the MC talks because they sort of sound like they live in the present day. I don’t know if that was on purpose or not. Also maybe more descriptive about what things look like.
Overall so far, it’s really good and I am excited to read more!
I also might post a bit of my story later this week!
✨Arielle (Queen of the stars)✨ wrote: "Hi! I am so happy you posted this story. It is really good and I like the plot a lot. Potentially to make it better you could add more descriptive language to show how annoying the main character..."
The speaking is meant to sound like that. This story takes place after the reincarnation and while he had lived in many different generations of slang and words his slang still calls back to present day.
Another thing is that the time of where the Mc is speaking is unknown. For instance he could be speaking a day later or a million years later you know.
-Nazuna-*I shut the door on him…*
-Paragraph 21- (Nazuna)
I had no means to do that…But I couldn't look at him without getting red. Why was he there?! I had loved his work ever since he had rescued my friends a few years back. He was my only crush. Yet I was also angry at him for following me. The fact he even bothered a Royal was surprising. The audacity of him. If she was any other princess in a million years he would be killed until he was but a mere infant. That would serve him right. But the thought of him being a cute child shocked me. I reddened imagining his body in his 20s. Then I thought about the mask. The fact he never took it off was startling to me. How could somebody live like that? But maybe he was hideous without the mask. Maybe he had a death curse with his eyes! I hated to admit it but I was seriously crushing over him. As I sat down on my bed I remembered the invitation. It was for marriage. There would be no issue with that if I actually liked who I would marry. The prince was a true scum to the earth. All he ever talked about was himself and the only reason he chose to be with me was my body. Nothing was good about him. When he invited me to the party I knew he just wanted to show me off.
-Nazuna-
*But with the masked one… no, most likely he has no intentions of stopping the prince.*
-Paragraph 22- (Nazuna)
The proxy marriage was the reason I planned on running away. However the masked one had helped me, sacrificing another one of his lifes. I had put him in his bed that night and I remembered the stories of his life. A loner. That's when I saw the paper had been slid under my bedroom door. I ripped it as many times as I could try, making a mess in my room. I knew the prince would be fuming if I didn't go. My parents would've also nearly killed me. So I bit the salt and went that night. Dressing up a knock came from my door. I opened it to see him.
-Paragraph 23- (Mc)
I put my hand out to greet the princess formally.
-Mc-
“Apologies for the non formal introduction earlier. Your mother had requested I don't talk to you. But the time for that is quite far and gone. My name is Ren. I will be your protector for the week.”
-Nazuna-
*I need to stay on his bad side. I don't need his protection. All I have to do is make him embarrassed and leave*
“Oh great. Another jester trying to swoon a princess. Such filth in a man.”
-Mc-
“I- No. That's not why I'm here. Your marriage will be in two days and most people are not happy about this. Your beauty has reached upon our land and to other countries even. They will try and kill both you and your fiance ”
-Nazuna-
*DID HE JUST CALL ME BEAUTIFUL?!*
-Paragraph 24- (Mc)
We sat in silence for a minute looking at each other. She was beet red so I decided to apologize as I thought it was out of anger. When she said nothing and slammed the door I decided to head to the diner for food.
-Paragraph 25- (Mc)
After my soup I went back to the house and went to sleep. I hoped tomorrow would be a better day.
-Paragraph 26- (Nazuna)
I snuck out of the house after Ren left. I couldn't let him know that I had no interest in the prince, as he would have ratted me out for some quick cash. I slid down the bedsheets and landed on the ground. Trying hard not to let the tears drop I ran to the little shack I had built for myself when I was little. This was my only safe spot as nobody could understand what I felt. I thought about ways to escape the wedding, rejecting straight up, murder, Running away, Ren… But then my friend crawled in the little hold to the shack and snapped me out of it. My childhood friend… She was a handsome gal with greenish gray hair. She always had a bandanna around her head.
-Nazuna-
“Oh- Hey jacie!!”
-Jacie-
“Hey I brought snacks… how are you doing?”
-Nazuna-
“Oh I'm quite fine just… Talking to myself I guess.”
-Jacie-
“Interesting… You seem collected in your thoughts,”
-Nazuna-
“No… I'm not even close. I'm in shambles; the prince bastard is only using me. He has no heart…”
-Jacie-
“Flee the country then. Do anything but what your parents want. I'm sick of royals, no offense. Even with my unknown presence I would surely get caught by the guards if they bothered to look for me. In fact I wouldn't mind a buff and tall guard taking me away. To be in the presence of one of those men would make any girl drool. What kind of men do you like nazuna?”
-Nazuna-
“I like the ones who are wise, heroic, and do it for others not for recognition….”
-Jacie-
“Oh… I see! So like a legend or something like that? How romantic. A princess and a magic love…”
-Paragraph 27- (Nazuna)
Just then Ren opened the dingy door.
-Mc-
“I won't make you come back just yet”
-Paragraph 28- (nazuna)
Then he looked at jacie and gave a small wave
-Mc-
“Get back to your respected places when the sun reaches the shack. Got it?”
-Paragraph 29- (Nazuna)
We shook our heads and he gave a thumbs up…then left.
-Jacie-
“What… was-... who?... Who was that godlike man?”
-Paragraph 30- (Nazuna)
I had not told her about Ren yet so I decided to tell her the story.
-Jacie-
“Ahhhh! Makes sense of course you have a taste for legends. That's your true knight in shining armor.”
-Nazuna-
“That's not even true and you know it. Once I escape the marriage me and that one strong brewer downtown will escape and live happily ever after.” *I said that being defensive more than honest.*
-Jacie-
“The man may be strong but he is also married. So big no no.”
-Nazuna-
“Oh…”
-Paragraph 31- (Nazuna)
A silence fell in the room and then Jacie then gave me a speech.
-Jacie-
“ I hate to see a sista feeling this way… How about…You fake your death! It would be a perfect alibi!”
-Nazuna-
“I could never… I would be found in an instant without even a second to escape.”
-Jacie-
“Then get Ren to help. You said he was an amazing stealthy guy so get him to teach you.”
-Paragraph 32- (Nazuna)
I hated it when she had good plans. But I had too little time to do so. I decided to scrap it. We both said our goodbyes as I climbed the bedsheets back to my bed. I had to find a way to convince him to help me.
-Paragraph 33- (Mc)
I woke up to the princess laying on my bed. I immediately leaped out of the bed to realize what had happened. As I had also used a bedsheet to get down and back into my room. Since It was really hot I left the bedsheet and the window open. Looking at the princess I had realized that she looked even more beautiful in sleep. Just then she woke up.
-Nazuna-
“Muh…mehh….wha-WHA?! WHAT THE HELL ARE YOU DOING IN MY ROOM YOU PERVERT. GET OUT!”
-Paragraph 34- (Mc)
She started throwing objects from the room waiting for her to realize it wont do anything. Just then I knew if the ruckus was to continue we would awake the royals So I grabbed her by the shoulder and leaned in.
-Mc-
“This is my room”
-Nazuna-
“What?”
*No way..NO WAY NO WAY NO WAY! IT WAS MY MISTAKE! AND HE IS RATHER CLOSE.*
-Paragraph 34- (Mc)
She then ran out of the room without another word. I just wanted the whole week over. Even if I had to be here I also could leave whenever I could. Nobody would notice where I went so there was no danger. But an unknown presence begged me to stay. Like a little girl tugging on my robe. I feel like I had lost it at that point. The wedding was in two days. Almost over with… The princess then peeked her head in and sheepishly said
-Nazuna-
“Sorry”
-Paragraph 35- (Mc)
It was a much softer and much rarer voice of hers.
-Mc-
“No no It was truly my fault. Last night I also snuck out using a bedsheet.”
-Paragraph 36- (Mc)
She then just looked at me with her eyes looking at the mask and smiled.
-Nazuna-
“Then it was both of our faults huh?”
-Paragraph 37- (Mc)
Before I could respond she walked away smiling. Later that day the princess went on a shopping spree. It seemed like she knew exactly what she wanted even without a list. Dress stores, decoration stores, and sweets stores were her favorite. But she had a look on her. A sad look… I couldn't leave her there but I couldn't interfere. So I decided to knock on her friend's door when she passed by. I knew where she lived because of the info told by the guards and the last passby.
-Jacie-
“Oh hey there misterrrrr…?”
-Mc-
"Tavern. The princess is looking rather down. You're her friend. Help her out."
-Paragraph 38-
I then made my leave as her friend ran toward the princess.
-Jacie-
“Hey nazuna!”
-Nazuna-
“Oh hey there jacie! What brings you here?”
-Jacie-
“Oh uh- I just noticed you looked down through the window. Is it about the wedding?”
-Paragraph 39- (Nazuna)
I looked down and agreed. She then offered the cafe on the other side of town so I took the offer.
-Paragraph 40- (Mc)
The princess walked away with her friend and I felt accomplished. However I felt the presence of another being. Beyond a demon and beyond a god. Death…
(WILL CONTINUE LATER THIS WEEK)
--Im almost done with another part. Still working only an hour a day. Every day I make at least 876 words on the book.--
--Here's another part of the book. Happy friday :)---Death-
“Hey hey it's my favorite immortal! How's the weather in the east today?”
-Mc-
“Thy weather is fine.”
-Paragraph 41- (Mc)
I walked away staying at least 100 meters away from the princess so as to not raise suspicions.
-Death-
“What new Royal will you give to me today, dear old friend? Perhaps the king wants the head of another royale? Their flesh is always pure to eat”
-Mc-
“I was requested to protect the princess. No deaths today.”
-Death-
“What a shame. My reaper brothers wanted a feast but they are all in the vikings territory for the week. The flux got to them and I disagreed with them because I thought we might get some royal blood this week as a gift.”
-Mc-
“As I said. No deaths.”
-Paragraph 42- (Mc)
The princess and her friend walked into the cafe and we both walked to the shop on the other side of the street.
-Mc-
“Do you want anything? Beer? Perhaps?”
-Death-
“I thought you wanted to not drink because of your age?”
-Mc-
“Screw that, it's about to be the 1500s! There is no illegal drinking age yet plus the mask hides most of the face.”
-Paragraph 43- (Mc)
I Just needed an excuse to watch the princess.
-Death-
“Fair point old foe. However, how do you plan to drink with the mask on?”
-Mc-
“Straws.”
-Death-
“What is a strawing that thy is speaking of?”
-Mc-
“Oh that's right…They haven't been invented yet have they. Look, I'll teach you how to make one.”
-Paragraph 44- (Mc)
I looked at death and appreciated how he could be my only forever friend, Albeit at a rival standpoint. He always came over when he heard I died just to find out I'm back to life. Eventually he stopped coming to my death spots. But from time to time we met again and again. We had grown onto each other. Death was a black haired dark skinned big guy. I had to admit he had good looks. Even if the only people who saw him were people who had fallen once. Sadly only few people could be revived at the time. So I gave death no choice but to be my friend. I looked out the window of the brew to see the princess and her friend chatting. Drinking a little more before heading out to leave the princess, her guards were coming to escort her. I noticed a couple of thugs looking at me with a stare. I walked up to them.
-Mc-
“What seems to be the matter?”
-Thug-
“You are the issue cuckold . Get out of here before we beat thy to death.”
-Mc-
“I'm sorry?”
-Thug-
“You heard me. Get out of here thou masked freak. “
-Mc-
“Say that again”
-Thug-
“GET OUT OF HERE THOU MASKED FRE-”
-Paragraph 45- (Mc)
I grabbed his head and slammed it on the table knocking him cold. His group then got up and tried to attack me. Realizing what was about to happen, death yelled me on. Obviously he wanted some human flesh, but death was too good for the assholes.
Grabbing the skinny man's dagger I broke his hand and took it for my own. The big guy who had an ax tried to take a swing. I merely ducked and slit his leg then stood and pointed the blade to his neck. I was then stabbed in the back of the head. However before I lost another year of my life I turned and grabbed his head. I started headbutting him over and over again. His face was no longer recognizable yet he was still breathing. I then blacked out.
-Paragraph 46- (Nazuna)
I saw the whole thing. The blood and the gore. I had to go help Ren. People would grow suspicious of his breathing being present. I ran in and lifted Ren's bridal style. I ran out to meet my friend questioning me. I couldn't hear her. I felt a tight pain in my chest and I couldn't focus. I ran Ren to the carriage and told the rider to take Ren to a sleeping tent on the far edge of time. He obliged when I gave him a great sum of coins. A few moments later the guards had grabbed me and took me to my own home. I was scolded and sent to my room. It was now night and he had not come back. Sadly I crawled into my bed and slept horribly.
-Paragraph 47- (Nazuna)
I woke up the next morning to a letter on my bed. It was a drawing of Ren with a caption above that said “Thank you”. I had no reaction to this information so I just got ready for the day. While in my tub I realized something.
-Nazuna-
*REN WENT INTO MY ROOM WHILE I WAS ASLEEP. THAT MAN IS TERRIBLY DENSE*
-Paragraph 48- (Nazuna)
This flustered me greatly as I got out of the tub and into a fresh dress. My father had ordered the prince to take me out for dinner. It pissed me off that my father had to TELL the prince to take me on a date. But I was more pissed I HAD to go. There was no way around it so I bit the pepper and went along with it. I got ready to do the cleaning of my room for the day and started off with the floor. Giving some good scrubs. That's how most of the day went until the sun had set.
-Paragraph 49- (Nazuna)
The prince showed up with a white suit. I will admit he was hot, but his personality was an ogre. I was aware that he was looking at my chest.
-Nauna-
*Gross…*
-Paragraph 50- (Nazuna)
The day of the wedding was tomorrow so I knew what his true intentions were. Showing me off… I couldn't take it. I wished Ren would just stop the guy. Why couldn't Ren capture this man? I held the tears in and followed him into the carriage.
-Paragraph 51- (Mc)
I looked out my window saddened that this marriage was by proxy. The princess really was a sweet girl but she was forced into marriage with somebody she never loved. I could sense her discomfort with him while watching her movements from afar. I had to help her out and the timing was perfect. So I finally planned on his assassination. I knew what kind of person he was. He had forced himself on multiple women and blackmailed them to be sent to his dungeon where he would torture them. So the sympathy was far from my mind. This mission has been on my plate for years now. But now with his guard down and in a moving cart it should be an easy kill. But with the princess inside I would have to be careful as to not harm the girl. This was going to be an issue for my go to plans. The drive off, the toxin, wasps. None of it would work. I remember in my past life I watched a movie. “Final stop” A log scene was present and it obliterated the character. This would be difficult as I would have to make the carriage go fast enough to cause any actual damage. So I had ordered death to compromise. The log will fall from a tree on the prince's side. And to make sure that the princess is safe Death had given a safety spell for the princess only for the night. The plan was easier said than done. All I had to do was convince the princess to get the prince to get the driver to grab her friend. Again, easier said than done. I followed the prince and princess on their outing. They went to dinner and a few clothing shops. I watched as the tension grew between the two. The princess looked very upset. I then watched as a man approached the two. Overhearing what was going on, the man was hitting on the princess.
-Unknown man-
“Cmon bute, have a night with a real man.”
-Nauna-
“Stick a twig up there will ya?”
-Prince "Charming"-
“Now nazuna, that's no way to treat somebody. As he is admitting your beauty.”
-Nazuna-
“You're not gonna stop the man?”
-Unknown man-
“I'll pay as much as you want for one night with her good sir.”
-Paragraph 52- (Mc)
The man showed his gold in a bag then they continued to negotiate. This was the worst thing I could have seen. I wanted to jump down and kill the asshole. But showing where I was isn't the best option. That's when the prince handed the princess over to the man. She was struggling to get out of his grasp. That was the last straw. Time to be dramatic was needed. Screw the original mission. I was going to kill him after saving the princess once again. The man ran with her while she yelled. Nobody stepped in cause it was the princess, not even the guards. What the hell was wrong with these people?! When they turned the corner I made my move.
-Nazuna-
“LET ME GO CREEP! GET OFF! HELP ANYBODY!”
-Unknown man-
“Quit yelling or I'll make sure the pain will be even more than you could ask for, Dear princess.”
-Paragraph 53- (Nazuna)
That's when the man bummed into a shadowy figure.
-Unknown man-
“HEY WATCH WHERE YOU'RE GOING.”
-Mc-
“That's a pretty lady you got there…She seems unwell. Would you kindly let her go?”
-Paragraph 54- (Mc)
It was the same chess man and his breath reeked of booze
-Paragraph 55- (Nazuna)
I recognized the voice. It was Ren. He was here to save me, against the princes selling.
-Chess guy-
“You got a problem with it, freak? Get out of here before I have you killed.”
-Mc-
“I said let her go.”
-Chess guy-
“Thou has asked for it cockalorum”
-Paragraph 56- (Nazuna)
Ren grabbed the man's arm when he swung. The man let me go and I ran. Crying.
-Paragraph 57- (Mc)
I snapped his arm. I had officially lost it. My anger was beyond a simple beating. The prince would die along with this man.
-Chess guy-
“HEY LET GO WHAT THE HELL?! OW HELP DON'T JUST STAND THERE PEOPLE HELP ANYBODY!”
-Mc-
“SILENCE…”
-Paragraph 58-
I grabbed the dagger I had grabbed the night before and I slit his throat watching as he bled out and fell to the ground. But that was not enough. He was still twitching. I had enough of it. I got on my knees and started bashing his face in. Hit after hit my anger, instead of decreasing, made me realize this was the wrong man to kill. The prince. I had to kill the prince…. He had to die.
-- I will post more tomorrow when I have more time--
-Paragraph 59- (Mc)I got up with blood drenched clothes. I ran like a mad man to where the prince was heading. He was going to the brewery downtown. I was fueled with anger on how somebody who I thought could never get worse got much, much worse. Millions of years in this world and he was the worst royal by far. I barged into the brewery and practically threw myself at him. I started to choke him as hard as I could. White noise was all I could hear. People were screaming but I couldn't hear them. His eyes lost their life and I kept holding on to him. That's when a hard object hit me on my head. My eyes got dizzy and I watched as people rushed to the prince. Then there was only dark.
-Paragraph 60- (Mc)
I woke up in a cellar. I remember the two murders I had done the night before.
-Mc-
*Dammit. Caught for the second time this decade.*
-Paragraph 61- (Mc)
I had never thought that I could be so reckless. My anger had gotten the best of me. That's when I decided to look around the cellar. Nothing too special for a castle dungeon. It was damp, cold, and made of stone. It had a “Bed” and a bucket. I couldn't do much as they had stripped me of most clothing. All I had left were my undergarments and a robe. They at least left me with my dignity. Walking up to the bars nobody was there. Just the faint sound of the wind blowing through cracks. The mask was making it hard to breathe in there. I knew there was nothing to be done about it because of how the mask functioned. Nobody could take it off right then. As for if I let my guard down he would make me a mere toddler.
-Guard-
“Thou art not one to make wise choices, yea?”
-Paragraph 62- (Mc)
I looked at the guard walking up to my cell. He was a chubby man who had obviously taken the job for food.
-Mc-
“I will admit it was a small hiccup. Once I'm out of here it won't happen again.”
-Guard-
“Well now it sounds like that won't be happening. You're set to be hung upside down for a full 57 years as for your attempted murder of a royal family member.”
-Mc-
*Now this is a bad outcome. I thought they would be dumb enough to hang me like a simple man. They seem to be wiser than I had originally thought. Well theres no way out of torture. Death is going away and has no business with the slaguff royals. Is this really how I lose my sanity? Damn It! I guess a miracle is truly needed now. Not like I know a reason to earn one.*
-Mc-
“Really? Why go through all the trouble for little ole me?”
-Guard-
“Quit thous speaking, it's lunchtime for thou kiddo.”
-Paragraph 63- (Mc)
He then threw what could only be described as haggis but even more awful than usual. I did not even bother to take a bite. That's when I remembered what he called me. I looked at my tattoos and sure enough I was 14. I was being more reckless than usual. Only three days ago I was 18 and now I am back to being a simple teenager. With nothing else to do I started working out. Pushups and curls were all I could do because of the circumstances I was in. It was enough for the fat man to ask what I was doing. I ignored him as I continued working. Luckily for me this worked as the man walked up to the bars and started yelling at me, demanding a response. I got up and pulled his head to the bars knocking him cold. I took the keys and made my escape. The dungeon was underneath the castle and because of my long learning experience I knew every twist and turn like the back of my hand. After making it to the outside I saw the streets were empty. This was strange as I had also realized how lacking the amount of guards was. There were at least 81 guards in the castle yet I had only encountered one. Even the queen and King were gone. Nonetheless I made another escape to the horses stable. All of them were gone except one. Something was definitely up. After leaving the town I decided to hook on a small carriage on the back of my new companion. It had multiple potato bags inside of it and this would make my meals and cash for the year.
-Paragraph 64- (Mc)
A few hours later I eventually arrived at my home. It was an abandoned shack that I had made to my liking. With my extensive knowledge of the future to come I made a light bulb with a potato. This was all I knew how to make because of how hard it was to remember the more detailed things. I turned on my light and sat on my soft chair. It was then I heard rustling outside. I ran outside to see that the princess was standing there on the verge of tears.
-Mc-
“P-Princess?! Why are you here? What happened?”
-Paragraph 65- (Mc)
I decided to play stupid to my actions hoping for some reason that she wouldn't have been told of my ruthless act. But I was very wrong. She walked closer to me and gave me a hug. This was a shocking feeling I had. Not once have I felt a hug in so long. I hesitantly but quickly wrapped my arms around her. Her sobbing and the wind was all that had been heard.
-Nazuna-
“T-Thank you…”
-Mc-
“I did nothing. I was only protecting you. I'm terribly sorry for your husband.”
-Nazuna-
“I don't care about him……Ren…thank you….”
-Paragraph 66- (Mc)
She continued to sob and I brought her inside. I had never had another human inside my house so I was quite timid. I went upstairs to grab a blanket for her. When I came back she was looking down, wiping her tears. I couldn't see her cry any longer. I put the blanket on her as it was quite cold in the house. I then looked at her clothes as the dress she wore the night before was ripped and dirty. She ran away after what happened. I knew what the world would now think of her if I had returned her and nobody would treat her well if they noticed who she was. I had no other choice but to keep her home until I could find a compromise to hide her identity. I got up and took her to my room. It wouldn't be right to make her live in the storage room.
-Nazuna-
“Ren, I can't take your room… i'll be okay wit-”
-Mc-
“I insist, princess. My room is a mere reminder that I never had a childhood.”
-Paragraph 67- (Mc)
She reluctantly took the room. Then I took only my diary, a pencil, and a pillow. I knew that tomorrow I would be going on a trip to the witch in the woods. He was somebody that helped my aging problem. He could only make me age a year at a time so I always had to choose wisely. I picked 18 to be a good age. I got down on the ground and started doodling. Doodling was the only thing I had stuck to. Even if I lived for millions of years stuck in between heaven and hell. I still found entertainment from doodling.
-Mc-
*I'm like a broken ... ... uh ….. What was that damn saying again? It's been so long since I have heard it….*
-Paragraph 68- (Mc)
It was about dark so I turned on all the lights in the house and started my cooking. I had made a makeshift modern stove. I also made a pan out of iron I had stolen from the mines. That's when the princess came downstairs to see what I was making.
-Nazuna-
“What are you doing?”
-Mc-
“Just cooking a meal. Cant be sleeping with an empty stomach no?”
-Paragraph 69- (Mc)
She nodded but then she went back to looking gloomy.
-Mc-
“Hey princess, is something wrong? I know what happened but it was not your fault. Plus the prince won't want you any longer as I have made sure of it. I did the harm, you could just go back to the castle and blame me.”
-Paragraph 70-
She then walked to me and looked straight at me. As we were the same height for now.
-Nazuna-
“I don't want to. I don't want to be a royal. I always wanted to have a normal life. But being royal is a problem for me…Ren…. Please call me Nazuna from now on.”
-Mc-
“Sure thing Nazuna…”
-Paragraph 71-
She then smiled and ran back upstairs without looking back at me.
-Mc-
*What a weird girl…*
-Paragraph 72- (Mc)We ate in our separate rooms. I stayed up late writing multiple letters to send to the other kingdoms. I needed a new hire. My clock was in the other room so I had no idea what time it was. Walking out of the room I noticed how bright it was even without the lights on. I looked out the window and saw the moon. It was so captivating. It felt like everytime the moon was full my mind went blank. I felt free while looking at it. Touching my mask I pulled it up to my head. I lied… The mask came off when I found peace and love in something. The only reason I doodled was to spark a love so strong the mask will be gone forever. I kept looking at it when the clock ticking reminded me of what I needed to do. I walked downstairs and looked at the clock.
-Mc-
*I should head to bed. It's getting late and a long day is ahead of me.*
-Nazuna-
“P-pork?”
-Paragraph 73- (Nazuna)
I woke up the next morning with the smell of pork in my nose. I ran downstairs to see Ren making more food.
-Nazuna-
“Wow! This looks rather good.”
-Mc-
“It does look quite good. Listen, we need to talk about you hiding from the King.”
-Nazuna-
“What is there to talk about?”
-Mc-
“Well… your hair is quite a hard one to hide. Silver hair is not so simple to come across.”
-Nazuna-
“Well what shall thou do about it?”
-Paragraph 74- (Nazuna)
He then grabbed a pair of scissors.
-Nazuna-
“ARE YOU REALLY SUGGESTING WE CUT MY HAIR?!”
-Mc-
“Of course. How else will we hide your hair besides A. Getting rid of it or B. Dyeing is hard to do in our circumstance"
-Nazuna-
“You are not making me go bald. I won't let you”
-Mc-
“No you won't be bald… You will just have shorter hair. It seems less common this century.”
-Nazuna-
“B-but my pretty hair….”
-Paragraph 75- (Mc)
She gave me puppy dog eyes after saying that. I knew she wanted to keep her hair long.
-Mc-
“Fine… I'll see what dyes I can make. What color do you want?”
-Nazuna-
“PURPLE!”
-Mc-
“A-are you sure?! That's a very uncommon color to use. Wouldn't you like to be less colorful?”
-Nazuna-
“I like purple. So I picked it. Is there an…issue with that? Do you not like it?”
-Paragraph 76- (Mc)
Once again she gave me puppy dog eyes so I had no choice but to listen to her. I hated that she was so adorable. If she was a capable woman it would be a much different story. I grabbed the violets from the grass outside. I started mashing and mixing it with honey. She sat in the chair, legs crossed. I started lathering her hair and making it change color. I let her dry it out in the sun outside.
-Paragraph 77- (Nazuna)
Looking up at the sky I realized how free the feeling was for me. I'm now away from royalty. Free from people looking up to me. The pain in my chest was finally gone. I could be who I wanted to. A simple woman… with a house job… and…. A husband. Of course I knew Ren was nothing but a helper. But at the time options were limited. Even a girl could dream. I took a moment to look at where we were. It was a forest without a single road in sight. Far from any people. A dream truly coming true. But becoming a burden to Ren is not what I want. My plan was to stay for only a few weeks until I could grasp living a normal life. That's when I felt my hair. The honey made it sticky but also made it smell good. I spent the rest of my outside time picking flowers from the small bushes.
-Nazuna-
*They smell so good… I will reimburse Ren when the time comes.*
-Paragraph 78- (Nazuna)
Ren walked out of the front door and to his horse. He then looked at me and threw a bag.
-Mc-
“It has some good soap for your hair after it dries. Go to the bath in the washroom. I will be back in a few hours. Feel free to make anything in the square cold thing. Just don't burn the house down okay?”
-Nazuna-
“Thank you Ren. Please be safe.”
-Paragraph 79- (Nazuna)
He then laughed and started riding away. I walked back to the little shrubs and kept picking. I spent the whole day just admiring the simple nature of the place. The sun started setting so I went back inside with a new me. With new hair I thought I could do anything, even cook. But I knew it couldn't happen even with my newfound confidence. My cooking skills were more like murderous potions. Either way I thought I needed to repay Ren one way or another so I started working hard in the kitchen to make whatever I could.
-Paragraph 80- (Mc)
The tower was about 2 hours away from my home so I looked forward to getting to my more capable age. Being at a bigger age was more useful for being tall and not looking so suspicious. I got there with a tiring ride. When I gave the secret knock the witch opened up the door and gave a half laugh.
-Witch-
“Again Fallen? Jeez thou is a reckless immortal no?”
-Mc-
“Such mean words coming from a beginner.”
-Paragraph 81- (Mc)
She gave me a look of annoyance. She was tall even for a thousand year old gal. This was because of my potion mess up a few decades back. I will admit her tallness was quite an attractive feature for her. Azrial was my “Childhood” friend. When I was not quite good at killing I became younger than expected leaving me in a vulnerable state. Her parents took me in for a few years and I had become good friends with Azrial in the process. I did not find her a liability to my goal because witches could live as long as needed. Therefore I wouldn't lose a good friend so easily.
-Azrial-
“Hush hush! Come on in and we will get you fixed up!”
-Paragraph 82- (Mc)
We walked into the tower and I sat next to the most unnecessary cauldron. I taught her that back in my old life, witches used cauldrons. This made her fond of them and wouldn't stop using them. It turned out the broom rumor only became popular because of the witches loving cleanliness. For this reason every tower I had gone to almost looks like a royalty room. I waited for Azrial to come back with the sickening ingredients. I thought about Nazuna being at home. I finally had somebody to look forward to meeting. For some reason this was much different than reuniting with my pets back home. It felt much more lively with another human at home.
-Mc-
*It's almost like having a wife.*
-Paragraph 83- (Mc)
I laughed at myself for even thinking that. Nazuna would only be a casualty to my given goal. I couldn't allow myself to even think of her as a friend. I couldn't allow myself to be mentally distraught over another person. Azrial came back with the ingredients.
-Azrial-
“Sheep liver, goose beak, lion hair, and last but not least… cow dung… MMMM MMM now doesn't that sound delectible?”
-Mc-
“To hell with you.”
-Paragraph 84- (Mc)
I watched her stir as the smell started destroying the inside of my mask. The smell would always stay there for days after the spell. She then looked at me with a devilish smile knowing that the smell was horrid.
-Azrial-
“Such a shame you're not a true part of our family… We can't smell as you already know. I'm sure mother and father would still love to adopt you.”
-Mc-
“Feh… Are you almost done, you foul witch?”
-Paragraph 85- (Mc)
She then snickered and handed me the finishing product. The smell was beyond diabolical. If I had not lived with her I would think she was poisoning me.
-Mc-
“Cheers.”
-Paragraph 86- (Mc)
Azrial then lifted the mask. A long time ago she found out how it worked and we both agreed that friends' love is stronger than any true love. We then made a pact to not get married until the other agrees on the person. It was really just to cope that we couldn't find good partners. I chugged the drink and felt the wave of nausea hit me. Still I was excited to be back to my favorite form.
-Paragraph 87- (Mc)
After a few minutes of calming my stomach I paid my good friend and left. I made it back home by the time the sun had set. Looking back up at the sky I noticed how hot it had been getting this past week. I made a personal goal to myself that I would try and make an A,c unit if I could remember how. I came home to the smell of burning and smoke filled the room making it impossible to see.
-Mc-
“WHAT THE DEVILS HAPPENED IN HERE?!”
-Paragraph 88- (Mc)
That's when Nazuna came running to me in the smoke yelling.
-Nazuna-
“RENTHESTOVETHINGEYCAUGHTFIREANDNOWMYFOODFORYOUISRUI-NED IM SO SORRYYYYY!”
-Paragraph 89- (Mc)
I only sighed and moved to the stove. Turning it off and opening the windows I saw how she really did try to cook me something.
-Mc-
“Look, just tell me when you want to cook, okay? I will teach you the basics then you can go on from there. And don't worry about re-paying me. This is my choice and it's a good one.”
-Nazuna-
“Is thee not mad?”
-Mc-
“Trust me… there's nothing you can do to me that hasn't already happened.”
-Paragraph 90-
I then grabbed the fan and started blowing all the smoke out.
-Nazuna-
“Ren… how do you have so many useful items that even the kingdom does not have?”
-Mc-
“Oh that's quite simple! Im… uh ....”
-Paragraph 91- (Mc)
I thought about it for a moment. Should I tell her my true mission? To meet my former self? Or should I lie once again? I made up my mind that she wouldn't understand. It would be simpler to lie and not explain.
-Mc-
“After being alive for so long I just learned some things you know.”
-Paragraph 92- (Mc)
Bullshit of an answer but it was all I could think of. I knew that even if she had no idea about the future she found my work to be extraordinary. She then smiled and looked content with the answer. I walked to the burnt “Cookies” and took a bite.
-Nazuna-
“REN NO DONT THEY ARE BURNT TO CRISP!”
-Mc-
“Hm. It tastes okay. Just really burnt and a little dry.”
-Paragraph 93- (Mc)
That was another lie. I just wanted to see her smile again. But instead of smiling she looked away without saying anything.
-Paragraph 94- (Nazuna)
He complimented my cooking. That was why I was beet red. He was the only person who lied to me for my happiness. I knew he was lying because of his voice crack. But still, he was being kind, nothing like the books had told about him. The smoke cleared after about an hour. Then I noticed how Ren was taller than when I last saw him.
-Nazuna-
“Ren? Where did you go today?”
-Mc-
“ Ah. I went to the witch down east”
-Nazuna-
“The witch?! Did she hurt thou?”
-Mc-
“Quit worrying. The witch is a nice one. Plus even if I was cursed I could just… uh…”
-Paragraph 95- (Nazuna)
He then pointed at the dagger in his pocket.
-Nazuna-
“Kill the witch with it! Smart!”
-Mc-
*Lord this girl is too wholesome even when saying something so horrible.*
((More to come I guess.))
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