Hello there. I am here to get feedback on my YA high fantasy pitch for a pitching contest this Saturday. The contest is called #CoachHunt and if I get chosen I will get mentoring for my book. I want this to be as polished as possible and I want to get some great feedback for how I can make this better.
Here's the pitch.
Emily, Chance, and Aspen are three teens living in a world that seems to have rumors of a new cult rising and a new war starting. But when a mysterious invitation to the most prestigious heist competition lures them in an unknown world of combat and crime, they have to choose between losing their morality to become the Dark Conqueror or risking their lives resisting.
Here's the pitch.
Emily, Chance, and Aspen are three teens living in a world that seems to have rumors of a new cult rising and a new war starting. But when a mysterious invitation to the most prestigious heist competition lures them in an unknown world of combat and crime, they have to choose between losing their morality to become the Dark Conqueror or risking their lives resisting.
Thank you.
- Mayah