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Hi Elaine. Would you be interested in a 46k MG horror? here's the query letter, hope it piques your interest.If there’s anything 13-year-old Eylem hates more than slumber parties, it’s the people who organize them. Having had enough of being marginalized due to her distant behaviors by the other girls, she decides to bring a new touch to the game of ‘truth or dare.’
She picks ‘dare’ and tricks the others into making her break into the weird old building nearby, where a weird old man resides. Eylem gets in the place with ease, but before long, it becomes apparent that the crooked building is a vile house of horrors. She soon encounters The Master; a half-octopus man who hides his true identity behind the mask of an old man. The two have a chat, and Eylem holds her head high before him. She hides her lack of self-confidence until the monster man puts her to sleep and cuts her into pieces. Eylem finds herself as a single head without a body when she recovers. She learns that her limbs are all scattered around in the lower levels of the dungeon, where different creatures lurk and lay claim on them.
Eylem has to find her missing body parts and retrieve them from the monsters by the use of her wits. She must outsmart the creatures and face her traumas before finding a way out of the dungeon while endeavoring to hold on to her sanity and, maybe, learning how to be a better person.
THE MASTER’S DUNGEON focuses on a heroine who is gallant enough to stand up against not just monsters, but against grown men as well. It speaks to children of ages 10 to 13. The book plays with the idea of and refers to the real horror behind fairytales. It can be seen as a modern take on original, forgotten, and grimmer versions of such fables. Unlike fairytales, it aims to empower its readers instead of suppressing them. It’s planned to be the first installment of a trilogy. I define it as RULES FOR VANISHING (Kate Alice Marshall) meets CORALINE (Neil Gaiman) meets SPLIT (the movie).
Ali wrote: "Hi Elaine. Would you be interested in a 46k MG horror? here's the query letter, hope it piques your interest.If there’s anything 13-year-old Eylem hates more than slumber parties, it’s the peopl..."
Hey Ali! Thanks for commenting, I'll send you a message after I have my lunch if that's alright!


I am looking for a CP, someone I can chat with on the regular about our current and future projects in addition to swapping pages.
I have a few drafted projects and am querying a novel but am currently editing an upper MG Horror called A Brew of Helleborus Tea. Aiming for March to swap full manuscripts with someone but have rough pages as a sample to swap now.
ROUGH PITCH: With the moods of others becoming too cumbersome, twelve-year-old empath, Clover, feels her time as a healing tea handler will be cut short like her Auntie before her. Even more worrisome is the otherworldly something seeping into her dreams and family’s land following the Nan’s Aster Festival. As grisly scenes from her nightmares begin acting out in the town, Clover must use her herbalist skills and bravery to heal the land and save those around her from the fretful future played out in her sleep.
WORD COUNT: 31k
COMPS: Cinderella meets Freddy Krueger
TROPES: Coming of age, developing powers, healing herbs, nightmares, sense of isolation, enemies to friends, and possession.
TRIGGER/CONTENT WARNINGS: Few deaths, including one of a farm animal though nothing on the page.
VIBES/AESTHETIC: Gothic vibes
I also write Adult horror and thrillers.
Feel free to comment or message if interested!