A short snippet of my new young adult book called MY BFF. The book is about a young girl dealing with mental illness

[Rasheed]

When Rielle walked into the house and slammed the door, her parents knew she had a bad day at school.
“What’s wrong?” Her father asked.
She walked right past her mother and sat next to her father on the couch.
“Daddy, I don’t like taking those pills”, she told him.
“Why not sweetheart?”
“Because they make me quiet and I feel tired all the time. People don’t even talk to me when I’m like that. Nobody talked to me but Caree, Krystal and Byron. Eric didn’t even talk to me that much”, she said with her head hung low.
“Well sweetheart, those pills are helping you in ways you don’t know of. Sweetheart, you need those pills”, he said as he gently grabbed her hand. “Just give the pills a month and you will be used to them”, he told her.
“Dad, a month is a long time. I won’t have any friends by then. I don’t want to keep feeling like this”, she said as tears began to fall.
Her father began to cry himself. He grabbed Rielle and hugged her tightly.
He looked up and saw her mom crying too.
“It’s going to be okay baby”, her mother said as she sat on the couch and hugged both of them.

[Zakia]

The book sounds good so far

[Breyonna Jordan,]

It seems very good so far. Perhaps incorporate some more of the perspective character's inner thoughts, feelings, and doubts. It feels very dialogue-heavy. Also, consider adding in some more worldbuilding. You do a great job of incorporating details into the story seamlessly, but the setting itself is pretty vague. Readers don't know what color the couch is, if there are any pictures on the walls, whether or not they have a TV—that sort of thing. These types of details can help to space out the dialogue better and ground the reader in the story more.

If this is your first draft, though, I suggest leaving the editing for later and focusing on finishing the story for now.