Share your writing (no editing!!)

[Blue]

Hi, if you want people to read your work but don't want some help with editing, then go ahead and put your writing here. It can be anything from extracts/chapters to poetry to essays!

[Huey]

My ducktales Book!: https://www.goodreads.com/story/show/...

[tanisha]

okay, so I write poems. This is one of my most recent one

[tanisha]

"A fingerling swam excitedly through the endless sea of bubbles,
Surrounding him on all sides were all sorts of troubles."
"What sort of troubles, mama?", asked a little fry.
"Oh, snapping sharks, dreaded jellyfish and whales gone awry."

"But that's not what the story is about so don't interrupt",
Calm your raging curiosity, don't let it erupt."
"The fingerling played all day, exploring sunken ships,
The decks were rotting and smelling, the sail torn with rips."

"Then the fingerling saw a swirling mass of something,
Bright and dull at same time, it was impossibly alluring."
"He swam towards it with great vigor, his enthusiasm bubbling,
The fingerling, that poor dear, returned home pale and choking."

"What happened to him, mama?", the little fry gushed
"Patience, my little fishling.", her mama softly hushed.
"His mama and papa reported it to our fair king,
He said many of our fellow fishes had experienced the same thing."

"Only a few of the stronger ones, survived to tell the tale,
This mysterious thing showed mercy to neither Clowns nor Whales."
"Some believe it's a curse, some think its a monster,
This is all nonsense, don't believe them, my dear."

The fry asked hesitating, "Mama? Then what made those poor fishes sick?"
Mama sighed and said, "Nothing major, my dear. Just a few trillion tons of plastic."
                                       

[tanisha]

True opinions please! i want to improve!

[Vanya, The one who killed the porcupine:)]

Ahh this was so good honestly! :)
I love how it's telling a story, in a poetic way and giving an important message which is much more like impacting than if it was a straight-up.

[tanisha]

Thank you!

[Tαɾα, A dead porcupine]

Coco wrote: "True opinions please! i want to improve!"

Its pretty good tbh a 3 out of 5 stars

[tanisha]

thanks :)

[[deleted user]]

The words in the poem had me swirling in the sea. (forgive me I am bad with metaphors.) Honest opinion: This poem had a truly deep message given. It was a short story told in a poetic way. The rhyming words used and the sentences phrased were truly amazing! Loved the poem!!!!!!!!!!!!

[tanisha]

omg thanks

[tanisha]

another poem people..this one is a bit long..

[tanisha]

I am a girl child, in my mother's womb,
There are people out there, determined to make it my tomb.
To my mother's pleas, they turn a deaf ear,
Instilling in her a crippling fear.

They think that I will be a waste of space,
To rip me from my protective cocoon, they race.
These people want to commit an inhuman act,
'A girl is useless', for them it's a fact.

My mother comforts me even when she is in tears,
Those people out there deserve to be impaled by spears.
No one has given them the right to tear a mother's heart,
A doe is gifted with beauty if strength is given to the hart.

I am in my mother's womb, but I know right and wrong,
Is there no place in the world where I belong?
Why does everyone treasure a son and not a daughter,
Why is a boy considered wine and a girl polluted water?

People forget that they can't live without water,
All these tortures on a girl, will only make their lives shorter.
What crime have i committed, which calls for such a unfair punishment?,
Why torture my sweet mother, with your harsh judgment?

A woman maintains the balance of life,
She is a loving mother, a devoted wife.
There is a fact, which these violent people shun,
If they kill the girls, who will bear them a son?
                                            

[tanisha]

I write on social issues..

[Vanya, The one who killed the porcupine:)]

I absolutely loved this one. This is great coco!This is such an important issue, and the way to put it shows exactly how much it is

[tanisha]

Thanks!

[Tαɾα, A dead porcupine]

Ahh Its good Coco. Why don't you add all this to your profile? You know, the option to share your writing is there. It might make a whole lot more people aware of your works!

[tanisha]

I will do that

[Tαɾα, A dead porcupine]

Yessss!

[Tαɾα, A dead porcupine]

I screamed inside (did you hear?)
My innocence died screaming
I was too young.
it shouldn't have left,
not with your hands on me.
I was young.
But not naïve enough to think
that consent meant anything.
you took, you took and I,
I forgot how to fight.
I was young...right?

[Tαɾα, A dead porcupine]

smthin verryy random and depressing lol