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Nashita wrote: "Murdercorn is extremely happy"

:)

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So, I feel so productive even though I literally did nothing since morning.

I finished the April challenge stuff, and finished 2 books. Now I’m gonna read the betrothed...

I’ll try to finish that today.

[Nash (all too unwell)]

All the best!

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Nashita wrote: "All the best!"

Thank you!

[Niharika✩]

I made a shocking discovery today. When I write in first person POV, I can make the simplest scene into an over dramatic soap opera. And when I write in 3rd POV, the most dramatic scene turns out to be the simpelest. Shocking.

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Niharika wrote: "I made a shocking discovery today. When I write in first person POV, I can make the simplest scene into an over dramatic soap opera. And when I write in 3rd POV, the most dramatic scene turns out t..."

Well wow. Maybe try reading the same scenes from different POV’s online.
You’ll find some of you look it up. :)

[Niharika✩]

Bhavya wrote: "Niharika wrote: "I made a shocking discovery today. When I write in first person POV, I can make the simplest scene into an over dramatic soap opera. And when I write in 3rd POV, the most dramatic ..."

I wasn't exactly complaining, but thanks!

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Niharika wrote: "Bhavya wrote: "Niharika wrote: "I made a shocking discovery today. When I write in first person POV, I can make the simplest scene into an over dramatic soap opera. And when I write in 3rd POV, the..."

Oh sorry.

[Niharika✩]

Bhavya wrote: "Niharika wrote: "Bhavya wrote: "Niharika wrote: "I made a shocking discovery today. When I write in first person POV, I can make the simplest scene into an over dramatic soap opera. And when I writ..."

It's fine! I'll try it anyway!

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Niharika wrote: "Bhavya wrote: "Niharika wrote: "Bhavya wrote: "Niharika wrote: "I made a shocking discovery today. When I write in first person POV, I can make the simplest scene into an over dramatic soap opera. ..."

Ok!

[Mrunal]

BHAVYA!!! I NEED TO TALK TO YOU!!!! ARE YOU BUSY???

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I'M HERE!

[Mrunal]

Ok. Wait.

[Mrunal]

Check your pm.

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Replied!

[Orla]

hello!! :)

[Orla]

Bhavya wrote: "So, I feel so productive even though I literally did nothing since morning.

I finished the April challenge stuff, and finished 2 books. Now I’m gonna read the betrothed...

I’ll try to finish that..."

yay!!! i'm so excited to see your review of the betrothed lol
is it still going to be a rant?

[Niharika✩]

Aaahhh! finally! Ch 1!
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"Jessica?" Isabel calls from the kitchen.
"What?" Jessica replies.
"Open the news, will you?"
Jessica gets up from the table and walks into the living room. She picks up the remote and switches the TV on. The reporters voice drifts towards Ella and she listens.
"Early this morning, the trees in Jim Corbett National Park disappeared. Barren desert sand was found in it's place."
Ella's head shot up and she tumble of the chair in her haste to get to the next room.
Jessica stared open-mouthed at the news footage. It showed yellow sand surrounded by trees. The footage zoomed out and the sand turned into a yellow speck. The reporter appeared again. She started speaking. Ella doesn't listen. Outrageous news reports like this one had been coming in for the past week. At first everybody thought it was a joke. But that was hardly likely. Then more and more witness reported what they saw: lakes disappearing into thin air and tornadoes when they weren't supposed to happen. Experts had declared the the world was crumbling. And there was nothing anyone could do.
Ella walked back to the table and tried to focus on the blog post in front of her. But for the fifth time that week, she's at a loss. How can she focus when the ground below her could crumble any second? Isabel comes out of the kitchen, wiping her hand on a towel. She hovers at the doorway of the living room watching the report. She gasps. Ella couldn't take it any more. She picked up her laptop and took it to her room where she finally find some peace. Without realising, she typed for more than an hour.

"Ella?" Isabel called from the living room.
"Yeah, mom?" she called back, quickly slamming her laptop shut and leaping out of bed.
"In the shower, now!"
Ella sighed. She opened her laptop again and finished writing the last few lines of the poem she was working on. Her blog was one of the most read, even though she was only ten. She looked out of the window across the Singapore skyline. Her gaze drifted to the park below. The overhanging trees covered most of the bushes. She loved the view, but hated going into it. She shook her head. She was getting too distracted. She undressed and let down her short black hair. She put it up in a bun and put on a shower cap. Not long after, she was humming a happy tune while applied soap to her body.

The bathroom door creaked as Ella opened it and stepped out. She quickly dressed and picked up the bracelet she had gotten as her birthday gift. Her entire family had one. Jessica, her younger sister, had received one recently.
These four bracelets have been passed down to the next generation on the ninth birthday. Ella had the message remembered by heart. This message had to be said every time a new family member received it.

*"In die hac venerunt ad fontem off in nonum diem natalem. Dicite fontes istos praeterire de exigere versus et docere."*

Which translated into "Pass this on to your off springs on their ninth birthday. Tell them to pass it on and to teach their off springs these exact lines". It wasn't much, but it was important.

To Ella, the bracelet was more than a piece of jewellery. It was her lucky charm.

She put it on and unlocked her room door. The house seemed unusually quite. Usually, Jessica would be creating a racket in the living room or her mom would be on a call. "Mom?" she called. "Dad? Jess?" No response. She looked all over the house. It was well and truly empty. She peered out of the window. Both her parents' cars were there. They had to be in the park downstairs. It was the last place to look for them. She quickly climbed down the stairs and walked into the lobby. The park was right outside and she pushed open the gate, cringing a little as she did so. Her eyes scanned the park. A young man was shouting into the phone as he rushed by. A women was strolling down a pathway. But Ella's family wasn't there. She instinctively reached down to the bracelet. The jewel seemed a little loose. Ella panicked. If it broke, she'd be in hot water. She brought her wrist up to examine it. The jewel seemed to be pushing down instead of coming out. Ella pressed it.

Ella couldn't believe what she saw next. White light surrounded her. It swirled and turned and twisted, creating beautiful patterns in the air. The white mass was interrupted with coloured streaks as orange, red, green, blue and other colours took it's place. Suddenly, the light melted away and Ella began to fall.

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Orla wrote: "Bhavya wrote: "So, I feel so productive even though I literally did nothing since morning.

I finished the April challenge stuff, and finished 2 books. Now I’m gonna read the betrothed...

I’ll try..."

Hi!
Definitely still a rant. :)

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Niharika wrote: "Aaahhh! finally! Ch 1!
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"Jessica?" Isabel calls from the kitchen.
"What?" Jessica replies.
"Open the news, will you?"
Jessica gets up from the table and w..."

I’ll read it in a few mins. :)

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Jessica?" Isabel calls from the kitchen.
"What?" Jessica replies.
"Open the news, will you?"
Jessica gets up from the table and walks into the living room. She picks up the remote and switches the TV on. The reporters voice drifts towards Ella and she listens.
"Early this morning, the trees in Jim Corbett National Park disappeared. Barren desert sand was found in it's place."
Ella's head shot up and she tumble of the chair in her haste to get to the next room.
Jessica stared open-mouthed at the news footage. It showed yellow sand surrounded by trees. The footage zoomed out and the sand turned into a yellow speck.


Your tense is off here. Stick to one.

In the beginning it’s present, then then it’s switching it to past.

I’d advise you to keep it in past tense.

You can rewrite this as-

Jessica?" Isabel called from the kitchen.
"What?" Jessica replied.
"Open the news, will you?"
Jessica got up from the table and walked into the living room. She picked up the remote and switched the TV on. The reporters voice drifted towards Ella and she listened.
"Early this morning, the trees in Jim Corbett National Park disappeared. Barren desert sand was found in it's place."
Ella's head shot up and she tumbled off the chair in her haste to get to the next room.
Jessica stared open-mouthed at the news footage. It showed yellow sand surrounded by trees. The footage zoomed out and the sand turned into a yellow speck.

[Niharika✩]

Bhavya wrote: "Jessica?" Isabel calls from the kitchen.
"What?" Jessica replies.
"Open the news, will you?"
Jessica gets up from the table and walks into the living room. She picks up the remote and switches th..."

Oh, that was bound to happen. I wrote it 1st person POV and then changed it into 3rd person. Thanks!

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I liked it otherwise, but the tense is very odd in this. You’ll need to rewrite those sections. :)

But there a lot of telling vs showing. Maybe you could try setting the scene up.

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Niharika wrote: "Bhavya wrote: "Jessica?" Isabel calls from the kitchen.
"What?" Jessica replies.
"Open the news, will you?"
Jessica gets up from the table and walks into the living room. She picks up the remote ..."

No worries!

[Niharika✩]

Bhavya wrote: "I liked it otherwise, but the tense is very odd in this. You’ll need to rewrite those sections. :)

But there a lot of telling vs showing. Maybe you could try setting the scene up."

I'll do it tomorrow. Right now I could faint with exhaustion.

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Niharika wrote: "Bhavya wrote: "I liked it otherwise, but the tense is very odd in this. You’ll need to rewrite those sections. :)

But there a lot of telling vs showing. Maybe you could try setting the scene up."
..."

Ok!
Hope you feel better. :)

[Nash (all too unwell)]

Hey!

[[deleted user]]

BHAVYAAAAAAA

I SUMMON THEE

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Hi!

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Navya wrote: "BHAVYAAAAAAA

I SUMMON THEE"

I HAVE BEEN SUMMONED.

[Mrunal]

How is Goa?

[Nash (all too unwell)]

Ah yes...Are u having fun Navya?

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Hello everyone!

I think this book was the most dead yesterday. :)

[Mrunal]

*Nook

[Mrunal]

HOLA!!!

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So, I got a friend request from here-

https://www.goodreads.com/user/show/1...

Their answer to my question-

“I have a romantic novel that i want to be read & reviewed”

[[deleted user]]

Um... that’s a interesting friend request.

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I’ve clearly mentioned I’m NOT open to reading/reviewing requests in my bio. This isn’t the first time such a thing has happened. It annoys me...^…^

[Nash (all too unwell)]

Oh god!

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Mrunal wrote: "*Nook"

Yeah nook.
I hate autocorrect...

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Kaarin Valdez Everdeen Lightwood Potter wrote: "Um... that’s a interesting friend request."

It is.

[Mrunal]

Looks veryyyyyyy sus.

[[deleted user]]

That’s a little bit rude...

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Kaarin Valdez Everdeen Lightwood Potter wrote: "That’s a little bit rude..."

From my part?
I know, but I can’t do anything. It keeps happening so I have to be more strict about it... :(

[Mrunal]

What?

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Mrunal wrote: "Looks veryyyyyyy sus."

Nashita wrote: "Oh god!"

Ikr!

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I have 17 friend requests to sort through now.

[Nash (all too unwell)]

It's like they wantedly do what we ask them not to do

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Nashita wrote: "It's like they wantedly do what we ask them not to do"

I suppose.
Once I got a friend request from someone and they seem nice so I accepted. The moment I did that I got a message with all the links to their books and how to buy them.

I got annoyed and unfriended and blocked them.

I mean I know you’re trying to promote your book, but this is the wrong way.

[[deleted user]]

Yeah... I’d say just don’t friend them... I don’t know why you’d ask someone a favor, if you don’t even know them a little..