Blurb help with first person point of view

[Alea]

Hi guys!
I have just started writing my new book (prequel) and I would like to know your opinion about the blurb I'm working on.

Flame
My name is Flame and I'm just like a flame destined to die in the upcoming heavy rain. And this is a story about my poor life choices. About my poor, predestined choices that I have no control over. For example, let's take the guy, who very soon would be my boyfriend.
He is super handsome, funny, clever... and he also happens to know all the women in the town personally. Very personally.
But that is ok, coz I don't have time to waste for my love life.
More than anything else, I want to help my brother to get his life back. And to do that I'm going to kill even our own father.

Taylor
Life was boring. So I intended to make it fun by becoming a soldier and getting involved in the senseless war of the stupid government.
Unfortunately, it turned out that I became a better soldier, than I ever would be a human being in general. So I stayed alive. And just because most people who got killed by me back then, told me to make love and not war, I was willing to listen to them. Or was it to make peace?
Anyway, killing other people wasn't as much fun as I originally thought, so I was happy the war was over. And now it was time to make love.
Or so I thought...

Aiden
As I stared at the lifeless body at my feet, I longed to take its place.
But then again, I couldn't die... yet. I couldn't leave my sister in his care. He would use her, torture her and ruin her just like he had done with me, his own son.

[Gifford]

So I don't read much YA, but if you're planning to put this on the back cover, it's really long. You might have to use a typeface that's so small it might be unreadable.

The other thing I notice is it reads like a character analysis rather than a blurb. I'm not sure how these people fit together, what the main conflict is, or who the protagonist is. It seems that the first two characters are antagonists, but I don't understand where the third one fits into the conflict.

It seems to me that putting the focus on one character (the protagonist) would give me a better feel for the story. You could use the others to flesh out his/her relationships. Providing the protagonist's goal and motivation, then following up with their conflict (what stands in the way of their goal & what will happen if they fail?) might be a way to refine this down while at the same time making it more precise.

So those are my thoughts. Take what makes sense to you and feel free to disregard the rest. Good luck with your writing!

[Alea]

Thank you Gifford!

I’m new to all of this, so I really needed others' opinion on it.

“I'm not sure how these people fit together”
It's so good that you pointed that out! I will work to fix the blurb so their relationship is more clear.
“It seems to me that putting the focus on one character (the protagonist) would give me a better feel for the story.”
Maybe I will try to do just that, although the book will progress with all three characters' perspectives.
Thanks again!

[Gifford]

You're very welcome. I write in multiple perspectives, too, and it's hard to know where to focus in a query/synopsis. But I'm sure you'll find a way to make it work with your characters. After all, you're the one who knows them best!