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message 51: by Rylee (new)

Rylee | 1512 comments Hazel wok up sweaty, her heart pounding, “ Bad dream,” she thought. She looked around her, the others were still sleeping. She looked in her bed, and was shocked with what was in there. “ Gods! These diamonds look like they are worth a fortune...” she mumbled quietly. She really hoped she wouldn’t wake the others. Suddenly, all the details from her dream started rushing back.


message 52: by Rylee (new)

Rylee | 1512 comments Was that okay?


message 53: by wallflower, Daughter of Metis (new)

wallflower | 15660 comments Mod
Hm, I only see three lines of actual thought. Could you maybe try again? Maybe a paragraph of thought about something important to her like her mom or experience with her blackouts/memories from her life before returned to life.


message 54: by Rylee (new)

Rylee | 1512 comments Okay


message 55: by wallflower, Daughter of Metis (new)

wallflower | 15660 comments Mod
Do you still want to try for Hazel?


message 56: by Rylee (new)

Rylee | 1512 comments Yes


message 57: by wallflower, Daughter of Metis (new)

wallflower | 15660 comments Mod
Okay... so are you going to try your paragraph of thought again?


message 58: by FoxRenLuna (new)

FoxRenLuna | 2 comments Could I apply for Leo?


message 59: by beth, Daughter of Aphrodite (new)

beth (beth01) | 8516 comments Mod
FoxRenLuna wrote: "Could I apply for Leo?"

sure! you'll just need to do one paragraph to demonstrate how leo would think, and another paragraph to demonstrate leo's dialogue (i'd recommend a situation where he's talking to himself, that is probably easiest!), and then i'll do a roleplay with you to see how you roleplay as leo with other campers :)


message 60: by beth, Daughter of Aphrodite (new)

beth (beth01) | 8516 comments Mod
Zelda wrote: "could I apply for Annabeth?"

as in continue on from your application before?


message 61: by beth, Daughter of Aphrodite (new)

beth (beth01) | 8516 comments Mod
sure! you were up to the dialogue, so could you do a paragraph of annabeth talking? if it's easier, a paragraph where she's talking to herself might work :)


message 62: by beth, Daughter of Aphrodite (new)

beth (beth01) | 8516 comments Mod
Zelda wrote: "sure"

okay cool, go ahead!


message 63: by beth, Daughter of Aphrodite (new)

beth (beth01) | 8516 comments Mod
Aditi wrote: "Could I apply for Nico?"

sure! you'll just need to do one paragraph to demonstrate how nico would think, and another paragraph to demonstrate nico's dialogue (i'd recommend a situation where he's talking to himself, that is probably easiest!), and then i'll do a roleplay with you to see how you roleplay as nico with other campers :)


 ̷R̷̷e̷̷y̷ (detectingeagle310) | 4143 comments (( That is soo cool Aditi ! ))


message 65: by beth, Daughter of Aphrodite (new)

beth (beth01) | 8516 comments Mod
Aditi wrote: "( Nico doesn't really talk to himself much, he more of thinks, so I might not do too well in this part. )

Nico lay on his bed, staring up at the ceiling in exasperation as the latest Justin Bieber..."


yeah that's understandable! i think i'll probably need more dialogue than this to be able to decide completely so we can just move on to the roleplay stage! do you have a specific location thread you'd prefer to set it in?


message 66: by beth, Daughter of Aphrodite (new)

beth (beth01) | 8516 comments Mod
Aditi wrote: "Nope, I'm fine with anything."

okay cool well i might use my character Kira who's a daughter of Aphrodite if that works for you? and for location how about the big house porch?


message 67: by beth, Daughter of Aphrodite (new)

beth (beth01) | 8516 comments Mod
Aditi wrote: "Hey, u there?"

hey omg i'm so sorry i haven't had internet for the past few days out of nowhere but yeah i'll post now!


message 68: by beth, Daughter of Aphrodite (new)

beth (beth01) | 8516 comments Mod
i've just posted now!


message 69: by amia (new)

amia 🇵🇸🌟💤 (taylor's ver (makevocaloidgreatagain) is piper taken?


message 70: by 幽灵 (new)

幽灵 (_youlin) Can I have Percy?


message 71: by beth, Daughter of Aphrodite (new)

beth (beth01) | 8516 comments Mod
lemon girl wrote: "is piper taken?"

no she isn't! if you wanted to apply for her then you'll just need to do one paragraph to demonstrate how piper would think, and another paragraph to demonstrate piper's dialogue (i'd recommend a situation where she's talking to herself, that is probably easiest!), and then i'll do a roleplay with you to see how you roleplay as piper with other campers :)


message 72: by beth, Daughter of Aphrodite (new)

beth (beth01) | 8516 comments Mod
Rose {Don't tell me the moon is shining, show me the glint of light on broken glass} wrote: "Can I have Percy?"

you can apply for him yeah! you'll just need to do one paragraph to demonstrate how percy would think, and another paragraph to demonstrate percy's dialogue (i'd recommend a situation where he's talking to himself, that is probably easiest!), and then i'll do a roleplay with you to see how you roleplay as percy with other campers :)


message 73: by 幽灵 (new)

幽灵 (_youlin) Ok! But I'll have to do that next week after my exams. Is that fine with you?


message 74: by beth, Daughter of Aphrodite (new)

beth (beth01) | 8516 comments Mod
yeah all good!! i'll do my best to check this thread regularly so whenever you're done just let me know :D


message 75: by 幽灵 (new)

幽灵 (_youlin) Ok thank you so much!


message 76: by 幽灵 (new)

幽灵 (_youlin)
Percy strolled along the beach, his sea green eyes gazing out towards the sea. "Annabeth..." Her name was on his lips and a smile lit up his face almost at once. Annabeth, the love of his life, his hope, his anchor. Gods, he missed her so much and his heart yearned for her lips to be on his, for her scent of home, for her wise and sassy remarks.

Bending down, he reached out for his powers, the thrill of power running down his arms. He needed something. Something that would be the token of his love towards her. Three months. She had promised she would be back after then. To be with him, after college. Reaching deeper, he closed his fists around an intricate object, the sun glinting on its coarse pinkish surface. Perfect.

The coral reminded him of Annabeth with her prickly and defensive stance as well as her inner beauty. In fact, she was as precious to him as the coral was to the ocean. He would wait for her. And he would never stop missing her. And when she was back, he would never let her leave without him again.

Grasping the coral tightly, he fixed a determined gaze on the raging sea, whispering a prayer for her.



message 77: by 幽灵 (new)

幽灵 (_youlin)
How Percy would talk to himself

Percy ran his fingers through his messy hair. The days were horrible and he was having visions more and more frequently than ever. The sensations were awful and he longed to be his old self, where there were no monsters to worry about, no gods, no conflicts, no war.

"Damn..." He muttered, trying to expel the memories. The swirl of visions were pulling him into a seemingly abstract world where he felt every single pain again. He couldn't escape, couldn't stop, couldn't reach her... He could see Annabeth reaching out, her eyes milky, calling for him desperately amidst her curse... It was all his fault.

"Annabeth!" He screamed desperately, clawing in the air for her,
yet she still cried for him. He wanted to cradle her, to kiss her, to comfort her that everything was going to be okay but he couldn't reach her.

"Get the hell off me!" He growled to the monsters attacking him, Riptide slashing wildly, fueled by his anger. "Annabeth, I'm coming! You're gonna be safe!" He exclaimed as he fought relentlessly, encouraging her and willing himself to believe it as well. The monsters disintegrated into seas of glittering dust but more was still coming.

"Percy, where are you?! I'm scared." Annabeth's voice cracked, tears leaking out from the corners of her sightless eyes. It broke his heart tremendously but he couldn't do anything to ease her pain.

"Let her go or I'll kill you. Now!" He said forcefully, launching Riptide with full force at the cackling goddess in front of him. He could feel his power humming along with his desperation; he could see the goddess' eyes widen in shock, and he could feel a pull to reality.

"I'm sorry. I should have tried harder." He murmured softly as he awakened with a thump on the floor.




message 78: by 幽灵 (new)

幽灵 (_youlin) Is this okay?


message 79: by beth, Daughter of Aphrodite (new)

beth (beth01) | 8516 comments Mod
yeah that was really good!! there was a bit of dialogue in there but if you could still do another paragraph that was mainly focused on dialogue that would be appreciated, just so i can judge that aspect a little more.


message 80: by 幽灵 (new)

幽灵 (_youlin) Can I do maybe Percy talking to the others? Or must I only write about him talking to himself?


message 81: by beth, Daughter of Aphrodite (new)

beth (beth01) | 8516 comments Mod
you can have him talk to others but the dialogue needs to be mostly percy speaking so that's why i suggested talking to himself because i'd consider that to be easier? but if you wanted to add in minimal dialogue from another character go for it i guess!


message 82: by 幽灵 (new)

幽灵 (_youlin) Ok...? Let me think about how to do this first... lol I seem to not be in a mood for writing now... my brain sucks :)


message 83: by amia (new)

amia 🇵🇸🌟💤 (taylor's ver (makevocaloidgreatagain) Piper’s Thoughts
Piper was in the Aphrodite cabin, along with some other campers. She twirled some hair around her finger, then sighed. Life without Jason was gonna be hard. She lied down on her bunk and stared the ceiling for a while. After that, she took a quick afternoon nap.


message 84: by amia (new)

amia 🇵🇸🌟💤 (taylor's ver (makevocaloidgreatagain) Piper Talking to Herself
Piper and her capture the flag partner, Drew, were hiding behind some bushes.
“You defend our flag, I’m gonna make a run for theirs,” she whispered and Drew slightly nodded.
The Piper bolted for the other flag. A camper blocked her, but she still managed to get it. She pumped a fist in the air.
“YES!” she shouted.
((how are these?))


message 85: by beth, Daughter of Aphrodite (new)

beth (beth01) | 8516 comments Mod
they're a good start but i'll probably need a slightly longer example before i can give you the okay to move on to the rp section!


message 86: by 幽灵 (new)

幽灵 (_youlin)

"Mum, I'm hungry!" Percy said, eyeing the empty table in disdain. His mum was bustling around, a smile etched on her face as she laughed. "Coming! Just a moment, dear." Percy could hear the concern and love for him in those few words and that made his tears well.

"I'm such a disappointment. Kicked out of another school. Again, yet mom seems to still believe in me. Damn Percy, just try to behave for god's sake!" He muttered to his own plate, his heart a jumble of confused thoughts.

"Alright, mum. Blue cookies for dessert?" He asked pleadingly, trying not to let his mom discern his frustration and disappointment.

"Of course, wait a sec... ah here you go, Percy dear," she pushed a plate of steaming mashed potatoes in front of him. Percy dug into the food at once, munching blissfully. The soft, smooth potatoes reminded him of everything his mom had ever done and he sighed deeply.

"What's wrong?" She asked, sensing his despair, cold and thick in the air at once.

"She knows... grow up, Percy, and face it." He told himself sternly and shook his head. "Nothing, mom. I love you." The words leapt out of his mouth suddenly without warning and he was startled. What was he even thinking?

The room was silent, the only sounds were the clinking of the metal utensils. In the corner of her eyes, tears glistened and she fought to keep them from falling down...




message 87: by 幽灵 (new)

幽灵 (_youlin) Is this okay? I know it isn't perfect... asakdsjkdlhfas my brain isn't awake yet


message 88: by beth, Daughter of Aphrodite (new)

beth (beth01) | 8516 comments Mod
i'm just going to wait to see if one of the other mods can read over it as well before we move on to the next stage!


message 89: by 幽灵 (new)

幽灵 (_youlin) Ok thanks!


message 90: by beth, Daughter of Aphrodite (new)

beth (beth01) | 8516 comments Mod
hey sorry about the wait! i think i'll move you on to the one on one rp stage but try and focus on including more of percy's sense of humour, and possibly focusing less on his relationship with annabeth? that's my only notes if you're happy to try the next stage?


message 91: by 幽灵 (new)

幽灵 (_youlin) Yeah sure! Can we do that now?


message 92: by beth, Daughter of Aphrodite (new)

beth (beth01) | 8516 comments Mod
yeah! i'll probably be a lil slow replying bc i'm writing an essay haha but we can start now and i'll reply when i can... i might use my character quinn, he's a son of triton so might be an interesting dynamic


message 93: by 幽灵 (new)

幽灵 (_youlin) okay sounds cool! can you post first?


message 94: by beth, Daughter of Aphrodite (new)

beth (beth01) | 8516 comments Mod
yeah sure thing! i'll post at the cabin courtyard now :D


message 95: by amia (new)

amia 🇵🇸🌟💤 (taylor's ver (makevocaloidgreatagain) hey beth! for my paragraphs about piper can i just pm you? because my notifications always get pushed back and i’m doing this on mobile so when i make long posts they always get cut off. and sorry for the late reply, school started so i’ve been really busy


message 96: by beth, Daughter of Aphrodite (new)

beth (beth01) | 8516 comments Mod
ah no that's okay!! yeah you can definitely pm me :D once it gets to the rp stage if you get to that point we'll need to move it to here so that we can use an rp thread though if that's okay??


message 97: by Rylee (new)

Rylee | 1512 comments Hi! This is where you ask for a character from a book. If you want to make a character then you would go over to character creation or the other places you can do it.


message 98: by Rylee (new)

Rylee | 1512 comments No problem!!!!


message 99: by [deleted user] (new)

is annabeth free ??


message 100: by wallflower, Daughter of Metis (new)

wallflower | 15660 comments Mod
Nel wrote: "is annabeth free ??"

Yep. I believe she is. I am sorry for taking a while to respond to this. Did you still wish to test for Annabeth?


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