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Two chapter swap.
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Is it just two chapters you want looking over?
I would like to start with two chapters. That's usually enough to see how well people fit as CP's. I have an 80K story to go all the way through, but fit is everything. A poor fit isn't helpful to either party.
Hi Dan, I like where your story is going. Maybe we can swop a few chapters. I've got a story you might like. It's a mix of sci-fi fantasy, with action, drama, romance and mystery. All the elements needed for a great story. If your interested message. At the bottom is my blurb. Thanks Mark
Who stands a chance of winning, the guys carrying fully automatic assault rifles, or the guys wielding spears and shields? That’s what came to Ronen’s mind as he snaps the magazine clip into the high-powered rifle. One last mercenary job, after that retirement. The military mission would be an easy one to accomplish against Soni primitives, until his regiment is overtaken by the Soni.
On the planet Eden, the nations war over the way stones, as a malignant force consumes everything in its path. Genosha, the most powerful nation sends a platoon of soldiers to spy on the Soni nation. The Soni kill the entire unit taking one prisoner. For centuries, this ancient culture has lived shrouded in myth and legends. In seclusion from the outside world they want nothing to do with the high-tech modern world of the other civilizations. After capturing the soldier, the Soni are forced onto the world stage. Genosha has a precarious agenda for the hermit nation, which start a chain of events, uncovering a more disturbing threat than the mysterious force destroying Eden.
Combining elements of modern technology and science vs. Bronze age weapons and mystical magic. Sons of Light, an adult science fiction and fantasy drama
Social turbulence is tearing the population apart. Coexistence turns to turmoil between humans and non-humans. Fae, Vampire, Lycan, and Mutants all try to work within the human laws but find many objectionable and restrictive.
Agents from the future teleport to the present. They have a difficult assignment; change the future by any means necessary. Agents Brooks, Stone, Conway and Proctor led by Rivers, attempt to bring creation to a new branch of law enforcement. Conspiracy, murder, sacrifice, election rigging, a political assassination, nothing is off limits to complete their mission. That is, until Detective Roy Burns is on the case.
Once formed, The Citizens Protection Federation agents are comprised of humans, mutants and a feral. The new agents struggle to overcome prejudice and distrust to become a team as they combat civil unrest. What sacrifices will the new agents have to make?
The last paragraph is the second half that needs some general smoothing out. (About 39k) I have 1 action scene around 3/4 in some disarray.
First book of a series. Sort of like X-men and the movie Bright rolled together. I'm calling it a gritty Urban Sci-fi/Suspense. Not for the faint of heart: action, violence, sex, and murder. But, I have redeeming characters.
Two stories with recurring characters. I have a version with the first half summarized so the problem area can be worked on and not get burned out getting to them. But the full version is available to read for background purposes. (80k total)
I'm willing to swap Beta/CP/Alpha services on anything but serious romance (maybe a cross over). I've critiqued eleven other stories and given constructive feedback. We can swap two chapters to see how we fit and it doesn't matter what stage your WIP is at. If the fit is good, I'm ready to continue through the rest. I'd like feedback in a timely manner and will do the same. Anyone interested can reach me here or at thenumber1evild@gmail.com. I work great with Google Docs!!