Query: YA Fantasy - Land of Titans

[Ddcash80]

Dear Agent,

17-year-old Devan Callie has a special Copper link bound to her wrist. Like the rest of the Coppers, she doesn’t get sick or even tired. But in her opinion, that just makes them better workers, and better servants.

After finding a Silver link on a dead soldier in the forest, Devan defies all the laws, touching it for just a second, and she’s stung with excruciating pain. They said she’d die, but instead she survives with superhuman strength that fades over time. With Silver in her back pocket, Devan seeks to change how the kingdom works: Silvers and Golds hold the power of gods, along with the nice food, land and houses!

Devan goes after the one piece of metal that can help, adding immortality to its gift -- the crown.

The Golden King of Fire wears the crown on his head and Devan’s not the only one who wants it. Warring nations, rebels, traitors, and even the gods have their reasons. When Devan joins the rebels, trying to steal the crown, it’s her best friend who gets caught and sentenced to death.

To set him free, she paints the link on her wrist gold and infiltrates the royal palace, posing as a foreign princess. Surrounded by enemies, she must untangle an ancient lie, aimed at keeping her people submissive. And with time running out, she needs to control her new power before her best friend is killed or, even worse, he’s forced to give up his accomplices, including her.

Land of Titans is complete at 90k words, etc. Bio, Personalize, Comps, etc.

Thanks for any feedback!

[Keith]

The supposed sweet spot for a blurb is 100-150 words and you're at 263. Most readers (agents tend to spend even less time) will invest less than 30 seconds on a blurb and will only continue reading if they've been engaged. And will only continue reading if they continue to be engaged. You have a lot of backstory in your blurb when it's likely to be more engaging if you focus on the main character and big plot points.

[Supriya]

you can write something like
17 year old Devan pretends to be princes of foreign country with fake pained golden bracelet to save her best friend....
after this you can give an insight of significance of bracelet and what is her quest