First 10k of a Fantasy

[Lauren]

Hi Guys!

I'm writing a fantasy novel - The Azure Blade - that I'm cutting in to three parts (each between 40 and 50k).

I've just finished the third edit through part 1 and I've reached the point where I really need an unbiased totally honest second opinion. - if it's rubbish and makes no sense, then tell me, I can take it! :D

I particularly want to know if the tone is wrong. I'm writing it in a light hearted fashion, despite it being a dark fantasy. There's nothing particularly graphic in the story, though there is some bad language.

I'd really like someone to read either the first 10k words (first 4 chapters) or the full 46k.

Here is the blurb (note, work in progress)
Another summer was retreating; soon it would be the end of golden wheat fields, smooth malted beer and giggling barmaids. Replaced with bitter cold, stale bread and creeping darkness.
And wraith.
Folk knew it was coming, they were ready...
But tucked away in the safety of the Abbey a plan was hatching to cut down the most powerful man in Hollow’s Reach. A man who wielded a blade so sharp it could cut through time itself.
But what then?
After he was gone, who would protect the people from the wraith…

[Sharon]

Available to beta read. Professional beta reader and editor with publishing credentials. Contact me at sharonumbaugh@gmail.com if interested.

Thanks,
SU

[Lauren]

Thanks Sharon. I'll be in touch.