Query for a Fantasy/Horror

[Anita]

You don’t mention comps. I’m curious — does the MC age past 12? Because, depending on the voice of the character, this sounds like MG, maybe not YA. And the word count is super high for both. Say it has “ series potential,” as the pub house will determine how many it decides to publish, based on sales. I found “doing the deed of a villainous man” to be ...unnecessary and kinda offensive. Women villains are common (think fairy tales — full of them). And the tense of the entire query — future. Not sure it works. Check out Query Shark to see what she says about queries written in anything other than present.

[Keith]

I was going to say almost the same thing. I'd add that your 'blurb' sounds like a synopsis and needs a lot of work. My comment here might give you some direction:

https://www.goodreads.com/topic/show/...

[Keith]

I believe that's more middle grade, but am no expert.