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Keith Oxenrider (mitakeet) | 1171 comments Hey Emily,

You also need word count, comparables (books next to yours if you shelved them in the book store; well-known but not famous) and a bio. Bios should focus on what makes you unique to sell your novel, they really don't care to get to know you at this point.

I'm not sold on "the sky exists only in stories." Perhaps _blue_ sky, but air is sky, at least to me, so a cloudy sky is, nonetheless, still a sky.

I think you should give Evi's background when you initially introduce her, e.g., "yak herder, inventor, archer - is as fierce and determined a warrior. "

So, a 'fierce and determined a warrior' is also a girl, not a woman? It sounds to me like she'd struggle to have enough lifespan to acquire her background.

I'm a little concerned about 'forest' and sunless skies filled with 'miasmic air currents.'

"What she doesn’t know is that to champion their future and their safety, she must forfeit her own" sounds like you're giving away the ending.


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