feedback on blurb and synopsis

[Natalia]

Hi, please give some honest feedback on the below. Very much a first draft, so I won't be offended. Thanks in advance.

BLURB:
Twelve-year-old Rose has been dead for over one hundred years, but it’s not all bad. She’s a free spirit, who spends her existence seeking out adventures with her spiritual companion, Angel. The spirits have no idea who they were in life, and exist alongside ‘Visibles’ who cannot see or hear them. When Angel disappears, Rose enlists the help of another spirit, Elfie, who's also lost her companion. Together, they work through the mysteries of death in their search for the missing spirits. But will Rose find Angel, or will she find out more than she bargained for?

SYNOPSIS:
It’s London,1919, and twelve-year-old ROSE has ‘woken up’ dead. She knows nothing about herself, and can’t feel anything at all – not heat, cold, or pain – and her hands glide through objects. The only thing she feels is a terrible sense of loss and loneliness, a hollow feeling in her chest. Terrified, she meets ANGEL, who tells her she is now a spirit, he is her companion, and they exist alongside the ‘Visibles’, living people who cannot hear or see them. Away from the Visibles, he teaches her to pick objects up.
One hundred years later, Angel asks Rose if she ever thinks about the living version of herself. Surprised, she dismisses the question and they change the subject. Rose thinks nothing of it, until the following morning, when she realises Angel has vanished.
Meanwhile, another twelve-year-old spirit, ELFIE, tells her companion, HUGO, she can feel, after thirty years of numbness. Hugo tells her to investigate it alone, and the two argue, before Elfie storms off. Later, Hugo vanishes, leaving a clue for Elfie to find him. The clue is ANASTASIUS.
Across London, Rose feels an inexplicable jolt of feeling when she meets ENID. Enid shares a rumour that a spirit called Anastasius is linked to the disappearance of lots of spirits.
Rose and Elfie meet and join forces. They find Anastasius with his companion MALAK. Anastasius explains that their companions have ‘moved on.’ They couldn’t tell them, or they would unable to move on. To follow their companions, Rose and Elfie must find out who they were when they lived. But Anastasius warns them: once a spirit begins looking for their living self, they are unable to stop until they know the truth. This is terrifying for Rose. What if she’d been a criminal? She’d end up in some terrible dimension of hell. Limbo maybe dull, with no excitement or happiness, but at least there’s no pain.
Anastasius also explains that on their journeys to find themselves, they will begin to feel again. Elfie is pleased she’s already on the right track. It also explains her obsession with her newfound feelings.
Elfie and Rose part ways. Elfie wants to find herself, but Rose is unsure. Elfie finds a newspaper article about a school and her feelings double. She goes to the school to find more clues about who she was, but a prickling on her neck stops her. She turns, realising a Visible child can see her.
Meanwhile, Rose returns to where Angel disappeared. One of the books he buried on Hampstead Heath has a clue in it for her. With difficulty, she solves it. It explains spirits only have three months to find themselves, or they’ll remain spirits forever.
Rose finds Elfie to warn her about the time limit. Elfie tells her about the Visible who can see her, but refuses to talk to her.
The spirits look for the Visible, and find him walking to school in an empty street. He is being bullied by two fellow schoolkids. Acting without thinking, Rose throws some mud in one of the bully’s faces. Elfie joins in, scaring the bullies away. Grateful, the Visible agrees to speak with them, despite still being terrified of them.
After Rose guesses Elfie is related to the Visible, he shows them some old family photo albums. In it, they find a picture of Elfie. Memories flood Elfie’s mind, but she still doesn’t remember her death. The Visible’s mum explains to her son she had a twin who died thirty years ago. She never speaks of it because it makes her too sad. Before she died, the twins had a row. Elfie says she is sorry. Feeling like she is invading their privacy, Rose turns away. When she looks back, Elfie has disappeared.
Horrified, Rose runs away, and meets Anastasius again. Anastasius is interested to learn Elfie moved on after apologising to her sister. He suggests that by apologising, Elfie resolved whatever what keeping her here, enabling her to move on.
Anastasius offers Rose the chance to stay with him as a spirit, but they argue when Rose accuses him of withholding information about the time limit. Anastasius angrily tells Rose to leave.
She meets Malak again, who explains that Anastasius used to be known as Henry. As Henry, he discovered he’d been an evil criminal. He was unable to move on, torn apart by the guilt. Malak explains that Henry was reborn as Anastasius, on the condition he would guide future spirits in their own quests to find themselves. The quest to find yourself is a test to see if you’re worthy to move on.
After much indecision, Rose decides to try to find herself. She goes to a library, where she meets CODY, a spirit obsessed with computers. Rose pretends to be interested in computers and asks Cody to show her how to look things up on the internet. She uses the outfit she’s wearing as an example, and Cody finds out it’s part of a school uniform.
When Rose sees an old photograph online of some school children wearing the same uniform as hers, a tingle of feeling shoots through her. She recognises the feeling, from this existence as opposed to from her life, and races out of the library, leaving Cody alone.
She runs to Parliament Hill, where she finds Enid again, and asks her about the jolt she felt when they first met. Enid is scared, associating the feeling with Anastasius, and she runs away. Rose knows she can’t tell Enid that she’s looking for herself, or she will risk both of them being unable to move on. Instead she goes looking for more clues about herself.
Using the skills Cody taught her, she types the clues she has about who she was into the internet: 12 years old, died 1919, East London. After a short search, she begins reading about the Spanish Influenza, which makes her feelings stronger. She realises the feelings mean she’s on the right track, so she looks up statistics within London. She finds when she hovers over the figures relating to Poplar, she has the most feeling, so she travels to East London to see if it will jog her memory.
When Rose heads to St. Matthaeus Church, she feels a jolt of recognition and knows she is on the right track. When she is walking through the grounds of the church, she hears a mother calling to her daughter. “Come here, Violet,” and she is tugged from the church into a memory. She was Violet, and she remembers her brothers, Jack, Charlie and Jonathon; she remembers her dad signing up to fight in the Great War; and she remembers her mum, Enid.
Rose travels back to Parliament Hill, where she finds Enid again. She tells her stories, without explaining to Enid that they are her memories. At last, Enid remembers and mother and daughter are united. The hollow feeling in Rose’s chest disappears and, at last she moves on.

[Heidi]

I like the blurb, but maybe without quite such a direct explanation of the world (The spirits have no idea who they were in life, and exist alongside ‘Visibles’ who cannot see or hear them.)

Instead, maybe: In an afterlife existence, Rose has enjoyed over a hundred years of death as an adventuring free spirit with her spiritual companion, Angel. She was only twelve when she died and like all spirits, she had no idea who she was in life. Death wasn’t all bad until Angel disappears. To find him (Her?), Rose enlists the help of Elfie, another spirit who’s companion has disappeared. Together, they work through the mysteries of death in their search for their missing companions. But will Rose find Angel, or will she find out more than she bargained for?

[Robert]

Heidi's suggestion is a good one.