Query Crit?

[Kelsey]

I'd really like some advice on my query or to see what people think. (I've left off all the pleasantries and etc. I'm not worried about that. ) Thanks!



Syra made a mistake. She saved the life of a human.

For thousands of years, humans have hunted Natura, Syra’s kind. Now, two hundred years after the Earth woke and destroyed modern civilization, the humans blame Natura for the destruction.

Ever since humans and Natura have only interacted in one way—kill or be killed.

Syra never even met a human until two years ago, when her guardian, Orland, moved her tribe into one of their survival camps. To stay alive, Syra must pretend she is what she hates—human.

After accepting an apprenticeship with the camp’s medic, Syra finds herself saving more than just the one human life—instead she saves three.

And each time Syra saves a human, she finds herself questioning what she’s been raised to believe.

When Orland puts his plan to destroy the camp in motion, Syra doesn’t know what to do. If she stands aside, the humans hunting her will die. Her family will be safe, but her friend, held captive by the humans, won’t make it. And neither will the innocent humans of the camp, simply trying to survive.

[Mirella]

hi kelsey,

this is no query, to me it looks more like a synopsis. a query letter should just mention the title, genre, a hook to arouse interest, mention similar title(s):how is this book like & how it's different than others in your genre (fiction - dystopia) and maybe one or two lines about you. best of all, check with query shark. good luck