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Weekly Poetry Stuffage > Week 226 (August 20-27). Poems. Topic: Wake up call

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message 51: by Paula Tohline (new)

Paula Tohline Calhoun (paulatohlinecalhoun) | 493 comments Melissa wrote: "Here is my poetry submission for the topic: Wake up call. Feedback ALWAYS welcome!

Keep Trying by Melissa Andres

'Neath bright city lights
He was born and raised
Thought he'd never leave
So fam..."


We often find ourselves waking up to lives we did not know existed. They can be great lives but fraught with their own danger . Love the last stanza!
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message 52: by Paula Tohline (new)

Paula Tohline Calhoun (paulatohlinecalhoun) | 493 comments Anne wrote: "The Endless Night

It's 2 AM
And all was well
Until the cry
That woke me up
-- A sign of need.


It's 3 AM
Again I stirred
The scream that voiced
A crampy gut
Would not be stilled.

It's 4 AM
With ..."


What us there to say as a mother but "Been there, done that!" Nice job! Being a mom gives a whole new meaning to asleep and awake, doesn't it?


message 53: by Paula Tohline (new)

Paula Tohline Calhoun (paulatohlinecalhoun) | 493 comments M wrote: "At the Condominium


She threw the vase of roses at the door
and wished she’d had a gun to fire instead.
Leaves slid, and water trickled, to the floor.
She took a dazed step back, sat on the bed,
a..."


And the water from the roses warps the wooden floor like he has warped her dreams. Lovely job as always Love the line, "Leaves slid, and water trickled to the floor."


message 54: by Paula Tohline (new)

Paula Tohline Calhoun (paulatohlinecalhoun) | 493 comments Alex (Al) wrote: "Sink

by Al

There she is sleeping on a mattress.
There you are gazing after her.
Don't get too close--
you might open up your heart.
It might be the end of this thing.
She's your morning wake up call.

Wistful, patnful, and ultimately shameful how we use one another. Especially the ones we think or say we love, This poem is filled with meaning and so evocative of our inborn selfishness.



message 55: by M (new)

M | 11617 comments Thank you, Paula! I’ve seen rain-warped wooden floors. I haven’t thought of that in a long time.


message 56: by Guy (last edited Aug 28, 2014 07:54AM) (new)

Guy (egajd) | 11249 comments Words I've Heard



There were spoken words
Words I have heard so often
And I stayed asleep.

What was it this time
That sounded differently
And brought me to you?


message 57: by Paula Tohline (new)

Paula Tohline Calhoun (paulatohlinecalhoun) | 493 comments Guy wrote: "Words I've Heard



There were spoken words)
Words I have heard so often
And I stayed asleep.

What was it this time
That sounded differently
And brought me to you?"


Beautiful, touching, and perfect.


message 58: by Guy (new)

Guy (egajd) | 11249 comments Thank you, Paula. I'm blushing a little at such praise. Thank you.


message 59: by Paula Tohline (new)

Paula Tohline Calhoun (paulatohlinecalhoun) | 493 comments Guy wrote: "Thank you, Paula. I'm blushing a little at such praise. Thank you."

Blush away! You're my editor now, right? LOL


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