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When twins Avery and Chloe Parsons receive a mysterious package and a cryptic message from their grandmother, they begin their journey to Prague to speak to her.
A handsome stranger greets them at their grandmother's home and informs them the woman who lived there is dead.
Devastated, they roam the city and Chloe is drawn to a cracked crystal ball where the spirit of their grandmother warns them of a frightening tale of lust, naivety, betrayal, and...demons.
Armed with a book of magick they can't decipher, the spirit in the cracked ball, the twins must stop Magda's dead lover before he unleashes an unstoppable evil.
Carrie wrote: "Hi, all. I need some feedback on the blurb for my second novel. Dark(ish) Contemporary Fantasy, Adult. Have at it! :-DI'd take a different approach, something like this:
Some things are better left dead.
Twins Avery and Chloe Parsons recognized the face in the cracked crystal ball. From within its shadowy depths, their grandmother Magda tells of a desparate spell cast in a moonlit cemetary to awaken her deceased lover. It's a terrifying tale of lust, betrayal, and demons.
Now only the twins can stop Magda's resurrected lover before he unleashes an unstoppable evil, but the only tools they have at their disposal are their grandmother's trapped spirit and a book of dark magic written in a language they cannot read. And time is running out.
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Magda stands in the cemetery under the moonlight waiting for the spell to work, for her lover to return. With the souls she’s bound to him, his resurrection is at hand. But what she’s done she cannot undo and Magda will soon learn she should have left him in the ground.
Twins Avery and Chloe Parsons know little of magick and nothing of demons. When their grandmother sends them a cryptic letter and a sinister looking book filled with illegible scrawls, they set out for Prague to check on her.
A handsome yet disturbing stranger answers the door of their grandmother’s apartment and tells the girls the woman who used to live there is dead. They are devastated…and now highly suspicious.
Drawn to a cracked crystal ball in a curiosity shop, Chloe discovers the spirit of their grandmother within who tells them a frightening tale of lust, naivety, betrayal, and demons.
Armed with a book of dark magick they can’t read and their grandmother’s spirit in a cracked crystal ball, the twins must stop Magda’s dead lover before he unleashes an unstoppable evil.