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I am getting ready to start looking for Agent's and want feedback. I am looking for beta read's not for editing or anything else. I am most interesting in thoughts on the story structure, character growth ect.
When Roger can no longer make a living on his home planet he is forced to choose between lobotomizing himself, so a corporation can use his brain as a computer, or leaving his home. He is hired onto the Erikson, a city size construction ship heading to an uninhabited system. When at the build site the star goes nova, the Erikson is damaged and forced to flee.
In a system every record said was uninhabited they find a large human population. They assume it to be a dark colony, but this colony knows no earth language and lacks technology freely available when the first ships left earth.
First three chapters (book is done, but thought you might want to read these before deciding to read the whole thing): https://drive.google.com/file/d/1SjXI...

Blurb:
Adventure. History. A bit of Fantasy.
Maps...and Birds.
Frother and Horrock are friends for eternity, but at a young age Frother is sent to a prestigious school in Arabia and Horrock is sent o a one way voyage somewhere south of Java. From Malacca to Europe to the southern ocean, Frother spends many years attempting to find his friend. Amongst sword fighting, his King’s enemies and a shipwreck, and with the help of birds will he ever find his friend?
Spoiler:
Frother is 1/2 thumb-sized and communicates directly with birds.
I can be contacted on dkwillow@tpg.com.au
David.

I'm not certain if this book would be my thing. I'm not into sword fighting and that sort of stuff. Thanks though.

I am getting ready to start lo..."Hello Joshua, I might like this. I'm not sure. Thanks for letting me have a few chapters to look at. I will print them out and let you know.

I am getting ready to start lo..."Joshua, I am going to PM you.

It's based in the real world (our world) and about a girl with Synesthesia (her particular condition is that she can see sounds as color, there are many variations of synesthesia and I'm loosely using the condition for the fantasy element).
Below is a blurb that I'm currently working on for when I submit to publishers. If you're interested please let me know and I'll provide a google docs link for you.
Synopsis:
When Allissa's childhood friend is murdered under mysterious circumstances, she begins to see the world differently. As she attends an academy for the musically gifted she begins to see and even feel the rhythms and harmonies of the world. Even stranger is that she can manipulate them, changing the world around her, making it better when the notes she plays are harmonious and worse when the notes are wrong.
As her gift begins to manifest she quickly discovers that the world is not all harmony and rhythm, Discord lurks among the song that shapes the world and that force may not only be responsible for her friends death, but may now have set it's eyes on her.


I have a finished manuscript which is YA realistic fantasy which bends toward the literary side. The world is basically the same as ours. The time period is different. The society is theologically based. The protagonist is female. It is a mixture of adventure, tragedy, mystery, politics, and hope. There are supernatural elements toward the end but nothing over the top. I need to know where I have flaws, be they developmental or with the plot itself. I prefer sending the file and not copying and pasting.
Very briefly it is a book about a girl looking for her father but becomes entangled in a political conflict which may lead to war between her home country and their enemy to the south. Those living there are runaways who decided to flee south and forge their own country after facing persecution. There's some action as well with smuggling and traveling and stealing.
There is no sex, cursing, or gratuitous violence. I thank you for your time. I greatly appreciate it. If you have time and are interested, please let me know.

I have a finished manuscript which is YA realistic fantasy which bends toward the literary side. The world is basically the same as ours. The time period is different. The society is theologic..."
Hello Evette, I will send you a P.M.

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I do NOT like erotica, steamy romance violence, hard core sex, or a lot of foul language. I also prefer not to read long or epic fiction. I want any world or character I read about to be very believable. I tend to steer away from books that are like "Son of the Witch Invades Planet of Doom" (sort of been there done that is what I mean.) I want it to be original.
Keep in mind that I'm a slow reader and only read a few books a month.
You can reach me by PM
Thanks
Joanne