Submit Your Epitaph - Week of 7/21

[Michael]

Use this discussion thread to submit your epitaph between 7/21 and 7/27.

[Daniel Abdal-Hayy]

She knew there was something amiss
when her breath took flight
and her feet failed to

[Michael]

thanks, Daniel! An epitaph capturing the moment of recognition.

[Daniel Abdal-Hayy]

The farewells of others he read
sobered his years
until a bower of peace
surrounded him

[Jojo]

Silence the drummer in my chest
He has become to pationate
He strides and flicks the surface
Having no care of the flames atop my shoulders

[Jojo]

Brush my shoulder, brush past with sweet lips,
It makes no difference, my dear.
Just come to me,
Sweatly satisfy my yearning for you.
Tonight my heart will have the last say,
To set me ablaze, and give me away.

[Michael]

Thanks, Jojo. Passionate imagery. I especially like 'the drummer in my chest.' It reads more like an expectant love poem than an epitaph, but to quote your poem, "It makes no difference."

[Michael]

Daniel Abdal-Hayy wrote: "The farewells of others he read
sobered his years
until a bower of peace
surrounded him"

This epitaph seems to remark on the therapeutic or "sobering" effect of reading other people's epitaphs ("farewells"); the "bower of peace" appears to be a result-- making peace with the fact of mortality by experiencing it in the words of others gone before.

[Jojo]

He needed a start
An exponential rise of ideas
That filled the void in his mind.
Like the shallows of the sea rising
The poet would see beyond the block
A tsunami of words flooding through his gates

[Jojo]

Was he sea sick?
No, yesterday was simply clearing
So that the present could organize
Once formed, His words took off

[Michael]

Thanks, JoJo. I find here verses celebrating a writer, a poet, getting his words together. You might want to take a look at the "How to write an Epitaph" under the "Discussions" button on the site. The epitaph is a "form". It requires a topic-- the deceased. It can be in the voice of a passerby or in the voice of the deceased herself. I tried to talk about all this in "HOw to write an epitaph." I find I learn most about writing poetry by reading the best examples you can find. It's "Finding your voice," not over-thinking about it. Send your experiments!

[Ejaz]

The journey was transient
But that was all I had
To determine what happens next

Ejaz Naqvi, MDThe Quran: With or Against the Bible?

[Michael]

Thak you, sir! A medical doctor should know this subject well. glad for your insights.