My first chapter

[Esther]

I think it reads really nice. I read it pretty quick, wich is a good sign.
You wonder at first, why everyone is looking at Nam, but now I understand. I think you have a pretty good character set up in this first chapter.

Only thing that bothered me where the misspellings, here and there. I think I counted around 7, 8 of them. Some words miss a letter and stuff like that.

Other than that, keep it going!

[Matt]

Hello. I think this is pretty good. The setting is easy to visualize and I already feel sorrow for the character. It leaves me wondering what is going to happen next. Good job!

[LAURA J HELFEN]

Hola!
The POV threw me at first but I got used to it. The few spelling and grammatical mistakes should be an easy fix. Also, there were one or two odd word choices that drew me out of the story...no need to use "big" words when a more common word would work. i.e..."...racked my body sending tremors throughout my sinews. I let it all go, all...". Why "sinews" when "body" would be more commonly used or "muscles" would work too.
When Nam was writing in his journal and reliving the horror of his mother leaving him it brought tears to my eyes.
Well done...keep up at it!