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Elizabeth ♛Smart Girls Love Trashy Books♛
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Jun 08, 2018 10:37AM

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I've watched the first many times but I never understand what's going on.



Basically in canon the girl, the main character of my fanfic, is really selfish and manipulates people around her to get what she wants. One way she does this is sleeping with guys to get money or information or whatever. In the actual series she comes across some technology the guy I ship her with made before he died and she manipulates people with said technology. In my fanfic, since the two formed a 'friendship pact', she decides to manipulate him further and seduces him, having sex with him and making him spill all the information he has on his current technology project. I think he would go along with it because he's pretty hopeless about getting out of their situation alive and also believes she will die soon anyway and the information will die with her.
I guess my point is...I'm worried this will seem out-of-character for the two. I'm not making them have sex because I ship them, I'm making them do it since it seems like something the girl would do in canon. She only cares for people she can use, and she can use this boy in my fanfic. She thinks he has a crush on her and thus is exploiting it. I'm wondering if I should go on ahead and write the scene or if I should scrap it and make her get the information out of him another way.



I already know what she's going to say in response too lol
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Elizabeth ♛Smart Girls Love Trashy Books♛
(last edited Jun 10, 2018 10:14AM)
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When I actually started walking home it was so dark it was like night except it was five thirty PM. I thought I could make it home and then it started to rain. And then I got caught in a really bad downpour. Extremely heavy rain and super fast wind that made it so I couldn't see a single freaking thing. I couldn't even stand up in the wind, all I could do was hold on really tightly to the umbrella because I knew Mom would literally kill me if I lost it. I would compare it to being inside a washing machine-water being sprayed at you from all angles at a very fast speed. I tried to go inside the courthouse for shelter since it was near me but it was closed. Then I hid inside Tivoli's Fashion to wait out the storm. I didn't know what to do and decided I should just call Mom and ask her to pick me up.
Since it had calmed down somewhat I went back outside and started to walk back home, not very happy at all. I got the attention of a woman outside Crazy Horse and she felt bad for me and I asked if she had a phone I could borrow and she did. I tried to call my mom three times with it and then realized she wouldn't pick up a number with a caller I.D. she didn't recognize. The woman wished me luck and I told her I would be fine and continued to walk home; it was raining but it wasn't as bad as what I was in earlier.
When I got home I told Mom I was going to take a hot bath and she didn't even look up and asked if I forgot the umbrella, and I said I had it. She then asked really weirdly if I didn't want to use it and I snapped that I'm not stupid; I have NEVER not used the umbrella when I needed it. I told her I was the person who called her earlier and Mom said it was good I walked home since she didn't think she'd make it in time anyway and I grew annoyed, telling her what happened to me and asking her what if the storm continued to be that bad? Or what if it escalated? What if we had a tornado warning? I told her I would remember her response to that event the next time something bad happens to me.
I checked this morning and found out we had a severe thunderstorm warning at 5:30 yesterday, likely because of that wind gust. And I had to walk out in it.
Maybe I'm just being a spoiled brat and not wanting to walk. After all, I knew it was going to storm and I went outside anyway. It's supposed to storm again tonight and if I get caught out in it I'll only have myself to blame.

On the bright side I got to play Lollipop Chainsaw again after like forever since we got a new PS3(it didn't work on the old one for some reason) so now Mom can't say I never play the games she buys me.



That sounds really condescending to me.

If you like I can wish you suffering instead. I dont see how "get well soon" is being smug.




Warning it does have a sexual scene in it. This is only the third fanfic I've put a scene like that in, I very rarely if ever go into sexual details in anything I write especially my fanfics




...I literally didn't feel hot when I walked to the library in it.


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Elizabeth ♛Smart Girls Love Trashy Books♛
(last edited Jun 14, 2018 01:09PM)
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For my entire life, I was close to her because even when Dad did live with us he was hardly around because of work. I gravitate towards stories about single-parent families or families with no parents because of my own situation. I constantly write them myself.
And to say such a thing, regardless of religious or personal beliefs, is really hurtful and honestly a bit selfish. So what if your parents are happily married and are of the opposite gender? Some of us aren't so lucky. Some of us didn't get a say in having happily-married parents. And some of us wouldn't change our situation for the world. And I'm honestly one of those people. I'm not going to leave a comment on her review because I find it pointless, but seeing that review again made me feel really bad so of course I'm going to post about it in my journal.
I hope something happens to that girl to make her see the error of her ways, since it is unfair and hurtful for her to call strong, hardworking single parents with children 'an unhealthy family situation'




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Elizabeth ♛Smart Girls Love Trashy Books♛
(last edited Jun 15, 2018 09:05AM)
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i can and have gone outside in shorts when it was snowing.

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