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The Dead Tree
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Okay here's what I've come up with so far. The town of Steele Grove, Missouri sits high along the bluffs of the Mississippi River. Legends run rampant about crazy Blythe Fountain, who, as a teenager discovered her beau hanging from the oak tree in the family's front yard. A short time later, two of her friends mysteriously disappeared, never to be seen or heard from again.
Now, some eighty years later, Ariel Fountain has inherited the property, and after catching her boyfriend cheating on her, decides she needs of a change of scenery and runs headlong into a place shrouded in superstition and family secrets which may be better off left unsolved.
Ariel sets out with the help of a local man, Grady, to uncover the truth behind the hanging and the girls' disappearances. What Ariel discovers is a horrific secret she wishes she would have left buried.
Wow... I love that!I'm going to offer a couple suggestions to tighten sentences, totally up to you.
"The town of Steele Grove, Missouri sits high along the bluffs of the Mississippi River. Legends run rampant about crazy Blythe Fountain, who, as a teenager discovered her beau hanging from the oak tree in the family's front yard."
It's a bit of a run on sentence. I recommend removing "as a teenager."
"Now, some eighty years later, Ariel Fountain has inherited the property, and after catching her boyfriend cheating on her..."
I recommend removing "Now, some" and starting with, "Eighty years later..."
Honestly, other then those two minor details, this a great blurb that's much more reflective of a literary novel. Neat and tidy. A perfect blend of back story with main story. I love it!
It's amazing what you can get when you step back and think things through objectively. :)Thanks, Lily, for the feedback. I'll make a couple of nips and tucks and call it good.
So happy to see this has worked for you. Thanks for being patient and hanging in there :)(No tree pun intended)
LOL Good one. I was making it too complicated and trying to "cutesy" it up. That's not literary, and the book is.
Exactly. I bet the book itself has now let out a huge sigh of relief. I'm free!
That makes two of us. :)
Three of us, and all the lurkers who were collectively holding their breaths while watching the drama unfold.I know you're out there :P
When a woman's lover commits suicide she leaves gifts by the tree where it happened as a memorial to the dead man. Soon, other gifts begin to appear and the woman discovers her lover was cheating on her with two other women.
That's how it all began. :)