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Umm. Why does my brain vomit so many blurbs?
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I'm partial to #1. It gives the reader a little something about the character. The second one is too vague.
The Cinderella one because, well, you know how I feel about anything vaguely Disney related!Seriously though I do really like it, but I do like the first one as well, so, yeah, not really all that helpful! Sorry!
@Miss Christina: Yes, methinks you're right. Anyone having not read book one wouldn't really get the "this girl" reference from...well...book one LOL. Thank you!!!@Miss (Princess) Jane: Hey, as long as you like both, I can't totally mess it up haha!
I like the second one, but I'm weird.
I prefer the first one as well. It's short, catchy, gives a hint at who the characters are, and leaves me interested in what's going on.
Nooooo!! We're sooo divided!!!*pretends to sob**secretly loves it*
@Mr John: Yes, you are. And thanks! ^_~
@Miss CP: Hmm. Interested is a veeery good thing, eh? Thank you!!
Okay, here's my attempt at merging the suckers together:This girl...
She's Cinderella.
I'm Prince Charming.
It's a fairy tale.
Except...
I’m still a workaholic. And stubborn as all hell. With a raging hero complex. Not to mention, 523 square feet is really f*cking small. Especially when you’re a damn paraplegic.
Better? Worse? I just need to stop now?
*crazy laughs*
I like 1, 2, and 3! Yeah, I'm no help! :)
I think #3 has caught the best elements of the other two.
@Miss Marie: Well, if nothing else, you're good for my self-esteem ^_~@Mr Ian: Thank you for the feedback, good sir!!
Hugsss,
Ann
I still kinda prefer #1....But I do like #3 more than #2.
Much appreciated, CP! Hmm. If it's pretty even, I'm gonna be lazy and leave it LMAO!
Still like one. It's intriguing. And it makes you like the guy...
Me: Did you hear that, buddy?Dude: Yeah, she said she likes me (winks at Miss Jane) How you doin'?
Me: (eye roll) Men...
Seriously, though, thank you!! ^_^
Hugs,
Ann
Love the brain vomit blurb, would definitely read. The only thing I like about the first one is the paraplegic part. Paraplegics need more representation in literature where they aren't objects of pity/die.
C.L. wrote: "Paraplegics need more representation in literature where they aren't objects of pity/die."+1 bazillion!!!
And thank you for the feedback, Miss CL ^_~
Nah, Miss Joy! Never too late for some partying ^_~ Thank you for the feedback!
Hugs,
Ann
#2 for me. It sets the tone for the book, I think.
I love #1 - I would totally pick that up.
@TL: I appreciate the feedback!!@Tim: Hmm. We all know I dig different *smirks* and you're totally right about the style thing.
@Kat re: "I love #1 - I would totally pick that up."
Face. Hurts. Smiling. Too. Much. Seriously, though, thank you! That means so much to me!!
@KJ: Thank you so much!!
I actually tweaked #1 slightly a little while back:
1. 523 square feet is really f*cking small....still okay? Maybe? Haha!
2. Sharing a bathroom is the worst idea ever. Especially when you’re a damn paraplegic.
3. Never lie. No matter what.
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Sooo...
I did that thing again where my brain spits out random stuff and I kinda dig it. I realize both blurbs say nothing about the story haha! Would you wickedly awesome peeperoonies lemme know which one you find more catchy, pretty please?
Current Blurb:
It’s been two months since I moved in with Mickey Hart.
Here’s what I’ve learned:
Oh, and one last thing...
I love her. More than ever.
Even if I'm still a workaholic. And stubborn as all hell.
Brain Vomit Blurb:
This girl…
She’s Cinderella.
I’m Prince Charming.
It’s a goddamn fairytale.
Perfect during the day.
Just f*cking perfect.
Until the clock strikes midnight.
Thank yousss!
Hugs,
Ann