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Excellent, but I would augment the last sentence to bring the connection full circle. Something like: "...who is Lucian Baker? As Andrew is inextricably pulled deeper into this decades old mystery the answers will change his life forever."
Tara wrote: "Excellent, but I would augment the last sentence to bring the connection full circle. Something like: "...who is Lucian Baker? As Andrew is inextricably pulled deeper into this decades old mystery ..."Oooohhhh nice!!! I keep going back to the thrill of ending on a question mark... But this is certainly a draw back to a proper period. Thank you Tara!
or "...who is Lucian Baker? As Andrew is inextricably pulled deeper into this mystery will the answers to these decades old questions make his fortune or seal his fate?"
Tara wrote: "or "...who is Lucian Baker? As Andrew is inextricably pulled deeper into this mystery will the answers to these decades old questions make his fortune or seal his fate?""Very nice... You didn't like the earlier quick ending? And by the way, you might know more about these answers than most at this point?... :) Happy Friday dear Tara!!
;) I really did like the quick ending but wanted to give you a question mark mic drop lol. Have you considered putting one of those auto countdown clock widgets on your website for launch day? They are so cool and fun :)
Tara wrote: ";) I really did like the quick ending but wanted to give you a question mark mic drop lol. Have you considered putting one of those auto countdown clock widgets on your website for launch day? They..."Awesome idea! I need to update the whole website -- this would make a GREAT addition :) Thanks Tara!
I'm about to release my self-published debut, a YA mystery titled "The Secret Billionaire," in September, and I'd love your thoughts on the book description below. Does it succeed in tickling your fancy? All feedback welcome! (Also, free advance copies available!)
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Teymour Shahabi
Teymour Shahabi
The Secret Billionaire:
March 24, 196... Billionaire Lyndon Surway takes off in his private plane and never returns. His will leaves the entirety of his wealth—one of the largest fortunes in history—to his “dear friend Lucian Baker.” Only there is no trace of anyone by that name. And the fortune itself is nowhere to be found.
Andrew Day knows nothing of wealth and privilege, but he won a scholarship to study at the most exclusive school in the country, in the town where the mystery, decades later, remains unsolved. There he discovers friendship and danger with the aristocratic Cameron and the beautiful Olivia. But watchful eyes follow him everywhere... Until, one night, he comes across a secret that will change his life. As he begins to unravel what really happened to the Surway fortune, the question remains: who is Lucian Baker?