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Regarding ASOIAF comparisons, I think it's like comparing The Deer Hunter to Missing In Action. They're both dark, violent movies about the impact of the Vietnam War on American prisoners-of-war, but the former is a psychological character study while the latter is a high-action revenge fantasy. You can enjoy or dislike either film, but they're very different executions of similar subject matter.
Although I'll give ADoC a few extra marks: it's pulp, but it's really well-done pulp. The characters are a nice diversity of viewpoints who all have clear and reasonable motivations for their actions (view spoiler) , the action scenes are pretty engaging, and it all seems to be building up to a thrilling climax.

It's actually about motivation in minor things. For example, there is a female character on a rooftop early in the book who decides to intervene in a chase on the chance of profit. That's fine. But her first step is to kill one of the chasers. Murder of one member of a large group of guards seemed pretty risky for such speculative benefit. There are similarly undermotivated acts scattered throughout what I've read so far.
I am also finding it hard to make this society fit together in my head. There seems to be an awful lot of daily killings in really large numbers. I can't see how that's sustainable even in the middle of a gang-war. I also can't see how a kingdom could be run where the king remains in any way neutral in a battle between the richest citizens of his capital and a thieves' guild. I try to picture Thren as the Godfather and it still doesn't seem to be quite enough ...

1. The general badassery. I made the comparison before to a Zack Snyder movie, but that doesn't have to be a bad thing in and of itself. The action sequences are more 300 than Man of Steel; it's irritating how all of the main characters seem to be badasses, but it's awesome when those characters are actually in the act of being a badass (if that makes sense)
2. The focus on one particular city. I really, really love things set in cities, and I also really do like that this feels epic while still being very limited in setting.
3. It's refreshing. Even Man of Steel can be refreshing if all you've been watching for months is Criterion Collection dvds (which I feel like we have been).
(@Joe, yeah, I get that you really can't compare the two strictly. It was just that some structural similarities between the two helped me understand why I wasn't enjoying the one)


If I had to put a finger on it, I'd say it feels like a video game setting. Just about every character that actually gets a name and even a minimal exploration of their point of view is some kind of badass, either in hand-to-hand combat, magic, or both. Even characters who are somewhat sheltered and pampered have some badassery by virtue of being important to the plot. Every background character is just a mook or victim or resource.
The plot serves mainly to put these badasses in each others' paths. Priests and mages exist, and have magic powers, and no attempt is made to explain or justify this, it just is. Which is fine--not every book needs to have a Brandon Sanderson-level graduate thesis on how magic works. That's why I think Rob's Zack Snyder comparison is very appropriate. It's a Dynasty Warriors-style video game, where a handful of badasses slaughter mooks by the dozens before directly engaging each other in scenery-destroying duels.

I’m looking forward to the interview with Bryan about his thoughts on the book and why he chose it. I think it’s pretty ballsy to pick a book for this group, and I want to thank him for the read and the Kickstarter donation. Now I’ll think of Haern every time I see Lem (….although I think Lem would eat him without any problems).
The series I did identify this with most was the Brent Weeks The Night Angel Trilogy (which may have put me off this genre for a while), and was glad to see David Dalglish mention the linkage in his afterward.


But I'll mention a few things I enjoyed so far: The audio book is awesomely narrated. He really tries to put something into these bland characters. If I ever write a book, I want him voicing my characters. And I like the idea of these super powerful thief guilds running the city. The setting seems interesting, but it's taken a back seat to the action so far, so hopefully it is expanded on in later chapters.
(Loved the Dynasty Warriors ref, Joe. I immediately thought of storm troopers when I was reading.)
I liked the first quarter, but starting getting bored in the second quarter. I'm hoping it picks up when I finish this weekend.


I'll stick with it, in the hopes that things might pick up at some point.

Thren scolds his son telling him how family is the most important thing and then has Aaron kill his older brother for making too many mistakes.
Later Aaron saves the life of someone he barely knows who sold him out only the day before.
Also does old man gemcroft remind anyone else of older version of Ming the Merciless?

Yeah the decisions the characters make is a bit too dramatic but acceptable. I like how it had some magic elements to it. The magic was very in the unknown rather having its explanation which I found very pulling.


I don't dislike it as much as you. But I did just get to a part where he seems to be doing bad Slavic accents for a couple of new characters. I'm not sure why. And when I thought about it more, I realized one of those "new" characters isn't actually new - but apparently he spent a lot of time abroad between chapters, because I didn't recognize him.

But so far there seems to be a lot of bloody exposition and not much in the way of character development... I need to become attached to someone who will make me feel invested in this book, fast.

I did come across some promising passage in the past couple of chapters("Daggers and Poison floated through the streets" was just a perfect line. Not overly purple, perfect tone, etc. And the bit about the imposing, god-built walls and towers mocked by the unimpressive city within was a really great image. It's a little unfortunate that the first really great, concrete image of the city comes in the fifth chapter, but it's still a really great, concrete image), so I might get back to it eventually.

I have one pet-peeve that is irking the hell out of me: tissue paper soldiers/guards. Seriously. If I was in a long-term conflict with other groups that have super(ish) powers, I would be sinking a serious amount of capital into training competent guards. If you routinely run into combatants that can hit you in a sweet spot with a thrown dagger from a distance, you need to rethink your armor policy and your training.
Unless the purpose of having craptacular guards is to fill the hallways with their corpses as a natural barrier behind which you can place archers.
I think that Peter's Evil Overlord List should be mandatory reading for avoiding this trope.



Overall, I don't really find this book particularly original...yet. Hopefully there'll be a 'wow' moment that will make everything worth it. If not, doubt I'll pick up anything else from the writer.

I'm actually liking it. It does remind me a bit of ASOIAF. Part of that comes from the violence, but also from the style of writing. Each chapter being a different POV, the wide cast of characters that can be easy to get confused/a little lost at first... I also like that there are some interesting, strong female characters. And, while it's got a lot of violence, I seem to do OK with fantasy violence (as compared to violence in sci fi or what I read in modern thriller-type books).
It's not the "deepest" book I've ever read. It probably won't win any points for the beautiful prose or anything, but I like reading "easier" books. Books like Cloud Atlas or 1Q84 are a lot of fun, but they can be work. This book is fun (so far) for different reasons, and I enjoy "popcorn" or "beach" books.

Really, I'd protest the idea that deep books have tough/dense prose, and fun books have easy prose. Good books have good prose. If I did a terrible painting of Venice, you wouldn't say "well the way he put the paint onto the canvas is bad, but Venice is a pretty beautiful place, so this is a good painting. Not one of the greats of history, but still pretty good!" Words are the brush strokes of authors.
Sometimes good prose means *simple* prose, but that's not what we have here. We have often long, complex sentence structures and/or paragraphs that sound awkward, and get in the way of what the author is trying to say (really if the editor had just cut like 10% of the words this would be immensely improved).
And really, I would argue that simple prose really doesn't help the kind if novel this wants to be. I mean, who would film a badass action flick and go "ok, we want the camerawork to be as simple as possible. Nothing flashy or crazy here. Pretend we're working on a romcom."
I think, (and I recommended this in another thread), Aiden Moher's story in the sword and laser anthology is a great example of this. His prose isn't ostentatious at all, but he knows how to give his prose a fitting tone, and how to throw in badass lines that actually do sound badass rather than sound like someone trying to sound badass and tripping over themselves.

That said, it's been a very long day and I've taken some painkillers so I'm going to try to remember to revisit this thread in the morning. Anything I type at this point will only be even less cogent than my last post... : D

And for the record, I lemmed ASOIAF too. Not because of the unpleasant characters. Though it definitely has its share. But it just never seemed to get anywhere.


It's so shallow in the backstories, and derivative of the Japanese 'Adult Swim' Cartoon Network imports, except the characters are paper cutouts glued onto popcycle sticks. They've all got only three modes of feeling (want to kill something now, will wait awhile to extract goodies if you are important and rich before I kill you, and I'm impressed by how well you kill so I like you and will be your friend). No depths whatsoever. It reads like it's written for readers without a lot of time to waste on world building or connecting with the book.
My copy doesn't say (thankfully I borrowed this from the library), but is this a middle school read?
Nothing personal, honest. Obviously I'm not the target audience.

Maybe I'm soft for first works and/or self-published things (I don't know if this one was, but the alt pick was, so I forgive editing issues if I know it's likely a professional editor wasn't involved). Just amusing to me. :)

Interestingly, despite finishing up at what I would say a 2.5/5 rating, my opinion went up after listening to the authors note at the end, where he explains where the series came from and how (in my words) the first edition he kind of threw together and was all over the place. So he understood at least some of the weaknesses and went back and fixed at least some of them. I can appreciate that. Whether or not that is enough to get me to read the second book, I'm not sure yet.
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Cloud Atlas (other topics)1Q84 (other topics)
The Night Angel Trilogy (other topics)
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Brent Weeks (other topics)David Dalglish (other topics)
My overall sense of the thing thus far is a Zack Snyder movie. A lot of people grimacing under an extremely blatant grey filter.
I've been trying to figure out why I'm not enjoying this. At first I thought it was just the prose, which is oftentimes clumsy, redundant, and just overwritten, but after fifty pages I can usually get past that. Then I thought that maybe I just don't like the grimdark genre, that maybe this is too violent and depressing (grey filter!) for me to enjoy.
But then I read the Winds of Winter preview chapter recently released, which reminded me that no, there's at least one extremely dark and violent fantasy series I've loved since I first encountered it seven/ eight years ago. And that comparison created some interesting parallels.
Both are extremely dark. Both feature child protagonists in that dark setting, and both feature child protagonists eventually embracing that violence. Both are about terrible wars that hurt all levels of society. And most interestingly, both seem to embrace the same structure, of introducing multiple narrative voices on all sides of that conflict, featuring extremely focused third person limited narrators.
So I looked back at A Game of Thrones. Bran is the first perspective, post-prologue that we get.
Both begin with a brutal death, as someone is put to death. The difference is in one we have an innocent watching the law at work as a man is executed, and in other we have a little child getting all stabby on his brother because his brother is.... not intelligent or something?
Martin gives us a lot of space. He introduces us to a world and to characters before everything goes down. We care about the conflict and about the characters because we have time to grow fond of them and become immersed in this world. And the violence/grimness of the thing is slowly amped up over the course of the novel.
Imagine if he had started the whole thing with the Red Wedding, after everyone has become dark and jaded, after the conflict has taken massive tolls. Would you care? I don't think I would. And I think that's why I'm finding it hard to care about these characters.
(Something should be said too of Martin's amazing ability to really dive into the psyche of terrible people and help us understand them. I feel like Cersei Lannister is probably more blatantly evil of a character than is [That One Rich Dude Who Chats With His Daughter In An Early Chapter], but Cersei's chapters always at least partially got me on her side. With TORDWCWHDIAEC, I feel nothing at all).
So I'm still going to give it more of a chance, because maybe term papers and the way HIMYM ended are making me cranky enough to hate anything I'd read right now. But those are my first impressions