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You have until the 24th of August to post a poem, and August 25-27, we’ll vote for which one we thought was best.

Please post directly into the topic and not a link. Please don’t use a poem previously used in this group.

Your poem can be any length.

This week’s topic is: Different Worlds

The rules are pretty loose. You could write a poem about anything that has to do with the subject but it must relate to the topic somehow.

Have fun!

Thanks to Bailey for suggesting the topic!


message 2: by Angel (new)

Angel Alienation

What of love?
What of sacrifice?
What of diligence?
What of the common man?
Am I golden, am I still steel,
real, fading or evading the course
Absorbing endurance still not existing
To be revered to finally be living, breathing, alive
Settling at the bottom then ascending transcending to the surface
Imploding like the sun
Gone away from matter
Human but, inhumane like a ghost, like a fever; relating to nothing corporeal
An ancient spirit enslaved in a contemporary shallow time period
with no comprehension of my kind; the intellectual.


message 3: by Edward (new)

Edward Davies | 1727 comments Angel beat me again! :-)

Title : They’re Out There!
Poet : Edward Davies

The idea that the universe
Would make the odd decision
To limit intelligent life
Is oft met with derision

That mankind is wholly alone,
That Earth is so unique
That only it can create life
Is stupid, so to speak.

There must be other life out there
Off in the great vast ether
Or did God think that branching out
Was simply too beneath Her?

But until aliens invade
And take us to their leaders
We’ll just assume they don’t exist,
The sneaky little bleeders.


message 4: by Alex (new)

Alex Morritt (alexmorritt) | 287 comments 'NOTHING CHANGES' by Alex Morritt


As dawn's first light warms the earth
Gaia is busy giving birth
Another life, another day
Triggered by a solar ray

Matches struck, gas flames lit
Around a table families sit
Each one waiting expectantly
For warming brews of coffee or tea

Cafeterias gurgle and plop
Kettles whistle, toasters pop
In frying pans bacon sizzles
Butter melts, honey drizzles
On slices of the finest sourdough bread
Oh what it is to be well fed !

For sure these are the lucky ones
Granola, bagels, cinnamon buns
For others the pickings somewhat slimmer
The day's prospects a whole lot dimmer
A scrap here, a few crumbs there
Hardly hearty breakfast fayre
And so it goes on Planet Earth
Hunger and sadness; plenty and mirth

Copyright 2015 Alex Morritt


message 5: by Julie (new)

Julie Grenness | 137 comments From Julie:

SURVIVORS OF DIFFERENT WORLDS....

Some of us survived,
'Lucky' to be alive?
Some men are spam
Too much negative ham,
Energy vampires a'boxing,
Women need detoxing,
Bullies get the most damage,
Not even a trite adage,
Some women have different worlds,
Rebuild your dreams, you girls,
Delete some people to trash,
Break that cycle and backlash.
Tell us what we don't know for once,
Real heroes hit women with a punch,
We're collecting clichés in this ode,
Mantra of positive aspects, life's road,
Don't know what 'lucky' means,
Some men set out to demean.
Some of us are alive,
From different worlds, but survived.


message 6: by Robert (new)

Robert Hobkirk LATE

Late afternoon nap
dogs, old men rest together
cats, women work on.


message 7: by Fidel (new)

Fidel  Love (fidelmlove) | 48 comments "A Different World"

We owe it to our children
who are our future
to build a better future for them
Life is precious
Before we give them this pearl
Ask yourself;
Do I want my child to live in this world?
I'd hate to leave them with racism
See the hate in them
As I raise them
and explain why we go to war over God
instead of praising him
And spreading his love through our world
that was made for them
His children - our children
deserve a better world
and it would make their Dad proud
To see them living in a different world
than the one we have now

by Fidel M. Love


message 8: by Billie Jo (new)

Billie Jo (jojolov333) | 232 comments *You Never Know*


Boy

I saw her there and she saw me
I was sure
She is so beautiful and innocent
So very "cool"
I'm so in love and still
I am falling
But there's no way she'd notice me
Standing here calling
Her name tastes like honey on my lips
I can see
The laugh lines on her cheeks
Does she think of me?
I wonder to myself,
Lonely and shy
If only she knew
How hard I would try
To keep her smiling
To keep her proud
I'll do anything to prove myself
Protect her in a crowd
I saw her at the dance
As she spun and twirled
And I realized she and I
Were from two different worlds.


Girl

I wonder if he saw me as
I looked at him
He is so cute and lovely
When I catch sight of that grin
I feel so close yet
So far away
I wonder if he'd catch me
If I stumbled his way
His name is so smooth,
Like honey on my tongue
I watch him often daydream
I've heard his voice as he sung
I hope he could see
The love I could give
The moment he notices
Is when I can truly live
I'd give him my all
I'd show him my heart
I'd keep that love true
"Till death due us part"
But that night in the gym
He never noticed me swirl
And I realized at last
We were from vastly different worlds.


message 9: by Abigail (last edited Aug 21, 2015 01:24PM) (new)

Abigail (hiilikewritingandstuffs) Doll Face - Abigail

I am Doll Face
They cast me out
And chanted a rhyme
That made me empty throughout

No emotion I feel
My name they replaced
Inside there’s no heart
I am now Ugly Face

Over the abyss,
I know I will find
A bright world
That once was mine

But if I somehow lift
My shattered head
I’ll hear that fragile chant again:

“Doll Face, Doll Face,
Hide in the shadows,
Ugly Face.
We wish we could
But we just cannot fix you,
Damaged beyond repair,
We leave you in solitude.
Love yourself,
Because no one else will.
Collect old doll parts
In hopes that we’ll someday accept you!”


message 10: by Guy (new)

Guy (egajd) | 11091 comments Two Rings and the Pi of Marriage
        by Guy Duperreault (feedback and comments welcomed)

It had been some years since she had put the ring on his finger,
and he hers on hers.
He fingered it, plain gold.
Some many years ago they had agreed it symbolized,
perfectly,
their oneness into infinity. Each ring an infinity?
But isn’t there only one if there is an infinity at all, two rings as one?
He continued to spin his ring on his finger and wonder.
His palms were beginning to sweat with the problem of pi,
that pi’s irrationality arises from a
relationship
between the two main parts of a circle.
Two as one! Parts of a circle!
So a circle is not a true unity, two not as one
but as an irrational relationship into nothing and infinity.
Is that marriage in the eye of our imagination of God’s image?

And then he wondered if he or she was the circle’s circumference.
And then whether or not that mattered, in the big picture.
And that thought began to give him a headache,
because he was convinced that she would have no idea why his head hurt
because he was struggling to rationalize the failure of their marriage
because he had been tricked by ritual into the delusion of unity,
and hadn’t known that unity without individuality is untenable.

He took the ring off, held it in front of his eye.
He didn’t know who he was and she was a stranger too,
strangers in alien landscapes walking in circles to nowhere.


message 11: by Joci (new)

Joci (kdemiweall) | 434 comments *.*


message 12: by Arun (last edited Aug 24, 2015 09:54PM) (new)

Arun Iyer (aruniyer) | 369 comments Untitled

A world with moon,
and one without,
is sometimes merely,
a cloud away.

And yet, within my heart,
the world with you,
is miles apart.

All I desire is the courage,
to reach out to you,
or must I simply wait,
for the cloud to pass by?

[edit]sorry the late edits[/edits]


message 13: by Connie (new)

Connie D. | 656 comments Edward wrote: "Angel beat me again! :-)

Title : They’re Out There!
Poet : Edward Davies

The idea that the universe
Would make the odd decision
To limit intelligent life
Is oft met with derision

That mankind is..."


Edward, This is clever, but you get my vote because you called God "her".


message 14: by Edward (new)

Edward Davies | 1727 comments Connie wrote: "Edward wrote: "Angel beat me again! :-)

Title : They’re Out There!
Poet : Edward Davies

The idea that the universe
Would make the odd decision
To limit intelligent life
Is oft met with derision

..."


Well, beneath HIM doesn't rhyme with ether! :-D


message 15: by Ajay (new)

Ajay (ajay_n) | 1135 comments Polls are up, Pirates! Please cast your votes to secure a ticket to the Pirates' Carnival: Skull Island :)

Link for Short-stories: https://www.goodreads.com/poll/show/1...

Link for Poetry: https://www.goodreads.com/poll/show/1...


message 16: by Connie (new)

Connie D. | 656 comments Fidel wrote: ""A Different World"

We owe it to our children
who are our future
to build a better future for them
Life is precious
Before we give them this pearl
Ask yourself;
Do I want my child to live in this ..."


Fidel,

This is so powerful. I love the line "and explain why we go to war over God instead of praising him" says so much. Thank you for sharing your thoughts.


message 17: by Neal (new)

Neal Syrette | 80 comments Edward wrote: "Well, beneath HIM doesn't rhyme with ether! :-D You know I had something for this... but I lost it...

Guy Duperreault wrote: "Two Rings and the Pi of Marriage
by Guy Duperreault (feedback and comments welcomed)

It had been some years since she had put the ring on his finger,
and he hers on hers.
He fingered it, plain gold.
Some many years ago they had agreed it symbolized,
perfectly,
their oneness into infinity. Each ring an infinity?
But isn’t there only one if there is an infinity at all, two rings as one?
He continued to spin his ring on his finger and wonder.
His palms were beginning to sweat with the problem of pi,
that pi’s irrationality arises from a
relationship
between the two main parts of a circle...."


Interesting poem Guy, (Seems to be a common problem these days in marriage; men who only think of their women as nothing more than a 'piece of pi')


message 18: by Guy (new)

Guy (egajd) | 11091 comments Guy Duperreault wrote: "Two Rings and the Pi of Marriage
by Guy Duperr..."


LOL! Nice pun.


message 19: by Robert (new)

Robert Hobkirk So where's the results for the contest?


message 20: by Arun (new)

Arun Iyer (aruniyer) | 369 comments Robert wrote: "So where's the results for the contest?"

Check the polls.


message 21: by Robert (new)

Robert Hobkirk Arun wrote: "Robert wrote: "So where's the results for the contest?"

Check the polls."

U got a link to the polls?


message 22: by Arun (new)

Arun Iyer (aruniyer) | 369 comments Robert wrote: "U got a link to the polls?"

The link to poll is accessible from the main page of the group:
https://www.goodreads.com/group/show/...

The link to poll:
https://www.goodreads.com/poll/list/1...


message 23: by Robert (new)

Robert Hobkirk Arun wrote: "Robert wrote: "U got a link to the polls?"

The link to poll is accessible from the main page of the group:
https://www.goodreads.com/group/show/...

The ..."


Arun,
Thanks. Looks like 4 voted for themselves, and 3 others voted for the winner. *?*


message 24: by Arun (last edited Aug 26, 2015 11:21AM) (new)

Arun Iyer (aruniyer) | 369 comments Robert wrote: "Arun,
Thanks. Looks like 4 voted for themselves, and 3 others voted for the winner. *?* "


As per voting rules [1], members must not vote for themselves. Personally, this rule makes sense to me, because more than the votes, I would like to know how well my poems are perceived compared to others who wrote on the same topic. If everyone votes for themselves, the polls would end up in stalemate more often than not, making them useless.

That aside, you can click on the poll votes to see who voted for whom. Members follow the voting rules pretty well in this group, so I doubt what you are suggesting is the case.

[1] https://www.goodreads.com/topic/show/...


message 25: by Robert (new)

Robert Hobkirk a lot of rules. I'm not into the nerd life with it's layers of complications. Bye.


message 26: by Guy (last edited Aug 26, 2015 09:21PM) (new)

Guy (egajd) | 11091 comments Arun wrote: "Robert wrote: "Arun,
Thanks. Looks like 4 voted for themselves, and 3 others voted for the winner. *?* "

As per voting rules [1], members must not vote for themselves. Personally, this rule makes ..."


Arun, my compliments to you for such a polite way of addressing Robert's misrepresentation of our members and the rules. And, as you inferred, no one voted for him or herself — except Robert. Which I find psychologically fascinating.


message 27: by Guy (last edited Aug 26, 2015 09:51PM) (new)

Guy (egajd) | 11091 comments Alienation by Angel
The last line made this poem! It brought a huge smile to my face.

They’re Out There! by Edward Davies
The assumption that the reader will easily accept as a given the existence of God but not of aliens makes me laugh. The human animal is an amusing creature.

Nothing Changes by Alex Morritt
This is a well rhymed and very readable comment on the inherent ambivalence of being alive on planet Earth.

Survivors Of Different Worlds.... by Julie
This made me smile with the exaggerated contrasts and slight irony this evoked.

Late by Robert
[No comment, as he claimed to have left the group.]

A Different World by Fidel
A well emoted and logical appeal to peace.

You Never Know by Billie Jo
Ah, the problem of (mis)communication. Yes. well put. You didn’t ask for a critique, so stop reading if you don’t want one. Billie Jo, your changes of tense didn’t quite work for me. In the ‘Boy’ section, you might want to consider leaving it in past tense until the dance. And in the girl section, you move back and forth, and throw in pluperfect as well. Again, stay in past tense until the dance and I think the poem would be a bit stronger. (Also, might be a typo, but you used ‘due’ when you meant ‘do’.)

Doll Face by Abigail
Gave me a quite strong emotional impact. It ends with such a well expressed false-hope.

Untitled by Arun
This resonated with me and my youth of wanting to not just wait, but never finding the courage to step out from under the clouds. Nicely done.


message 28: by Arun (new)

Arun Iyer (aruniyer) | 369 comments Guy wrote: "Arun, my compliments to you for such a polite way of addressing Robert's misrepresentation of our members and the rules. And, as you inferred, no one voted for him or herself — except Robert. Which I find psychologically fascinating."

Thanks for the comment. I was wondering if I was overstepping my bounds there and being a little too brusque.

Guy wrote: "Untitled by Arun
This resonated with me and my youth of wanting to not just wait, but never finding the courage to step out from under the clouds. Nicely done. "


Thank you! It feels good to know that I was able to express that feeling appropriately :-)


message 29: by [deleted user] (new)

Thank you, Arun :) Don't worry, you weren't overstepping.


message 30: by Arun (new)

Arun Iyer (aruniyer) | 369 comments Leslie wrote: "Thank you, Arun :) Don't worry, you weren't overstepping."

Glad to know and the support is much appreciated :-)


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