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Randi's storyawc: 515
SHOCK: A GAME IN TWO PARTS
WARNING: THIS IS REALLY BAD
"Shock," said Johnston.
"Absorbers," replied Ginger.
"Shock," said Gwen.
"Waves," replied Brayden.
Then the timer rang before the last foursome had a chance to play. The timer was not working right, so everyone that went before made things a little later and a little later, and a little later still.
Ms. Bonkey always wanted to do right by her students. She didn't feel that way this time, though. The How Many Words Game, A Ms. Bonkey creation, was playful, fun, and informative all mixed in with this game. All of the students she has had since she started the game have loved the word banter and the knowledge of their different meanings.
Sometimes, the word gets tiresome when they can only use that one word over and over again for an hour. For example, how easy is it to find a lot of detailed words that make you feel better about yourselves over a whole week's time. You get some of the words done on the first day, and you get the rest done in the second day. What is there then to occupy your time with words, when you have used them all up in the first one and a half days? Ms. Bonkey will have to play around with an in-between word game to take the sting out of the boredom this in-between time of the week had.
Ms. Bonkey will think of an interim game if she must spend all night working on it. Sure enough, she came up with a different version of the same idea. She couldn't wait to bring it to the table and try it out on the class.
The students sat at their assigned seats, as they do every school day. They weren't very excited coming in today. The How Many Words Game had run its course for the word "shock". This second game, however, comes straight out of the first game.
When class was ready to resume, Ms. Bonkey told of her plan to beef her game up for those who are sick of the same word all week long. She thought of a more fun, innumerable answers, and show who has a quick mind, and who does not.
She took the word "shock" up on the board. After saying "Shock", another says "Sally's hat's over Cindy's knuckles."
The class stared at her and asked her to repeat herself. They were way out in left field as to understanding what is going on. They asked Ms. Bonkey to use a different way of explaining this new game. It was not going to be easy.
"I have an idea," announced Ms. Bonkey. "Everyone take a sheet of paper and put the word 'S H O C K' on the top of the page. Now watch carefully."
The teacher retorted, "'Sally's hat's over Cindy's knuckles'. Now pay close attention to the words, what they start with, where they are placed against other words, etc."
One by one, the students showed an awakening on their faces that showed they now understood. Once they figured out what was going on, boy, did they have fun.
They played that game till past the school came to a close. They came up with some pretty corny ones, some melancholy, but the best one of all was, "Silly Hermione's on christening knights."
The week had been saved. I suppose that there will be a time that the second game will be old hat too. Well, Ms. Bonkey is more than ripe to find a third game also. There is no doubt in my mind that she could and would make a new brilliant classroom game to make each day a fun day.
i'm not going to be the only entry, am I? Come on guys. If no one else participates, my disgustingly bad story wins. I don't want to have that happen. Please just one of you.
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Randi gets first and last place! lol! I'll post comments soon!
*pats Paige on back* It's okay, It happens.
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Randi:
Word Count: Within limit
Spelling/Grammatical Errors: 5
Fitting To Theme (1-5): 3
Captivating Level (1-5): 4
Fluidity (1-5): 5
Sentence Structure (on a scale of 1-5): 5
Overall Notes: A very inventive way to use this week's theme. I really liked the way you wrote it! It was a very different style of writing and very fun to read. The writing style went very well with the story. I was having glimpses of the teacher in The War (a movie) in a setting like Edward Scissorhands. =) It was more about the classroom, game, and Ms. Bonkey, than shock itself, but otherwise there were very few errors.
End: 7/7/09
Theme: Shock :)
Minimum: 500
Maximum: 1500
Judge: Elaine
Have fun, everyone! :D