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Apr 13, 2014 01:58PM

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Catherine: So sorry, but no. :( You should probably include where she plans to transfer to. You should also describe her appearance. Pretend that we can't see the picture, and describe her that way. :) Just one more thing: If she lives in Amity, why would people bully her? Most Amity folk don't really like conflict.
Name: Eleanor Day
Gender: Female
Appearance: Eleanor has reddish-blonde hair that is medium length and is fairly tall with freckles. Her eyes are a turquoise green color. She's fairly lean and has a soft, pleasant voice.
Personality: Eleanor is a quiet, sweet girl who loves nature. She's an "old soul" and acts more mature than she is, but has been known to let loose once in a while. She blushes at the littlest thing and can barely talk to guys without stuttering.
History: Her father was born an Amity and her mother was a Dauntless transfer. Because of this, she has been known to have a wild side, but her father's Amity usually balances it out. Growing up, she's had a few friends who have recently all transferred factions.
Current Faction: Amity
Thoughts on leaving faction or staying and why: (before the aptitude test) Eleanor loves Amity and wants to stay. She can't imagine a life without the sweet smell of fresh soil and the fresh breeze.
Divergent: (yes or no or slightly {meaning one result on the aptitude test}) Slightly
Gender: Female
Appearance: Eleanor has reddish-blonde hair that is medium length and is fairly tall with freckles. Her eyes are a turquoise green color. She's fairly lean and has a soft, pleasant voice.
Personality: Eleanor is a quiet, sweet girl who loves nature. She's an "old soul" and acts more mature than she is, but has been known to let loose once in a while. She blushes at the littlest thing and can barely talk to guys without stuttering.
History: Her father was born an Amity and her mother was a Dauntless transfer. Because of this, she has been known to have a wild side, but her father's Amity usually balances it out. Growing up, she's had a few friends who have recently all transferred factions.
Current Faction: Amity
Thoughts on leaving faction or staying and why: (before the aptitude test) Eleanor loves Amity and wants to stay. She can't imagine a life without the sweet smell of fresh soil and the fresh breeze.
Divergent: (yes or no or slightly {meaning one result on the aptitude test}) Slightly

Gender: Female
Appearance: Long, black raven hair that falls to her shoulders, icy blue eyes that give her a piercing gaze like an owl. A lean, thin, short build, she is surprisingly flexible and agile for her age. Low stamina, and is a good climber.
Personality: Cunning, strong, extremely mature and a good strategist. Struggles with comprehending emotions, but is gifted in working out problems, as she has good logic and is very perceptive. Also can connect with animals very well.
History: All throughout her life, she never felt like she fit in with the Erudite, with all those tests (the pressure was getting to her), and just wasn't calm, even when wearing blue, the so called colour of tranquility. She'd rather go and scale walls or throw cards. However, her parents (in which mom was an Erudite-born divergent and dad a dauntless transfer) realised her potential, and encouraged her to go on. Because she liked climbing, the others said that she should have been in Dauntless or abnegation. She has a few other more daring friends, who like to sabotage stuff around the Erudite faction. Surprisingly, they have never been caught.
Current Faction: Erudite.
Thoughts on leaving faction or staying and why: (before the aptitude test)
Leaving. She doesn't want so many tests and the pressure is getting to her. Also, she is divergent, meaning that they'll probably kill her if they found out. Definetly not Candor, as she is a good liar. And Abnegation didn't seem a good choice either, as she had a purple watch that a good friend gave to her.
Divergent: (yes or no or slightly {meaning one result on the aptitude test}) Yes. (I took an apititude test)

Gender: Female
Appearance:

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Personality:
Noelle's choice of dauntless was exactly what she had wanted her entire life. She never truly fit in with the Amity's gentle and caring ways. In the Amity orchards, she had been caught dangerously swinging from branch to branch, high in the trees multiple times. She would sneak out with her older friends at night and drive at high speeds in the trucks while standing in the truck bed, the thrill of almost falling to her dead making her feel right at home. She isn't much for violence, more of the adrenaline rush that one can feel from jumping off a train or jumping into unknown darkness. She is more of the silent type, not loud-mouthed like the candor, but not silent like the abnegation. Noelle knew the value and importance that every word had, and wished to keep that trait through her faction transfer.
History:
Noelle and her three brothers grew up in Amity with her mother and father. It was a simple life they lead; They picked food in the fields by day, laughing and carefree all the time. Kindness was the main virtue she was told to live up to, which was quite difficult for her to fulfill. Out of her entire class of kids, she was given the peace serum to calm her down whenever she began to get angry, or even a couple of times attack another peer.
It was no surprise on the choosing day that Noelle was leaving her Family. All three of her brothers had chosen to stay at home, and Noelle wanted more out of her life then just kindness and fruit. There was a large piece of her life missing, and the one thing that could fill that gap was Dauntless. From what she had seen, they lived a similar carefree life as the Amity, but in addition they had the thrills and excitements that Amity lacked.
So on Choosing day, Noelle's blood dripped into the coals and a smile spread to her cheeks. Finally, she could be her true self.
Current Faction: Dauntless Initiation
Thoughts on leaving faction: Noelle left Amity to join the Dauntless, ready and excited to finally feel free to do whatever she liked without having to be kind for once in her life. She wanted the thrills and excitements that came attached to Dauntless, but wished to keep her old factions faiths somewhat alive inside her.
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Name: Lucy-Ann Barker
Gender: Female
Appearance: Dark brown hair, almost black, with bangs across her forehead straight across her face. Dark olive skin with dark hazel eyes which is more on the brownish side but with a tint of green. Her eyes sparkle like she's trying to make you smile. Her hair is long, but wears them in loose pigtails on the side. (Hair is wavy.) Has a kind of sharp nose, but it's more rounded. Kind of determined expression on her face, but that came from years of secret hunting (with a hunting gun but only on targets- couldn't bear to hurt an animal) and archery.
Personality: She is a brave girl, but not the outgoing kind. Lucy-Ann is kind of shy, and was always smart in environmental, mathematical, historical, tactical and strategic subjects. She loves to read, and secretly practices archery as I mentioned above. Lucy-Ann is brave in a way where she will try to protect the people she loves and cares for, maybe even the people she doesn't. She tries to help other people on school assignments, even if she doesn't understand them herself, and is an honorable person (keeps her promises and holds herself accountable.)
History: She thinks her family is kind and nice and she loves them and they love her. She loves all her siblings equally and her say that she can make her own decisions- to her content- and she can do archery if she wants to, be she doesn't do it openly because she didn't want any of the popular group from Dauntless to single her out as a "future Dauntless." She supports her siblings and has special bonds.
Current Faction: Abnegation
Thoughts on leaving faction or staying and why: Staying. Loves her parents, siblings, faction.
Divergent: A sliver. Sort of inclined a bit towards Dauntless because she does some brave things like stick up for others and stuff like that.
Gender: Female
Appearance: Dark brown hair, almost black, with bangs across her forehead straight across her face. Dark olive skin with dark hazel eyes which is more on the brownish side but with a tint of green. Her eyes sparkle like she's trying to make you smile. Her hair is long, but wears them in loose pigtails on the side. (Hair is wavy.) Has a kind of sharp nose, but it's more rounded. Kind of determined expression on her face, but that came from years of secret hunting (with a hunting gun but only on targets- couldn't bear to hurt an animal) and archery.
Personality: She is a brave girl, but not the outgoing kind. Lucy-Ann is kind of shy, and was always smart in environmental, mathematical, historical, tactical and strategic subjects. She loves to read, and secretly practices archery as I mentioned above. Lucy-Ann is brave in a way where she will try to protect the people she loves and cares for, maybe even the people she doesn't. She tries to help other people on school assignments, even if she doesn't understand them herself, and is an honorable person (keeps her promises and holds herself accountable.)
History: She thinks her family is kind and nice and she loves them and they love her. She loves all her siblings equally and her say that she can make her own decisions- to her content- and she can do archery if she wants to, be she doesn't do it openly because she didn't want any of the popular group from Dauntless to single her out as a "future Dauntless." She supports her siblings and has special bonds.
Current Faction: Abnegation
Thoughts on leaving faction or staying and why: Staying. Loves her parents, siblings, faction.
Divergent: A sliver. Sort of inclined a bit towards Dauntless because she does some brave things like stick up for others and stuff like that.
((I'm posting this spent 30 minutes writing it))
Azure: there is a waiting list for Dauntless and the aptitude test you took may not give the same results as the one here and the one here is based on how your character thinks, acts and feels. Other than that Approved
Flowers: There is a waiting list for Dauntless. Everything about this character is speaking about the future as if it's the past which it isn't. Current faction should be the faction she is leaving so it would be Amity. Some of the history sounds like it belongs in the choosing ceremony. please try to rewrite your character as if she hasn't gone to the choosing ceremony yet.
Alisiia: Listen to Chaos
Isabella: Could you go to the first post and use the template to organize your character please
Sophia: Nobody wants to know her family's history they want to know about Lucy-Ann's history try taking the explanation of her expression and move it to history and you can say that she knows archery and that she has the support of her family but don't make it from her family's view point make it from hers.
Azure: there is a waiting list for Dauntless and the aptitude test you took may not give the same results as the one here and the one here is based on how your character thinks, acts and feels. Other than that Approved
Flowers: There is a waiting list for Dauntless. Everything about this character is speaking about the future as if it's the past which it isn't. Current faction should be the faction she is leaving so it would be Amity. Some of the history sounds like it belongs in the choosing ceremony. please try to rewrite your character as if she hasn't gone to the choosing ceremony yet.
Alisiia: Listen to Chaos
Isabella: Could you go to the first post and use the template to organize your character please
Sophia: Nobody wants to know her family's history they want to know about Lucy-Ann's history try taking the explanation of her expression and move it to history and you can say that she knows archery and that she has the support of her family but don't make it from her family's view point make it from hers.
Katiana: Okay... I will fix! :)
Okay... I fixed! Am I approved? :)
Name: Kristen Moore
Gender: Female
Appearance: Kristen has long brown hair that always get tangled. She is tall, but not too tall, has long feet and teeth that are a little big. Her eyes are hazel greenish color. Generally speaking, Kristen has got some limitations, but over all she is a pretty girl with a great body shape.
Personality: She is very quiet and intelligent girl. Her parents say that she will probably suit well with Erudite just like her older sister because she reads a lot and is considered the "smart one" in her class. Kristen has patience and is able to wait. She is very enthusiastic and gets excited very fast. Kristen is not able to lie or be unfaithful with her family and friends.
History: Kristen has lived her whole life with no lies allowed what so ever. She has been raised by her mother and older sister Jill, who has joined Erudite two years ago. Her father has died of cancer five months after Kristen was born. Both of her parents come from Abnegation so Kristen has been learning about that faction and even considering it as her choice at the Choosing Ceremony.
Current Faction: Candor
Thoughts on leaving faction or staying and why: Kristen has three ways to go. Abnegation, (since she really wants to explore that faction), Erudite)her sister joined) and the result of the aptitude test.
Divergent: Yes
Gender: Female
Appearance: Kristen has long brown hair that always get tangled. She is tall, but not too tall, has long feet and teeth that are a little big. Her eyes are hazel greenish color. Generally speaking, Kristen has got some limitations, but over all she is a pretty girl with a great body shape.
Personality: She is very quiet and intelligent girl. Her parents say that she will probably suit well with Erudite just like her older sister because she reads a lot and is considered the "smart one" in her class. Kristen has patience and is able to wait. She is very enthusiastic and gets excited very fast. Kristen is not able to lie or be unfaithful with her family and friends.
History: Kristen has lived her whole life with no lies allowed what so ever. She has been raised by her mother and older sister Jill, who has joined Erudite two years ago. Her father has died of cancer five months after Kristen was born. Both of her parents come from Abnegation so Kristen has been learning about that faction and even considering it as her choice at the Choosing Ceremony.
Current Faction: Candor
Thoughts on leaving faction or staying and why: Kristen has three ways to go. Abnegation, (since she really wants to explore that faction), Erudite)her sister joined) and the result of the aptitude test.
Divergent: Yes

Gender: Female
Appearance: Viola has long light brown hair and has blue eyes, she has a fair complexion and is considered very beautiful, she has long eyelashes, she is thin and she is tall.
Personality: Viola was always indifferent towards the people around her, she remained rather silent but was always caring for others, she would always think of being more than what she was at the moment.
History: her history is just unfair, she was born with good looks so her parents made everything possible to make her look ugly so that the Abnegation citizens don't become jealous, she never could go out as a kid and she was never allowed to look at her reflection.
Current faction: Abnegation
Thoughts of Leaving Faction or Staying and why: She never liked Abnegation and even if she liked it her parents still hated her for being a child that stands out, she wants to be smart, she wants to be brave so Erudite and Dauntless would be good, of course she doesn't mind being Candor or Amity she just wants to stop being Abnegation.
Divergent: She doesn't know yet.
Sophia wrote: "Okay... I fixed! Am I approved? :)"
the history still sounds weird read through it after not looking at it for a few hours and while you read imagine that you know nothing about the character
the history still sounds weird read through it after not looking at it for a few hours and while you read imagine that you know nothing about the character
Brenda: First the Abnegation wouldn't care they wouldn't bother with making her look ugly because that would still be a form of vanity since they would be thinking about the way she looked which they would never do.
Need more history and personality. I have the same kind of problem with the thoughts on leaving it says because she stands out, if it was like she was a problem child that didn't help others and rebelled constantly they could hate her secretly but it's because of her looks which they just wouldn't care about more than hygiene, so I don't see that as a reason they would hate her.
Need more history and personality. I have the same kind of problem with the thoughts on leaving it says because she stands out, if it was like she was a problem child that didn't help others and rebelled constantly they could hate her secretly but it's because of her looks which they just wouldn't care about more than hygiene, so I don't see that as a reason they would hate her.

Name: Viola Lauper
Gender: Female
Appearance: Viola is a thin girl, 5'6 tall, with light brown hair and light blue eyes, she has a hourglass body shape and a pointed jawline, she has freckles and a tiny nose
Personality: She is rather shy in the outside, but in the inside she wants to be the funny one, she is bad at making friends but the ones she makes are very fond to her. She likes to read and draw but sucks at painting and singing. She isn't a genius but has fair grades and she falls in love way to easily, that's the only thing she isn't shy about since she confesses her love openly but she hasn't had a boyfriend.
History: Viola comes from a family that includes her little brother Kenzie and her parents, Jasper and Violet, she is adopted just as her brother and she knows that her mother was factionless so Violet and Jasper took her as an act of kindness. Since she was so shy she never made a lot of friends but sure she tried to make lots of boyfriends, due to that people considered her a little weird but she never cared since she had Sam and Aberdeen by her side and they consider Viola rather funny.

Sorry for the last character I didn't mean to make Abnegation look bad, I'm sorry to make a cocky character, I'll make a better effort in this new version.
Name: Viola Lauper
Gender: Female
Appearance: Viola is a thin girl, 5'6 tall, with light brown hair and light blue eyes, she has a hourglass body shape and a pointed jawline, she has freckles and a tiny nose
Personality: She is rather shy in the outside, but in the inside she wants to be the funny one, she is bad at making friends but the ones she makes are very fond to her. She likes to read and draw but sucks at painting and singing. She isn't a genius but has fair grades and she falls in love way to easily, that's the only thing she isn't shy about since she confesses her love openly but she hasn't had a boyfriend.
History: Viola comes from a family that includes her little brother Kenzie and her parents, Jasper and Violet, she is adopted just as her brother and she knows that her mother was factionless so Violet and Jasper took her as an act of kindness. Since she was so shy she never made a lot of friends but sure she tried to make lots of boyfriends, due to that people considered her a little weird but she never cared since she had Sam and Aberdeen by her side and they consider Viola rather funny.
Current faction: Amity
Thoughts of Leaving Faction or Staying and why: Viola loves Amity, she's ver fond of that but she wants to start in a new faction to start fresh and find new love, all but Abnegation since she wants to be cuddling with her lover all the time.
Divergent: She doesn't know

Gender: Female
Appearance: Viola is a thin girl, 5'6 tall, with light brown hair and light blue eyes, she has a hourglass body shape and a pointed jawline, she has freckles and a tiny nose
Personality: She is rather shy in the outside, but in the inside she wants to be the funny one, she is bad at making friends but the ones she makes are very fond to her. She likes to read and draw but sucks at painting and singing. She isn't a genius but has fair grades and she falls in love way to easily, that's the only thing she isn't shy about since she confesses her love openly but she hasn't had a boyfriend.
History: Viola comes from a family that includes her little brother Kenzie and her parents, Jasper and Violet, she is adopted just as her brother and she knows that her mother was factionless so Violet and Jasper took her as an act of kindness. Since she was so shy she never made a lot of friends but sure she tried to make lots of boyfriends, due to that people considered her a little weird but she never cared since she had Sam and Aberdeen, friends that Viola has since kindergarden and they consider Viola rather funny.
Current faction: Amity
Are you on the app? If so then you can't edit I know it sucks. You can edit if you are on the actual website though.
It's good but you need to make sure that you copy her thoughts on leaving and if she is divergent or not into the character because they got left off on the last one you posted.

Gender: Male
Appearance:

Personality: Gray is a very happy, chill person. He loves nature and joking with his friends. He is very flirty and hasn't ever really been in love with one specific person.
History: His parents always wished he would be more brave and do more exciting things but he just wants to do stuff like gardening and singing. They would beat him senseless, daring him to jump off high things and hang over the chasm but he was never really into that kind of stuff. He was always a flirt even though Dauntless girls really aren't his type.
Current Faction: Dauntless
Thoughts on leaving faction or staying and why: He would rather die than stay in his faction.
Divergent: No

Gender: female
Appearance: thick wavy brown hair, incredibly blue eyes, tan complexion, freckles, small build, small nose, dimples, and a skinny face
Personality: nice with a short fuse, moody but very funny, loves to laugh and have fun, is very responsible but has an attitude, is a hopeless romantic
Current faction: Candor
History: she lives with her parents, brother Karson May and sisters Veronica and Valerie May. Her neighbor is her best friend Violet ( she already made a character!! Her name is Molly ) she lives in a small house near the Merciless mart
Thoughts on leaving faction: she feels like she doesn't fit into Candor. She would much rather be jumping off building and riding on trains with the Dauntless.
Divergent: slightly
Alright. In that case, you need to work on the History, please. Most of what you said was about her family or house. How was her childhood? Was she good in school? How was her social life? Did she fit in with her faction? How was she treated by her family? Just let me know when it's edited, and I'll check her over again. Good luck!

Alright, thanks! Other than that, she looks great. I don't know whether or not I can approve her, because of the waiting list, but if you message katiana, I'm sure she'll put your charrie on the list. If you please, it would be very helpful if you edit the new history into the character post. If you're on mobile, just do it when you can. Don't forget to message Katiana. My best idea is to send her your character post (with the new history) by copying and pasting, then adding that I approved you and ask to be added to the waiting list.