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Week 195 (December 30-January 5). Poems. Topic: Notebook Scribbles.
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You're welcome! I hope it's not suggestive, but then with M, I'm not sure :D
It is and I hope I would be able to write a story :D
She Plays Kiss ChaseyIt started as a scribble
in my old Spirax
and ended
as an apology,
of sorts.
I wish I'd been more -
held your hand
when it mattered
and even
when it didn't.
Ink lasts longer
than schoolyard
friendships. Notes
we wrote, revisited
with hope.
Behind the library,
your lips
once tasted of sunshine
and blackberries -
a spark that lingers.
*All on This Paper*Billie Jo Moore
I express my feelings when I write.
During the day or during the night.
I get a paper and start scribbling
Even when it just sounds like gibbering.
And in the morning when I'm fully awake
I get a pen and fix the mistakes.
Who's to say whom writes better
When all it is, is a bunch of letters.
They look the same to me,
In the depth of reality.
Dive down deep into my core
And my inner feelings you will explore.
On this paper are all my thoughts.
All of them express a lot.
My feelings I keep exploiting
So when it gets annoying
You say "Enough. No more words."
But my dear friend it is so much more.
On this paper I express things.
Deep in my heart this thing sings.
I'm true to my words down to my core
And honey dearest, listen for I have more.
To say "Listen" won't get your attention.
So just feel these words as I mention them
This thing in my heart buried deep,
Six feet under is where I keep
My most precious dreams
Where I can escape reality.
So stay close and explore with me
Because even when you think I fell,
I remember my old fairy-tale.
In there I am free,
Never judged, never teased.
"It is just make-believe, you see?"
But it's so much more to me.
This happiness I have with me.
This paper, my everlasting eternity.
These words won't fade, and I believe neither will you.
So can you hold on these words and keep them true?
Notebook ScribblesNotebook was a tiny world,
Where lived only one stick boy,
And one stick girl.
Her name was doodles,
And he was her Scribbles,
The only one, that could give him the giggles.
Their advetures lept,
From page to page,
As they expreienced every great age.
From the discovery of fire,
To that of the laser,
Only ending when they met, The Evil Eraser.
The entries are amazing this week (as usual). But every week, I'm looking forward to Mandy's poems more and more. They always make me smile. :)
Oh, thank you Angie, that's so nice of you.
You're very welcome. It's actually becoming a habit for me to skim this thread to see if you've posted something yet before I read the other entries.
@Ryan- that was really good! Loved it. Really sweet and you can visualize what's happened. Awesome stuff. :))
I don't really know what to make of it. My writing confused even me.Stories
Boring lectures cause her mind to wander.
Her pencil creates realities in the margin,
Writing stories of distant planets
Where the hero defeats the villain.
Instead of studying for her test, she records
Histories of worlds that don’t exist.
Fictional tragedies of her own creation break her heart.
People don’t understand how characters can be missed.
Questions, answers, and equations
Are the threads of reality,
Intertwined with figments of her imagination.
There's a world hidden between
Those college-ruled lines.
Sometimes written in elegant prose,
Or strung on corny rhymes.
Hey, Mandy! What an imaginative poem, I was smiling from the first line. Your second stanza is just brilliant. I love it!
Angie! I really like your poem, I didn't find it confusing at all. You've got some good images in there and your choice of words works well.Your first two stanzas are wonderful. Really good. I think you should have a play with the final one some more. For me, it seemed like an explanation of the first two stanzas when such an explanation isn't necessary. I like where the first two were heading and the third didn't really develop that any further.
I only say this because I think you have a great idea and a strong poem that could be finished into something really magical. Well done :)
Thank you :) I'll see what I can do with the third stanza.
Mandy wrote: "Notebook ScribblesNotebook was a tiny world,
Where lived only one stick boy,
And one stick girl.
Her name was doodles,
And he was her Scribbles,
The only one, that could give him the giggles.
T..."
It's adorable Mandy!
First time I'm posting something. It's corny, I know but it reminds of my middle school days.Be gentle.
Alright here goes...
*One Day
I leaned over and whispered to my friend,
do you think he really likes me or is he
just playing pretend?
She looked up at me and rolled her eyes
and said, why can't you get this guy out
of your head?
I looked down at my notebook where I
scribbled his name and told my friend
because - I know we will be married
one day.
I love this poem. It's just so nostalgic cute. My only suggestion is that you might want to break the lines up differently so that they end with more casual pauses.
Nice addition, Angie. I really like what you've come up with :)
Ryan, I love your poem, it reminds me of highschool romances.Billie Jo, Al was right. You did an amazing job with all that rhyming.
Angie, I love the rewrite on the third stanza.
Sarah, you did a great job. I remember thinking I was going to spend the rest of my life with everyone of my middle school crushes.
Thanks you Ryan, Sarah, and Al. I'm glad you liked my poem, this was a really fun prompt.
Ryan, last two stanzas are perfect. Fantastic. Glad that was the first poem I read in the new year.Mandy, that was such a creative poem. I liked it a lot.
Thanks for the feedback. Everyone's poems are amazing. ^_^
Thank you everyone for the feedback. I was a little nervous putting it out there. You are all such creative individuals. Happy New Year!
Oh, but I liked Custard's Last Stand!Just kidding, Al, I love it! Nice and tight, you've painted a great scene.
Thanks for the feedback, too :)
Daniel! Thanks, mate I'm flattered. Welcome back and a Happy New Year to you.
Thank you, Mandy - that is exactly what I was trying to achieve.
Sarah, well done! The first time you post a poem for others to read can take a fair bit of courage. What a great poem to start with.I've got to tell you, I really love 'One Day'. I think you have done such a wonderful job of capturing the whole 'butterflies-in-the-tummy' feeling that goes with High School romance. You took me back to a happy time as I was reading.
You said it was a bit corny, but I have to disagree. The way I read it, your final line adds a whole extra dimension. 'I know we will be married one day' can be read as a schoolgirl's conviction that this love will last forever, but it can also be read as something a bit deeper if you look at it from the viewpoint that she actually did marry her high school sweetheart as predicted.
Anyway, great job! I love the memories you invoked.
Hi, Billie Jo! Wow, I really admire your narrator's strength and conviction. The overwhelming need to write is portrayed well and I like the feeling of courage and belief in the narrator's own ability. You have a couple of lines in there that, to me, are just magic - 'so stay close and explore with me' and 'can you hold on these words and keep them true'. These both spoke volumes to me as I read.
Hiya, Al! Yeah, you had me chuckling away. I guess my sense of humor is just as bad as yours! :D
It's nice to be in a group with a sense of humor as off beat as mine. :)
Awww thanks guys! Your comments mean a lot! :)
Ryan wrote: "Sarah, well done! The first time you post a poem for others to read can take a fair bit of courage. What a great poem to start with.I've got to tell you, I really love 'One Day'. I think you ha..."
Thanks so much Ryan. You really gave my confident a boost.
Hi everyone. First post here. First poem.From your mouth to my ears, there is no sound
I take my notebook and scribble something down
Here is my message, can’t you see
I’m not ignoring you, please don’t be mean to me
I’m not lost, stupid, or lazy
I’m just different, not crazy
Results for Week 195 - Notebook Scribbles:1st place: Mandy / Ryan - congratulations, Mandy!
2nd place: Billie Jo / Angie
3rd place: Al / Sarah / Some
Thank you for submitting your poems and voting.
Please post directly into the topic and not a link. Please don’t use a poem previously used in this group.
Your poem can be any length.
This week’s topic is: Notebook Scribbles
*Thanks to Edward for the suggestion*
The rules are pretty loose. You can write a poem about anything that has to do with the topic. I do not care, but the poem you post must relate to the topic somehow.
Have fun!