Beta reader first chapter

[Hayley]

I need some help with my novel, I have competed it and a friend read it, and she told me that my characters voice was missing and to standards, also lacking emotion. I have made amendments to improve this, and would really like other peoples feedback before a begin the journey of updating the entire book.

Chapter 1 is 1,500 words, it is a YA novel,

But about the novel.

JADA’S BLOOD deals with the very real crisis of the ongoing Syrian Civil War through the eyes of young children as they try to stay strong despite the overwhelming presence of death. The novel provides a number of perspectives from young characters as they deal with the deaths of their families, the destruction of their villages and their ongoing need to survive.

thank you

[Michala]

I would read the first chapter if you've not found someone yet. You can email me at michalatyann@gmail.com

[Hayley]

Hi Michala, thank you I have just sent you the document.

[Hayley]

Hi Dave thank you sending chapter over to you now