Three chapters of my novel posted for comments and suggestions

[Gabriel]

Hi everyone, I'm working on a novel that is a dystopian vision of our world, increasingly polluted and run almost like a police state, in the not too distant future. The working title is "With My Last Breath." I've decided to post the first three chapters here for whoever would like to read them and perhaps also make constructive comments or suggestions. You can read the chapters at: https://www.goodreads.com/story/show/...