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Taaya  (taaya) | 2 comments ( I thought, I just start a topic containing EVERYTHING I write and like to share. As I'm mostly writing in German and probably nobody here likes to read german stuff, I can only show you my english poems/lyrics. I love feedback. Not only on the content but on the language as I'm not a native speaker.)

SHE (written for english class ~ 8 years ago)

The girl in the mirror
Stares into my eyes
The blood rushing through my veins
Becomes as cold as ice

How can I tell her
What has happen inside?
Will we both ever
Fell alright?

What is she thinking
While looking at me?
Is she hiding herself
Or can she breathe free?

Is it me,
She will blame?
Girl in the mirror
Tell me, are we the same?

Does she need me
To hold her hand?
Can she make me
Understand?

Does she feel like
Breaking down?
Did she, like me,
Hit the ground?

Is it me,
She will blame?
Girl in the mirror,
Tell me, are we the same


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Taaya  (taaya) | 2 comments UNTOLD THINGS

Refr:
Just give me one last day,
one last smile,
stay with me,
let us talk a little while.
Give me one last glance
of your chocolate eyes.
Tell me all aspects of our friendship
weren´t just lies.


It seems like
today is our last day.
And you won´t give me
just a second to say
how thankful I am
for all these years.
For all the times you dried
my uncried tears.


Refr.


You became my best friend,
eventhough that wasn´t planned,
gave me strenght and hope,
and now all this will end?
If only you could
see my heart and read my mind.
So everything will be said until
we leave this time behind.


Refr.


Thank you so much,
because you saved my life
in so many different ways.
I wish you all the best,
a really wonderful life, while I
won´t forget those days.


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