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Hi Sabrina,A few questions. How is the POV handled in your story: more than one, chapter by chapter, etc? Also, is there sex in the story and if so, is it explicit, clean, erotic? Thanks.
Hi Sabrina,I'm a strong Beta reader. I not only can give hints on how to make the flow better, but do basic edits at the same time. I'm someone who is writing her own originals stories, but love helping out others at the same time.
Karen Teague
Kathy wrote: "Hi Sabrina,A few questions. How is the POV handled in your story: more than one, chapter by chapter, etc? Also, is there sex in the story and if so, is it explicit, clean, erotic? Thanks."
The chapter introduces the said character all are in third person except for Artemis she is always in first person. Unless she is in a chapter with someone else who is dominant in the chapter. So far there are no sex scenes but I may have to add them since submission requirements ask for it to be the subplot.
If interested I will need your email
Karen wrote: "Hi Sabrina,I'm a strong Beta reader. I not only can give hints on how to make the flow better, but do basic edits at the same time. I'm someone who is writing her own originals stories, but love ..."
I'm game for any hints and advice on the story only one person has read it. This is the next story I would like to pitch. If still interested I just need your email
My email address is shizukana@hotmail.com
I look forward to reading your book and see where I can help you.
Setting - Medieval times.
WORD COUNT - 52,941k however needs to be at least 100k
This is my first attempt at writing a fantasy based story.
My heroine Artemis is a strong woman with warrior instincts. Artemis is next in line to be Queen, only if her brother does not return from his crusades. Artemis wants to fight for her Kingdom, as her father did before her, but women do not go to battle, it is not their place. Determined to prove everyone wrong Artemis takes on her own adventures, in secret.
The hero is Charles, who crusaded with Artemis’s older brother Brighton. Charles and Brighton have been best friends since childhood. Charles has been in love with Artemis since the day they met.
Edmund is the other hero who has and continues to steal her heart.
Artemis meets a band of colourful characters along the way. Each chapter is labeled to introduce the character being mentioned. The story is not fully completed it is in need of many more words but I want to know honest opinions on the story itself and what it could use to better the story and lengthen it.
I would appreciate some good honest opinions on the story its self. not so much spelling or punctuation or grammar because it is still needing a good edit.
I did make some changes along the way and it does not have an ending either but that is okay I am still trying to figure out how I want to end it and add 50k more words.
you can email me or post directly in this feed or inbox me if you are interested. there is no time limit I have time to get this ready.
Thanks in advance to those who offer their advice.
Sabrina